Time, I liked the whole vibe of your piece at first.
then you worked a nice pattern into your verse.
which makes you one of the most improved in my eyes
you add the proper emotion into the right lines...
the transitions were quite nice & the story was cool.
I liked your approach & the rhyme method you used
is was an excellent display of your lyrical attributes
great work brah...
Frank, I thought this was cool but it felt trapped in a moment
I enjoyed the rhyme scheme & the way your story opened.
I felt you forced a few words for the sake of the rhyme here.
but due to the fact I am buzzed that was a light beer...
you held my attention until I got to the use of tinsel?
at which point I couldnt tell what you were weaving us into.
I thought that you held your own here & dropped flames
you could have cut out a few lines & brought game...
nice shit breh.
v/This would be my choice for the BOTW to be honest
the way that both writers chose to approach their topics
the way that they brought their A game is what these matches are made for
Timeless took the darker approach. Frank put up a few great shots in game for.
His defense is what held him back with his flashy pacing.
but he did weave a few golden lines into his catchy sayings.
a very interesting inside game from timeless with his quick moves
his switch ups were amazing, his foundation was sick too...
2 different styles for writers of a different palette
Im going to give it to timeless for his more interesting talents
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