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Old 04-27-2016, 01:38 PM   #9
Artifice
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Damn. This was a good champ match.

Timeless

I fucks with the dark approach. Fluid and smooth, you tied the verse into the pic while allowing your take of it to grow. Nice work.


Frank

This was really cool. I dug how you not only took a more literal (yet metaphorical?) approach to the pic and literally had your rhyme scheme weaving the syllables throughout the piece. Unfortunately, I have to say it almost felt a little overdone to me. It's damn impressive to do (and I know you're a dope writer and can do/have done it) but this time it just didn't land as well as it could have.

Great showing from both for the first champ match of the season, but...

v/ Timeless
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