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Originally Posted by PancakeBrah
Almost all of the lines/thought in your pieces start with I, my, me. Gets tiring.
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yeah, it's a lot. very redundant even if the subsequent content is interesting. that self-centric energy sort of loses the reader after a bit. structural variety. try playing with different "beats" and rhythms in your language. you'll find it will begin to sound a bit more musical, in an odd way. more textural.
thanks