Plot - Ink on the money could’ve been fire still like concept tho, profound was funny not as hard hitting but comical, countersink is meh not really feeling at all, golf tech line is drawn out & I might be missing something, ear stuck to the ground was ok statementish tho at best.
- breakdown seems like your trying to shake rust & I feel that. Just try to look over your concepts more then once before using them see what other angles are available.
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Inc- a rusty car piss ? I don’t see how this is insulting besides saying he got bad hygiene an dirty, personals aspect is cool but you fell flat on the execution in my eyes, exit stage right doesn’t land anywhere I get what you went for it just doesn’t work, I get the predictions snorefest but it doesn’t hit its boring an lackluster, closer don’t make sense to me.
Breakdown - I’m assuming your more of a topical head ? Because the bars never really hit your opponent which kind of caught me off guard.
Vote - Plot pretty easily
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