vividlyvague - really like your first few lines. this week, a few people tried multi-lead approaches. and to be honest, i liked each one individually. cohesively, i didn't really feel your approach. felt like a few story beginnings thrown together. but in all honesty, they were pretty fucking tight stand-alone. just didn't really feel it as a whole. . .
king ra- i really liked this piece as a whole. for a few reasons i won't go into. but you stuck to a single topic here and did it well. i appreciate that, and enjoyed the read. it read well. but more importantly, i understood your entire story and felt ok with it at the end.
/v king ra - i enjoyed his read more and took more from it. connected with it a lot. enjoyed the piece and had no problems with any part of it. this was a close match, cuz vv out rhymed him in some places. but in the end.. ra's piece was more solid so he gets my vote this week.
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