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WK 6 - Nigma v Adonis - N WINS
Memo week 6.
Greetings competitors, we arrive at a personal favorite. IMITATION WEEK, you are required to attempt an imitation or homage or mimicry or satire or otherwise of your opponent’s writing style. To assist you in your task, there will be 2 links provided with every contest. Please note, the minimum requirement is an imitation of your opponent’s writing style, you are not required to imitate the content of the relevant hyperlink provided along with your contest. You can if you want to, but ultimately that’s your decision. Find below your match-ups and specific task. 2 v 4 Nigma v Adonis. TASK: IMITATION – (for your assistance: http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=10442 v http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=9920 ) Verses Due - Wednesday 23:59 PST Voting Period Ends - Sunday 23:59 PST Good Luck @Nigma @Adonis |
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Re: Imitation of Style The task at hands to match the stuff you struggle to handle The trouble with that, I've done it but I'm humble in action To sum it quick I'm lappin past the trash of an amateur I want none of it, like the last expansion of Candada Take a straight gaze at the path, don't day break around Afrika Date raping giraffes with the pack of beta apes thats attractin ya Damn, it's like ya summoned from a dungeon how you creep up the steps You think you're something but you're nothing.. The Placebo Effect I'm the type to write a section reminding men of all 5 they senses And then say try to test like the mindset of a tribal medic Spewing the facts of life, you only true when the task is dying Knew he had passed his prime so I threw him on past horizons Viewing the crashing site and the beauty it catalyzes Too much moving, we act in signs like students of acting Commuting through hands and smiles like Nubian pantomimers Inhale fumes till I catch on fire in a rapture minded stature I am choosing the last survivor with the catch-a-liar method Your task, to draft a writing on the master of fire.. If I was there I'd say that I'm a cleric of the of newer ages Barrels full of silver seein werewolves in the lunar rays, the Tarots cards are truthful, pay off the tariffs for my rule breaking Tearing human brains I'm like a Pharaoh in a tomb awakened Scarin them like half a page will contract AIDS and get cancer I'm a black mage on the Sabbath, the last days of a rapture A man trained as assassin, I'm Max Payne with a cannon Land, wait, and inhabit.. The whole planets alarmed! Grown, planted, and farmed in our botanical garden It don't matter, regardless you'll be cloning my figure A poets only limits what he knows and can deliver If you hold that inner wisdom let it grow before you pick it If your goal is to persistently bring growth to all your writtens But you're focusing on winning, only know you'll never get it Pathetic, they saying that all I do is flow? Yeah, in my writtens it's potent But that simple shit you quote Is just a ripple in my ocean And I've grown so bitter cold that it's the only shit I'm holding When emotion grips my shoulder and it lifts me from this coma It is youthful food for thought, I'm like a gypsy with ambrosia When the seconds stem from minutes and the gimmick scene is closing Hope you scribbled in some notes cause you will miss me when it's over So I'm always solitary and alone the poems can rescue me Boatloads of the recipe, coke-nosed to suppress the beef Patron, smoke, and some ecstasy, my own soul is repressing me Own homes at the depths and I'm stone cold like it's wrestling Before I let them in on my perception of investment, I'ma end the clip like men before the credits of a western flick I guess it's just a... Limit breaker, switch the pace from basic to phase two And if you want to imitate my style, I don't blame you
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Leave it open for feed and accolades.
Dude out writes a hook from cashius clay. All-I say is, my man came with his fire. burning and scorching my egoless cyphers. I'm a writer first, and swear I feel bad for lack of time. But in the end I'll take the verdict in stride. If I didn't have the heart I wouldn't post, but give him the feed. and Believe this verse is simply my plead for peace. 1 love Nigma, sorry champ. but at least this you'll get feed. If you had posted something short and weak I would've no showed, but this verse deserves critique.
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08-30-2013, 11:47 AM | #9 |
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I vote nigma, I don't really know the others style well to say he did a good imitation however, after reading its kind of clear lol.
The task at hands to match the stuff you struggle to handle The trouble with that, I've done it but I'm humble in action To sum it quick I'm lappin past the trash of an amateur I want none of it, like the last expansion of Candada -don't really know the knowledge behind the last expansion of Canada*** however i'm guess E did his research and the last expansion of Canada was land no one else wanted? if so good line. lol Take a straight gaze at the path, don't day break around Afrika Date raping giraffes with the pack of beta apes thats attractin ya -like the animal biology here :P and the transition included with switching from Canada to afrika and Africa's being connected to the animals he stated and known for some of its wild life Damn, it's like ya summoned from a dungeon how you creep up the steps You think you're something but you're nothing.. The Placebo Effect -HAH! nice. need I explain? I'm the type to write a section reminding men of all 5 they senses And then say try to test like the mindset of a tribal medic -eh Spewing the facts of life, you only true when the task is dying Knew he had passed his prime so I threw him on past horizons Viewing the crashing site and the beauty it catalyzes Too much moving, we act in signs like students of acting Commuting through hands and smiles like Nubian pantomimers Inhale fumes till I catch on fire in a rapture minded stature I am choosing the last survivor with the catch-a-liar method Your task, to draft a writing on the master of fire.. - liked the internals and multi's. end had some zing If I was there I'd say that I'm a cleric of the of newer ages Barrels full of silver seein werewolves in the lunar rays, the Tarots cards are truthful, pay off the tariffs for my rule breaking Tearing human brains I'm like a Pharaoh in a tomb awakened -I'm not sure I like the beginning of the last line, maybe lacking the knowledge to understand it, but the end of it was hot and the whole like could have been delieverd very nicely if the start was worked on Scarin them like half a page will contract AIDS and get cancer I'm a black mage on the Sabbath, the last days of a rapture A man trained as assassin, I'm Max Payne with a cannon Land, wait, and inhabit.. The whole planets alarmed! Grown, planted, and farmed in our botanical garden -internals nice kinda of a bit everywhere w/ this stanza lol. from religion to assassins max pain and biology and the planet. lol. read well and flowed but maby needed to be a bit more focused. lots of imagery tho It don't matter, regardless you'll be cloning my figure A poets only limits what he knows and can deliver -felt you shoulda expanded more on the first lines concept, none the less the second line was a tight concept in itself. I fail to see the connection, but could be my perception. If you hold that inner wisdom let it grow before you pick it -had some good depth and a nice simile If your goal is to persistently bring growth to all your writtens But you're focusing on winning, only know you'll never get it Pathetic, they saying that all I do is flow? Yeah, in my writtens it's potent But that simple shit you quote Is just a ripple in my ocean -it is wat it is and is stated in the lines lol And I've grown so bitter cold that it's the only shit I'm holding When emotion grips my shoulder and it lifts me from this coma It is youthful food for thought, I'm like a gypsy with ambrosia When the seconds stem from minutes and the gimmick scene is closing Hope you scribbled in some notes cause you will miss me when it's over So I'm always solitary and alone the poems can rescue me Boatloads of the recipe, coke-nosed to suppress the beef -ehish... liked this last line Patron, smoke, and some ecstasy, my own soul is repressing me Own homes at the depths and I'm stone cold like it's wrestling -nice pun ;) Before I let them in on my perception of investment, I'ma end the clip like men before the credits of a western flick I guess it's just a... Limit breaker, switch the pace from basic to phase two And if you want to imitate my style, I don't blame you -nice we to bring in the TOPIC of the week into a nice flex Overall great verse man keep doing your thing
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08-31-2013, 01:04 AM | #12 |
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08-31-2013, 12:56 PM | #14 |
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So this isn't really even open for votes as Adonis basically posted a no-show verse.
Nigma this was a pretty good verse. My advice to you would be to not try metaphors/similes/punchlines because that's the weakest part of your writing. Or at least look towards better purveyors of said mechanics and elevate. Some of your rhymes missed me, but you truly did have bright spots. "Spewing the facts of life, you only true when the task is dying Knew he had passed his prime so I threw him on past horizons Viewing the crashing site and the beauty it catalyzes" The first two lines were nothing special but the last line was neat. "Inhale fumes till I catch on fire in a rapture minded stature I am choosing the last survivor with the catch-a-liar method" Nice little bit of swag. Cool rhymes. "I'm a black mage on the Sabbath, the last days of a rapture A man trained as assassin, I'm Max Payne with a cannon" Ditto. Newer ages/lunar rays, the was cool, too. "So I'm always solitary and alone the poems can rescue me Boatloads of the recipe, coke-nosed to suppress the beef Patron, smoke, and some ecstasy, my own soul is repressing me" Cool. Just a quick read-through and conciliatory breakdown. There were definitely some portions of the verse I thought were weak, but I'm not bothered to break a noshow battle down all crazy. Overall, more positive than negative. Keep elevating.
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Thank you for the feed @PancakeBrah Would have loved to hear which lines in particular were a miss for you. Feel free to inbox them to me if you have any time to spare from your tedious and productive moderation duties. I'm going to give you feedback on your feedback though as criticizing people who don't always tunnel vision on what they do best will make them one dimensional and boring. Luckily I am immune to your jedi mind tricks.
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I notice the 'tedious' for it's condescension. Quit being so sensitive. It's not a good look.
Weak lines; "Damn, it's like ya summoned from a dungeon how you creep up the steps You think you're something but you're nothing.. The Placebo Effect" Ok, Drake. Done before, not creative. This would've been better had you just said 'Placebo effect' regarding the subject at the beginning of the line and gone somewhere different with the idea. "Tarots cards are truthful, pay off the tariffs for my rule breaking Tearing human brains I'm like a Pharaoh in a tomb awakened" Imagery/idea doesn't work for me. "It don't matter, regardless you'll be cloning my figure A poets only limits what he knows and can deliver If you hold that inner wisdom let it grow before you pick it If your goal is to persistently bring growth to all your writtens But you're focusing on winning, only know you'll never get it Pathetic, they saying that all I do is flow? Yeah, in my writtens it's potent But that simple shit you quote Is just a ripple in my ocean" Ripple in my ocean was cool. Other than that this was hokey. Just relaxed little guy. I was just dropping feed and your estrogen flared. It's understandable, I guess.
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@PancakeBrah You're being over defensive, meant no hate, I feel you've been an excellent mod so far. Just be chill.
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Well, I don't have a lot of time for voting this week anyway, so I guess thanks for making it easy for me?
Nigma: I'm not sure this matched Adonis' writing style as much as the types of references he might use. That's fine and applies to the topic. You scaled back your heavy internal rhyming a little, but I was hoping to see you drop something more along the lines of Adonis' topical poetry. Adonis: It was thoughtful of you to post that. It's a shame, though, because I was really looking forward to this match. Vote: Nigma
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Read the verse Nig, and it was cool, dug the flow it was real flowy.
Had a few cool mechanics thrown in too. Seemed to me like a kinda swag and flow battle verse mixed up with some philosophic belly-button pondering. Didn't really have any standouts or misses to me what was the real winner for me was the fluidity: It really rolled off my mental tounge a I read it in my mind. Keep writg, I wish I could flow like that |
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