razah i thought this verse was nice. although i wasnt fond of the conclusion, how the mechanics made it end on an unfinished note kinds, but i felt the emotion throughout the piece and it was technically sound. the rewind tapes line i guess is the most memorable of the verse but this type of emotional reminiscing piece doesn't require individual blockbuster lines to be effective.
timeless this was a very strong excerpt of writing. it was technically on point, you had sections of strong imagery, a couple memorable bars (the green pasture one most of all, that was nice) however i feel this verse would have been better suited to a longer approach. it needed a lot to really capture the topic, especially with how well thought out/laid out your opponent came.
two delightful reads but the more thought out and better executed topic takes the cake
+1 Razah
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