Defiant - Haha. A good deceit that has some clever hints looking back - the moans for instance. A plane crashes and the husband resorts to cannablism. Thats what I got. Syntactically, your wording was strange and sentence structure was weird, but I guess you were fitting it into the rhymes. Cool, keep it up.
Copy - slick rhymes and a story anybody could relate to. Funny and well written. I don't know what else to say. No great exceptional lines but the bwoser and lava heat parts stood out relatively.
V - copy. far more better grasp on writing although defiant had a pretty dope concept. copy just outclassed him here
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Originally Posted by asylum
? subtly? what the fuck is a subtly? i dont know what that is. can someone help me out?
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