WEEK 4: Sharp 2-1 VS Adverse 2-1 ADVERSE WINS VIA NS / OPEN FOR FEED

[UPN Zuch]

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Rules

Line limit

Minimum: 10

Maximum: 16

Verses due 11:59pm EST October 29, 2020 (Thursday)

Extensions are granted automatically. 24-hour max. MUST BE REQUESTED BY DEADLINE


Good luck, gentlemen
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[Sharp]

Hey bud

what are you thinking? 10-12?

[Adverse]

12s fine with me bro
@Zuch I’m 2-1 aren’t I?

[Sharp]

@Adverse wanna only use personals from this website?

https://frownedupuns.com/netcees-org

[Adverse]

Originally Posted by Sharp

@Adverse wanna only use personals from this website?

https://frownedupuns.com/netcees-org

Wtf I thought he sent that site to me only I feel betrayed

[Sharp]

swear to god if you have a verse about me losing a 1-2 battle 8 years ago its HANDS

[Adverse]

Originally Posted by Sharp

I'm an elementary music teacher/chorus director

You’re on Corleone’s dick bruh, u “busy” but got time to reply to every post from him
Guess that’s the music teacher in dude, always finding a way to work accordion
And your occupation ironic, but don’t worry I’ll take it right off ya hands
Waving that stick, then the drum bang like I’M the one conductin’ a band
Come on dog...I’ll make Shar Pei with this ammo tear this faggot apart
How you gon’ take the bite of a real beast When u barely handlin’ BARC?
Oh joy had to step into the gauntlet with the fucking Hobbit, I’m shaking
Hella short so this 9 ain’t gotta climb to get to that 5 feat till I take your spot in the rankings
This dude ain’t getting pussy. Sex game is truthfully trash
Last girl you seen have sharpener pulled one out n used it in class
Is it lofi insult your beats? Can’t help it I just hate your music
They all saying Sharp finally hit his stride..and it only took over a decade to do it

[Sharp]

[UPN Zuch]

Drop some feed for my boy Adverse

[UPN Zuch]

Didn’t like the opener, closer seemed like a throwaway.

Rest of verse I fuck with though. Nicely done man.


This would have been close.

[Hush]

Sharp in her was clever


But this wasn’t ur best work bro

[evaD]

Sharpener was a heater. Good verse ad.

[Culture]

accordion was kind of a reach but i thought it was clever. conductor was cool. sharpener was cool too. overall I thought it was a decent drop

[Aero]

Conductor and Sharpener were nice. I think Sharp folds under the pressure put on him by Zuch.

[Sharp]

Sorry again bro. I had a good excuse for Thursday itself but not for putting it off.

You’re on Corleone’s dick bruh, u “busy” but got time to reply to every post from him
Guess that’s the music teacher in dude, always finding a way to work accordion
I don't get it. I admire what you're going for... I think. Accord he on? Accord in doesn't work because of the extra syllable
And your occupation ironic, but don’t worry I’ll take it right off ya hands
Waving that stick, then the drum bang like I’M the one conductin’ a band
clever. Cool take on it. The Mac will spit. Not in love with the wording on the punchline but it's a relevant personal.
Come on dog...I’ll make Shar Pei with this ammo tear this faggot apart
How you gon’ take the bite of a real beast When u barely handlin’ BARC?
speaking for barc, barc/bark has been done a lot. Especially considering his history, bark/bite has been explored heavily. I see the tie ins in the setup bit with a predictable flip it's a little overkill, but that's just my opinion since I've seen too many bark flips. It's a good personal though and that saves it from being a miss. 'When' being capitalized is odd
Oh joy had to step into the gauntlet with the fucking Hobbit, I’m shaking
Hella short so this 9 ain’t gotta climb to get to that 5 feat till I take your spot in the rankings
I don't think I've seen 'short' as an angle against me tbh. Not that I'm particularly tall, js. I'm not particularly feeling the wording here. Feels like you're doing more technically than throwing the punch. 'oh joy' at the beginning feels clunky since this is middle of thr verse
This dude ain’t getting pussy. Sex game is truthfully trash
Last girl you seen have sharpener pulled one out n used it in class
ha. Cool. 'have sharpener' doesn't work grammatically both ways but you worded this one well. Def better to make it slightly grammatically incorrect. Probably your best bar
Is it lofi insult your beats? Can’t help it I just hate your music
They all saying Sharp finally hit his stride..and it only took over a decade to do it
unless I'm missing something this is bland and a little confusing to me. It being bad is directly contradicted by me hitting my stride. Punch itself is a statement, which just leaves me disappointed after all the buildup. This should be meaner and it's a KO.

I got thorough because it's the very least I can do. Def had solid punches in sharpener and conductor but there's some little things that hold this verse back.

[Scout]

Work a Cor d in?
As in a Corleone dick? Omg no, bad concept

Waving the stick/drum bang was fire tho. Sharpener was ok