Unfukwitable vs. Trag. - TRAGIC WINS

[DLB]

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@UNFUKWITABLE @Trag.

[Unfukwitable]

Check In .

[Trag.]

you can have the win, im not liking this voting rule...

[Unfukwitable]

wtf?, you can't vote on 4 battles...

[Trag.]

alright how many lines...

[Unfukwitable]

12 sent.

link 1: http://www.netcees.co/showthread.php?t=22466

[DLB]

unfuk pm'd a verse

[Trag.]

12


I'll stab ya oldest living, this blade'll show em' harm
Display his family crest in front of him and really watch blood coat his arms.
Your names ironic tho, I bet true life shook this bitch
Last girl who wanted to unfuck the situation... split his money & took the kids.
And ya rican battle? it showed off the leagues worse offering..
you winning was the lesser of two evils, voters wanna opt for a third party.
faggot, italics & underlining ya wordplay is certainly crap...
if that's dressing up ya punches? then it's no wonder why ya verse is a drag.
It'll be a massacre on news the way u got manhandled
you'll get the sandy hook treatment- a beach bully punchin u for makin sandcastles.
I beat Des last week. old age. dont mend the truth
But i find it funny des is closing in on death & death will close this thread on u.

[DLB]

unfukwitable's verse


you wouldn't have heated riddles if you stirred upped Dr. Seuss
which is why I Got this pussy in czech.. & I never had a Europe prostitue
He don't pan statement's vicious, this battle'll make fam play submissive
cause for him to have the edge on common grounds- means he's in the landscaping business
I reject lames and leave the rest slay'n so since Trag wanna test flames
I got a home for'em with a "tomb in it"... that shit'll remind girls of his sex game
His plan was to leave me wasted, But Instead you will suffer
as viewers mistake this for the PBA- when bold strikes leave this pin head in the gutta
catch me in a living-room near you, I'll be at yo bitch spot
As he Busts open the door I'm all on his ratchet racks like a Ghetto thrift shop
I seen what Neighbor did to him & he won't last this fight
I'll pour gasoline on him & toss a match.. you'll really see a "Tragic night"

[DLB]

@Trag., add 2 more lines to your verse g

unfuk dropped 12

[KwaL!ty]

I'll stab ya oldest living, this blade'll show em' harm
Display his family crest in front of him and really watch blood coat his arms.
Your names ironic tho, I bet true life shook this bitch
Last girl who wanted to unfuck the situation... split his money & took the kids.


vs


I reject lames and leave the rest slay'n so since Trag wanna test flames
I got a home for'em with a "tomb in it"... that shit'll remind girls of his sex game
His plan was to leave me wasted, But Instead you will suffer
as viewers mistake this for the PBA- when bold strikes leave this pin head in the gutta


My bad for editing my verse but when giving this a quick read i missed some of the wordplay



I do apologize but Fuk takes this

[Sintro]

Trag I liked ur opener. Pretty clever graphic shit. In fuck the situation was tight. The third party punch was nice too but offering n party don't rhyme. Dressing up ya punches was pretty nice as well. I don't get the sandy hook reference other than the obvious where the punch comes in. Closer was alright.
Unfuck opener was ok. Next couplet was ehh. Tomb in it was actually pretty dope hahamade me laugh. Pba was okish. N the rest kinda fell off. Closer was almost nice but I don't like the way u delivered it. This battle was kinda close but kinda not. I really liked the tomb in it wordplay I think it was the most creative of the battle but it wasn't enough. Trag was more polished n came across more witty. Vote trag

[Orc]

I think unfuk got this tbh. More creative and tomb in it was cool. Trag was sloppy n didnt try and Unf got the win with the better verse.

[Beyond]

And ya rican battle? it showed off the leagues worse offering..
you winning was the lesser of two evils, voters wanna opt for a third party.
It'll be a massacre on news the way u got manhandled
you'll get the sandy hook treatment- a beach bully punchin u for makin sandcastles.

vs

He don't pan statement's vicious, this battle'll make fam play submissive
cause for him to have the edge on common grounds- means he's in the landscaping business
I seen what Neighbor did to him & he won't last this fight
I'll pour gasoline on him & toss a match.. you'll really see a "Tragic night"


Surprisingly close battle, kind of. Trag ignite slightly forced, but I let slide. Landscaping was nice. Third party was good. Sandy Hook, lol. Kind of corny, but I like. Crest seemed like a throwaway. Unfuck was kind of good, but the way the nameplay was used was a bit odd. Drag was clean, but not fresh. Same with closer, sort of. For Unfuck Czech wasn't fresh either. Same for tomb in it for me. Blame longbar. Seen too many bowling lines like that. Needed to be a really good flip. Wasn't feeling Ghetto thrift shop similar to family crest. Overall battle could possibly go either way, which is shocking, but I have Tragic edging it out on unquotes and originality. Props to both.

/v tragic

[Dominate]

Originally Posted by Trag.

12


I'll stab ya oldest living, this blade'll show em' harm
Display his family crest in front of him and really watch blood coat his arms.
nice, very creative
Your names ironic tho, I bet true life shook this bitch
Last girl who wanted to unfuck the situation... split his money & took the kids.
eh, it's OK
And ya rican battle? it showed off the leagues worse offering..
you winning was the lesser of two evils, voters wanna opt for a third party.
the personal and 'lesser of 2 evils' set up were good, but the flip was boring
faggot, italics & underlining ya wordplay is certainly crap...
if that's dressing up ya punches? then it's no wonder why ya verse is a drag.
heh, cool
It'll be a massacre on news the way u got manhandled
you'll get the sandy hook treatment- a beach bully punchin u for makin sandcastles.
good
I beat Des last week. old age. dont mend the truth
But i find it funny des is closing in on death & death will close this thread on u.
ehhhh it's OK

vs

Originally Posted by Death

unfukwitable's verse


you wouldn't have heated riddles if you stirred upped Dr. Seuss
which is why I Got this pussy in czech.. & I never had a Europe prostitue
okay... pussy and czech are both old wp's but combined and flipped like this it was an OK attempt
He don't pan statement's vicious, this battle'll make fam play submissive
cause for him to have the edge on common grounds- means he's in the landscaping business
good wp, well done... just needed to set up the 'common grounds' part a bit more in the 1st line
I reject lames and leave the rest slay'n so since Trag wanna test flames
I got a home for'em with a "tomb in it"... that shit'll remind girls of his sex game
haha cool. worded nicely
His plan was to leave me wasted, But Instead you will suffer
as viewers mistake this for the PBA- when bold strikes leave this pin head in the gutta
very good. again though, set up your punch in the first line - why is he a pin head?
catch me in a living-room near you, I'll be at yo bitch spot
As he Busts open the door I'm all on his ratchet racks like a Ghetto thrift shop
OK
I seen what Neighbor did to him & he won't last this fight
I'll pour gasoline on him & toss a match.. you'll really see a "Tragic night"
nice wp.... again you can make the punch stronger by setting it up - what was the "tragic night" about?

100x better than your last verse. Def got potential. Ima be watching :)



really quite close but after reading again I'll edge it to Trag for being more creative and having a little more polish

good battle

v/ Trag

[Mael]

And ya rican battle? it showed off the leagues worse offering..
you winning was the lesser of two evils, voters wanna opt for a third party.
faggot, italics & underlining ya wordplay is certainly crap...
if that's dressing up ya punches? then it's no wonder why ya verse is a drag.
I beat Des last week. old age. dont mend the truth
But i find it funny des is closing in on death & death will close this thread on u.

vs

you wouldn't have heated riddles if you stirred upped Dr. Seuss
which is why I Got this pussy in czech.. & I never had a Europe prostitue
played wp.
I seen what Neighbor did to him & he won't last this fight
I'll pour gasoline on him & toss a match.. you'll really see a "Tragic night"

Alright battle. Trag got this with more consistency. Unfukwitable had some played concepts, so that took away from him winning. Keep elevating. Props.

Vote - Trag