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Old 06-11-2013, 12:49 AM   #1
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Biographic Meltdown of a Reformed Psychotic Higher Power



Take a walk inside me, send requesting my faith
I call it like I see it at the end of the day
Don't let the seconds escape from the Destiny Lake
Look beyond the reflection, the depth is amazing
From inception till lately, to death I was faithful
But I left and betrayed it like the lessons of Abel
Went from wrestling angels to reppin a halo in days
I was blessed with redemption and Nephalem cadendce
Draw these lexicon paintings with whats left on the pages
But wait..
Regrets can't harness my exodus lately, it's sent to betray me
My brain is 'sex on mescaline' crazy, perfected subconscious

....CLICK.

Leave this little man resting somber for testing a texting monster
This bitch will itch and regret starting, like symptoms of Meth
Hit em with fists to the chest hard till his ribs rip the flesh, scarring
Nigma's destined to draw blood like a crip with a sketch artist
Test heart like tweezers and needles, mosquitoes and leeches
From textcee to martyr, you'll bleed for the people to grieve with
They regard you as students, believe that the teacher is me
Introducing Mr. E, my pupils will see all the feudal influence
I'm whats before and after humans like baboons and mutants
Bitch which pool you in? Either two of you buffoons are stupid
S'like Hellen Keller with a rubix cube, you dudes are mute and clueless
Too conducive to the bluesh hue of bruises, witness all the hazards clump
You don't see shit, your views are usesless, you're droppin Caspar dumps
Y'all paint a dark scene, I print the bigger picture like art geeks
I'm an artist whos bars eat, you're the heart of this dark feast
This bitch is ripped apart with more sharp teeth then shark week
Got that Phoenix ferver, matches burning to reoccurance in the ashes
Murder with stats, it's Copernicus tactics, attacks hitting perfect in math
So when observing wackness I'm sure that yer attached like a virgins vag is
You claiming superlative master yet you're purely just average
Fuck a courtesy, I blast him.. And nothing triggers insecurity like laughter
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Old 08-11-2013, 12:33 AM   #2
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bump, this was a random freewrite I did that never got fed
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Old 08-11-2013, 05:34 AM   #3
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you can tell you mastered your flow you can feel the personality in the song with out even seeing you not bad def got the aggressive battle vibe with this one
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Old 08-14-2013, 10:39 PM   #4
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@Nigma lol this is not what I expected. A cryptic Van Helsing chronicle-like title with a matching piece of art that reminded me of the villain from the League of Extraordinary Gentlemen, set to a customary braggadocio backround. Sweet chin music for the metallic Constantinoples. You have an impressive flow because you approach it with little fear for the consequences of taking risks. Symmetry to you is optional when you can dictate the shape of the rhyme scheme as a whole, trying new things. There is a writer from Project Rhyme who I feel you would learn a lot from reading his work briefly: millz. Your style reminds me of his though you do more battle-related flexes while he usually stuck to traditional topical ventures.

I'll quote some of my favorite bars from this:

Test heart like tweezers and needles, mosquitoes and leeches
From textcee to martyr, you'll bleed for the people to grieve with
^CoHpe.

You claiming superlative master yet you're purely just average
Fuck a courtesy, I blast him.. And nothing triggers insecurity like laughter
^Pretty rugged.

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Old 08-16-2013, 12:26 AM   #5
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Introducing Mr. E, my pupils will see all the feudal influence
I'm whats before and after humans like baboons and mutants
Bitch which pool you in? Either two of you buffoons are stupid
S'like Hellen Keller with a rubix cube, you dudes are mute and clueless


Got that Phoenix ferver, matches burning to reoccurance in the ashes
Murder with stats, it's Copernicus tactics, attacks hitting perfect in math
So when observing wackness I'm sure that yer attached like a virgins vag is
You claiming superlative master yet you're purely just average
Fuck a courtesy, I blast him.. And nothing triggers insecurity like laughter



this two stanza stuck out for me. top one mainly liked the whole which pool u in? im guessing referring to gene pools liked it...


I like seeing your stuff on this site compared to svw. svw was mainly a battle site and that being so I think limited a lot of us from seeing your versatility with the art of words.


if you got time get at me with the collab we started @Nigma send what you have of mine also.
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