Zygote:
Amazing unheard of plot.
What I liked:
Don’t they know the beasts were destroyed by the New God so Man could live in peace?
Everything else was really on the scheme so I cant say I didnt like anything else but what I will say is this; you need more flare my dude, like your fire lol but instead of complex schemes with incredible vocab try going for more metaphors and wordplay, that's the shit I personally like.
What I didn't like:
We state furry behavior is equal to both rape and homosexual sodomy in terms of its indecency.
To all Misguided Citizens who engage in this animalistic fetishism,
I can tell if your talking about roleplay or beasteality..
Great work zygote..
IamBent:
Really cool story, love the ending and beginning. I really thought you were rushing into things but when it was over everything was a lot more subtle and defined after the second read.
What I liked:
Topaz and vermillion, crimson and viridian, gold magenta, to aquamarine zinnia!
practically the entire song...
What I didn't like:
My darling.., his breath a blistered baking… Take me…to the.. Beast she whispered faintly…
It felt pressed in and unwelcomed by the rest of the song; considering how mysterious and dramatical it is you should have had her fall in love first or something because it feels like she knows shes gonna die; feel me?
V/IamBent
Better story; barely and im saying BARELY
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