Cool battle. Pancake's was just better though, cool concept by him and although the color square doesn't really capture (at all) the unevenness of a prison wall which in my mind would be transformed into a myriad of images, I thought the concept was executed well. Breath you still need to develop your writer's voice. I recommend reading good writers on this site like Black, Cake, Oatmeal, vulgar, topicaldood, pent up, frank, genocide and others to gain a more distinct style.
v/ pancake.
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