Rak
Man your diction was onpoint throughout the whole piece.
Beautiful language man. Gotta say i like the progress of the story
And how you developed it. The pace of the tale was def a highlight man
You embodied the topic with your piece. Expressing the focal point
Very clearly. Dope stuff man foreal.
Asylum
Man i feel like you should of wrote more. This was dope bro. I liked
Your take on the topic aswell. But i feel like you suffered from haste?
Or last minute syndrome lol. Either way toward the end this felt
Rushed and incomplete for me. You should of wrote more
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