Not a fan of the topic at hand but, you guys did a decent job at it.
Rakontur, very solid verse. I have no big issues with it except the few times the rhyme scheme would switch. I like how you applied a bunch of boat related shit to the second verse, the whole rotors, wind, etc.. That was cool.
Asylum, I was kind of thrown off by the rhyme scheme at first. At first, it read like some poetry, I just think it's weird cuz obviously you're familiar with multi-syllable rhyming, but chose not to use it at first. I liked the verse, it was short & sweet, my favorite kind of verses. But, I felt like this wasn't enough to match Rakontur this time around. Real solid verse, look forward to seeing more from you.
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