Zyg- this was masterful and thought - provoking. Imo I could see irony in this story as well. All the necessary details were there and this, although it felt long, accomplished a just amount of depth. The rhyming wasn't flashy, but in this case, if it had it would have taken away from the main idea you were going for. Very good argument. I did think the end was a little of a forced thought to center the reader on how your piece relates to the topic, but it wasn't too bad. Overall great job on your drop.
Oats- Fuck, dude. This shit was heavy. This whole drop was a full bodied manifestation of the topic zyg had only merely touched on. This zoom concept you used was well done, and your rhyming mechanics kept everything dynamic and fun to read. Your euphemisms were pretty in-your-face and a few were funny, keeping the content a little lighter. You even hit the nail directly on the head without overtly leading the reader. This shit was great.
Great job to both writers. You guys really killed it. Zyg's was expertly crafted with an insane amount of time-to-quality efficiency. Oats hit the mark in the head and went about as direct as possible with no backstory and did a great job. MVGT Oats.
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