Opening Round Discussion & Predictions - Page 36

Witty · 01-19-2014, 03:01 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Diode

et tu, witty?

I don't understand the question :(

Certain · 01-19-2014, 03:11 PM

Looks like we have a next-vote-wins situation in Frank vs. Nigma.

Vulgar · 01-19-2014, 03:13 PM

@ZYG @Mordycai

Zyg - lol, you are everyone's silent uncle who is sitting on a treasure chest of jokes and decaying basilisks. The last person you'd expect to be an expert on hydrophonic farming and Assyrian history, yet the first one to declare you own a syndicate based there, and on the moon colony too. You also probably dress like you're still in the 80's. Fun verse, overall. I like how you posted a little over an hour after the thread was started like a boss. "Gaark" was a funny name. I wish more topical verses were like this, tbh. Manipulation of said topic image for comedic purposes... not taking the craft so bluntly serious, but fun.

Mordycai - First problem I had with the verse (but not really until now since I just noticed) is that you call it a fishing boat, yet the character resembles a warrior and not a fisherman. This story seemed to be about a ghostly realm, a purgatory based in an environment of sea turned desert, mirroring the depressive dichotomy the lone survivor has to face in captivity, or isolation. Somehow, Mother Nature left him a stranded soul but also lent him a survival manual, originally angry because of man interfering with nature, i.e. "sand taken and placed on our lovely [volleyball] courts" I'm guessing. It was a deep take on the topic. Vague but rewardingly so. Against another opponent I think you would've fared well for the effort you put into this one.

Vote - Zygoat

simply because I was entertained more by it and was satisfied after one read. See breakdown for further insight.

Witty · 01-19-2014, 03:21 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Vulgar

@ZYG @Mordycai

Zyg - lol, you are everyone's silent uncle who is sitting on a treasure chest of jokes and decaying basilisks. The last person you'd expect to be an expert on hydrophonic farming and Assyrian history, yet the first one to declare you own a syndicate based there, and on the moon colony too. You also probably dress like you're still in the 80's. Fun verse, overall. I like how you posted a little over an hour after the thread was started like a boss. "Gaark" was a funny name. I wish more topical verses were like this, tbh. Manipulation of said topic image for comedic purposes... not taking the craft so bluntly serious, but fun.

Mordycai - First problem I had with the verse (but not really until now since I just noticed) is that you call it a fishing boat, yet the character resembles a warrior and not a fisherman. This story seemed to be about a ghostly realm, a purgatory based in an environment of sea turned desert, mirroring the depressive dichotomy the lone survivor has to face in captivity, or isolation. Somehow, Mother Nature left him a stranded soul but also lent him a survival manual, originally angry because of man interfering with nature, i.e. "sand taken and placed on our lovely [volleyball] courts" I'm guessing. It was a deep take on the topic. Vague but rewardingly so. Against another opponent I think you would've fared well for the effort you put into this one.

Vote - Zygoat

simply because I was entertained more by it and was satisfied after one read. See breakdown for further insight.

Lol Vulgar....I think this may be the wrong place for this my friend.

<3

Certain · 01-19-2014, 03:23 PM

The battle is closed, though.

Witty · 01-19-2014, 03:24 PM

Oh lol

Witty · 01-19-2014, 03:25 PM

I love that Vulgar still posted feed even when the winner had been decided.

That shows great appreciation for what we do.

Witty · 01-19-2014, 03:28 PM

@Certain how much time is left?

I may try to get another vote or two in, if possible.

Certain · 01-19-2014, 03:31 PM

That's up to @Pancake, but Frank vs. Nigma is tied so it needs a vote either way.

CopyPat · 01-19-2014, 03:36 PM

why prevent ppl from voting? vote away, vote as much as u can

almost every battle is either closed(won) or a runaway (should be closed, someone clearly way ahead by 4-5 votes). theres only a few that are remotely close

wise battle vs VV is 6-1. should be over and closed
oats vs JW is 7-1-big baby(?) should be closed

To clean up the page

Pent uP · 01-19-2014, 03:39 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Certain

That's up to @Pancake, but Frank vs. Nigma is tied so it needs a vote either way.

Franks having a bad week. Losing the championship and now one vote away from being a rd1 knock out

Mike Wrecka · 01-19-2014, 03:50 PM

i will vote if the battles are still open later tonight. sorry fellas

Mike Wrecka · 01-19-2014, 03:51 PM

and @Certain. good battle dude. that should have been the quarter final or something.

now win the damn thing double post ftw yay

Wise Wiggles · 01-19-2014, 03:55 PM

GREEN SEVEN GREEN SEVEN

HUTHUT HUTHUT

Pent uP · 01-19-2014, 04:03 PM

Fuck I just lost it all thanks to my phone.

Mrj - I liked what direction you took the verse in but I feel like there were a couple of big things working against this verse. The first is I think u were tryinf to be too lyrical and that did 2 things - it made the read tedious, in this case, and i think it hindered the characterization. The second thing is the verse felt stagnant. I know the verse relied on characterization but it became redundant in spots. Overall the verse went in a positive direction but it fell flat of what it could have been.

Witty - the flow and wording were butter. The writers voice was spot on and the emotion was prominent. Characterization was excellent and the underlying messege made the story complete. This verse had the formula of an excellent writing. ..it felt a little winded at times but always brought interest back instantaneously. Probably my favorite verse of the week
@Mr. J @Witty

Certain · 01-19-2014, 04:08 PM

Three battles are still open for votes.

Angkor · 01-19-2014, 04:14 PM

man..next round's gonna be fuckin vicious.

Certain · 01-19-2014, 04:15 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Angkor

man..next round's gonna be fuckin vicious.

Truth. Do you have time to vote on one of the three still-open battles?

Witty · 01-19-2014, 04:18 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Pent uP

Fuck I just lost it all thanks to my phone.

Mrj - I liked what direction you took the verse in but I feel like there were a couple of big things working against this verse. The first is I think u were tryinf to be too lyrical and that did 2 things - it made the read tedious, in this case, and i think it hindered the characterization. The second thing is the verse felt stagnant. I know the verse relied on characterization but it became redundant in spots. Overall the verse went in a positive direction but it fell flat of what it could have been.

Witty -

My bit is gonnneee :(

Angkor · 01-19-2014, 04:19 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Certain

Truth. Do you have time to vote on one of the three still-open battles?

yea, i'm reading trap vs copy.

01-19-2014, 03:11 PM	#702
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,072 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899403	Looks like we have a next-vote-wins situation in Frank vs. Nigma. __________________ I'm just swinging swords strictly based on keyboards, unbalanced like elephants and ants on seesaws.

01-19-2014, 03:23 PM	#705
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,072 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899403	The battle is closed, though. __________________ I'm just swinging swords strictly based on keyboards, unbalanced like elephants and ants on seesaws.

01-19-2014, 03:24 PM	#706
Witty Lime Life Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 16,801 Battle Record: 30-41 Accomplishments - Only Slightly Retarded Champed - Lyric Olympics - Summer Classic Rep Power: 82986458	Oh lol __________________ He listens to voices inside of his mind Explicit and poisonous violent crime.

01-19-2014, 03:25 PM	#707
Witty Lime Life Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 16,801 Battle Record: 30-41 Accomplishments - Only Slightly Retarded Champed - Lyric Olympics - Summer Classic Rep Power: 82986458	I love that Vulgar still posted feed even when the winner had been decided. That shows great appreciation for what we do. __________________ He listens to voices inside of his mind Explicit and poisonous violent crime.

01-19-2014, 03:28 PM	#708
Witty Lime Life Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 16,801 Battle Record: 30-41 Accomplishments - Only Slightly Retarded Champed - Lyric Olympics - Summer Classic Rep Power: 82986458	@Certain how much time is left? I may try to get another vote or two in, if possible. __________________ He listens to voices inside of his mind Explicit and poisonous violent crime.

01-19-2014, 03:13 PM	#703
Vulgar Razor-thin derision Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,422 Battle Record: 40-25 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night LIV - Gimmick Battle League (2x) - Write Week II - Art of Writing League - Storytelling And Topical Invitational Tournament - STI - Haiku Writer Challenge - GWL Picture Challenge(2x) Rep Power: 49604317	@ZYG @Mordycai Zyg - lol, you are everyone's silent uncle who is sitting on a treasure chest of jokes and decaying basilisks. The last person you'd expect to be an expert on hydrophonic farming and Assyrian history, yet the first one to declare you own a syndicate based there, and on the moon colony too. You also probably dress like you're still in the 80's. Fun verse, overall. I like how you posted a little over an hour after the thread was started like a boss. "Gaark" was a funny name. I wish more topical verses were like this, tbh. Manipulation of said topic image for comedic purposes... not taking the craft so bluntly serious, but fun. Mordycai - First problem I had with the verse (but not really until now since I just noticed) is that you call it a fishing boat, yet the character resembles a warrior and not a fisherman. This story seemed to be about a ghostly realm, a purgatory based in an environment of sea turned desert, mirroring the depressive dichotomy the lone survivor has to face in captivity, or isolation. Somehow, Mother Nature left him a stranded soul but also lent him a survival manual, originally angry because of man interfering with nature, i.e. "sand taken and placed on our lovely [volleyball] courts" I'm guessing. It was a deep take on the topic. Vague but rewardingly so. Against another opponent I think you would've fared well for the effort you put into this one. Vote - Zygoat simply because I was entertained more by it and was satisfied after one read. See breakdown for further insight.

01-19-2014, 03:31 PM	#709
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,072 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899403	That's up to @Pancake, but Frank vs. Nigma is tied so it needs a vote either way. __________________ I'm just swinging swords strictly based on keyboards, unbalanced like elephants and ants on seesaws.

01-19-2014, 03:36 PM	#710
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 707 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742222	why prevent ppl from voting? vote away, vote as much as u can almost every battle is either closed(won) or a runaway (should be closed, someone clearly way ahead by 4-5 votes). theres only a few that are remotely close wise battle vs VV is 6-1. should be over and closed oats vs JW is 7-1-big baby(?) should be closed To clean up the page __________________ My syllable count approximately a billion, bounce. You cannot compete. Last edited by CopyPat; 01-19-2014 at 03:46 PM.

01-19-2014, 03:50 PM	#712
Mike Wrecka WOW Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,524 Battle Record: 29-25 Champed - Writing Challenge League I Rep Power: 82779335	i will vote if the battles are still open later tonight. sorry fellas __________________ A.bove T.he R.est

01-19-2014, 03:51 PM	#713
Mike Wrecka WOW Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,524 Battle Record: 29-25 Champed - Writing Challenge League I Rep Power: 82779335	and @Certain. good battle dude. that should have been the quarter final or something. now win the damn thing double post ftw yay __________________ A.bove T.he R.est

01-19-2014, 03:55 PM	#714
Wise Wiggles nok Su kow Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,507 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 51788019	GREEN SEVEN GREEN SEVEN HUTHUT HUTHUT __________________ "black as midnight..black as pitch blacker than the soul of the foulest witch"

01-19-2014, 04:03 PM	#715
Pent uP Robin Williams of Fallen Victims Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 1,502 Battle Record: 25-11 Accomplishments - NC Hall of Fame Champed - Netcees Writers League (2x) - NWL Season 1 - Write Night I - Art of Writing League (2x) - Write Week IV Rep Power: 6862273	Fuck I just lost it all thanks to my phone. Mrj - I liked what direction you took the verse in but I feel like there were a couple of big things working against this verse. The first is I think u were tryinf to be too lyrical and that did 2 things - it made the read tedious, in this case, and i think it hindered the characterization. The second thing is the verse felt stagnant. I know the verse relied on characterization but it became redundant in spots. Overall the verse went in a positive direction but it fell flat of what it could have been. Witty - the flow and wording were butter. The writers voice was spot on and the emotion was prominent. Characterization was excellent and the underlying messege made the story complete. This verse had the formula of an excellent writing. ..it felt a little winded at times but always brought interest back instantaneously. Probably my favorite verse of the week @Mr. J @Witty Last edited by Pent uP; 01-19-2014 at 04:20 PM.

01-19-2014, 04:08 PM	#716
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,072 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899403	Three battles are still open for votes. __________________ I'm just swinging swords strictly based on keyboards, unbalanced like elephants and ants on seesaws.

01-19-2014, 04:14 PM	#717
Angkor Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 148 Battle Record: 1-3 Rep Power: 35	man..next round's gonna be fuckin vicious.