Vivid: I have to agree with Zy on the changing of writing added to a more fantasy atmosphere. Ironically before I got to the end I was picturing the ps4 commercial where the two friends are fighting each other in games lol. The writing itself was very basic but you had the story going for you and that helped push it along to its conclusion.
Ra: You da man, but I gotta be honest with you and tell you I wasn't really feeling this. Vivid's rhymes were basic as well but this extremely basic and not something that I've come to expect from reading your works. The emotion was there but even it felt forced to me. Idk what to think about this tbh.
V/Vag
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