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Originally Posted by Malachi
Yo I leave this nigga black on both sides, his rhymes a waste of breath
You ain't a hip hop legend, but everyone reading your drops thinks mos deaf
Knowing what the punch is trying to get after, I feel like it could've been setup a bit better - you also were addressing him in a different sense in the setup and punch (this nigga/his in the setup and you/your in the punch). It could've been clearer or worded better, but id call this an okay attempt
Im taking it back to the basics, no ill nikas here you ass
How can you be the future of text if you cant even beat its past
A little statementish, had a good idea behind it but could've had more done with it
Speaking of B2B were you out of your damn mind
UT, I. have to tell you THAT WP didn't make any sense in your line
Okay line flip, wouldn't hit if I hadn't seen the verse. I have, but it was still kinda light
If you getting any fame your lucky dumbass fag
The only time UT was considered a star was on the US flag
I like the concept here a lot, could've been harsher but probably your best line
I knew your text isnt going in the right direction
But who thought itd be bad enough to keep namix from the tutor section
more statementish, feel like more coulda been done with the concept
Your against the prophet, to beat him you need magic
You couldn't get Prop unless we're talking bout no.17, you faggot
okay flip, it was your own alias but it still hit
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Sn00p
Utmost's Verse
http://artofbattling.com/forum/showt...cally-sleeping
I don't understand why you put that link there... I scanned the thread, found nothing rasta related
I'll weed out da weak ina sec, ur group is done, understood scrub
& it Stems from the fact, That rasta is soooo far from Good, Bud..
I see the wordplay, but I don't really have a punch directed at Malachi here
Punish this creeps eye, coz 1 mean right and its dreamtime
u'll get sent to bed, NO dessert!.. & ur mom'll get sent with a creampie
Not really feeling this, I'm guessing you are making an age joke but that could've been clearer
but if you DID get a meal, ud foam at the mouth n' HAVE to see it
Coz eviction left Mal, content.. that his new home had plenty of packing peanuts
Like the nameflip a lot, don't need a comma though - it would've been a lot nicer had it been tied in to the punch better and/or worked to hit both ways
& No doubt i'll bomb this twerp, u WISH u had a palm to burst
U finger bang cuz YOU like to pose.. I fingerbang that sex pistol of a mom of urs
It was kind of predictable from the start of the second line... okay
YOU betta get vocal, yell for help or scream the lords name n' pray
Coz to win here, Ur gonna need Hush to break silence & God to be ya saving grace
Pretty nice
Plus...with chicks Ima pro; kid you neva get the digits to boast
They greet Me with a "Sugar, Hi"....while your greeted with a ritalin dose
Could've been a lot cleaner, would've liked to see you tie in his age (since thats what this is based on) and relate sugar high to the punch a little better
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I guess I would break it down to
US flag
Pretty clean all things considered, wording could've been harsher but the concept behind it was pretty nice
Prop 17
pretty funny, well worded. I basically thought of it as a generic since it was your own name being flipped
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Saving Grace
Pretty well thought out, easily strongest line of your verse and lotb contender
Sugar hi/Mal content
The two were both almosts to me... Nice concepts that just didn't really connect, either thanks to the construction of the bar or a lack of relating to the WP to the punch
This was pretty close, but it did end up 2-1 in quotes so I edge it to Malachi. Probably would've given it to Utmost if Sugar hi or Mal content was a little cleaner, but they ended up leaving some to be desired. Nice battle guys.
V/ Malachi