[2tripple0]

Wow great showing from two new writers on ncs y'all did well here and once again it's going to be difficult to decide. when I first started reading I though well rakontor isn't going to win this but didn't realise asylum would only write a few bars. So I scratched that idea and was just unsure really cuz they both seemed to really try. And I liked the idea of asylums to have two star lovers and I enjoyed the way he tied it all together in the end..It was a dope closer the way he tied it all in together. ..as for rankotor I was unsure about how plain Jane and what she had to do with the topic..maybe I'm misunderstanding something but you did a good job with character development. .and I enjoyed the structure how your two verses engaged me as a reader...I wonder what as the author u were meaning to portray and interested...at first when I started reading it felt like you had trouble with your opener but I relate to that cuz when writing a piece I'm always like arghh where do I begin? But you did a nice job keeping me interested and I don't think either of you were particularly vague or meaningless but the verse that stood out with more entertainment to me was rakontor so for me he gets my vote...


Vote/rakantor