Timeless, I feel with each week you show some compelling improvements
the rhyme scheme you chose to start out with was one of the coolest...
I was really drawn in to your story but half way through you lost me.
perhaps the scheme was too much but that switch up was quite costly.
regardless it was like a touch of nice rhyme & a touch of the poetic side
the fact that you did so much with so little is what really kept it...nice...
I didnt like the second half though because the switch up was so sudden
but I like the use of settle in...nice way to build somethin out of nothin..
Complex, I thought the idea you presented was a great interpretation
the way you lay out the beginning & build up to these certain stages...
its a perfect statement. I enjoyed the flow of your piece for the most part
but you seemed rushed to put this down before the ext had worn off...
not one of your most impressive verses imo, but your style is changing
the smoothness after the first 3 lines was cool, but the rest seemed basic..
I enjoy a majority of your work because you weave an intricate story
but after seeing demise, devils cry, adventure isn't mine didnt do it for me
nice work regardless.
v/timeless, I feel like timeless put more effort in this week
Complex came through but seemed like he couldnt pick up steam
I was hoping this would be a great battle because one is a champ
& the other is growing as a writer, timeless was ready to attack.
Complex seems stuck in a rut & although the verse was cool...
it wasnt up to par with what he would normally do...
nice battle regardless
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