Body I usually really like most of ur gun bar concepts but every once in a while (like here) I feel like u have multiple played ideas flipped in 1 bar... chopper/motorcycle and sway/drunk concepts have been done a lot and are pretty basic tbh, and the whole punch for a gun bar concept seems very indirect here
KS, wording wording wording.. I like ur angle and thought process here, but this line is rough af, and the victor add in in the set up is terribly played and wasn't needed
Ehhhhh... I vote for KS for a fresher take and attempt
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