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07-08-2014, 03:39 PM | #2 |
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lame for years and ur the favorite here? y not, Flavor Flav made a career outta ugly
but at least he had a house & money. Allen Poe, his poems wont amount to nothing so fuck tying the knot, ladies rather hang themselves on some suicide shit that's a do or die bitch. cuz if any girl Marion Knight, she must look like him book the win, this guys no match. he'll get outted this round like Michael Sam and i thought this Hostess supposed to be a viable champ, not a cupcake like that brand stand back man. jilti a pugilist, schooled in jujitsu since a school kid snap A. Knights armor leg like a toothpick. and that suit wouldnt help if he used it i duel with fists. while AL rather catfight like a bully bitch anything he'll do ta win. whether blowout or by a hair, even if he's pulling it cool, at the end of typing ur eulogy. got that deer in the headlights look in defeat cuz when i'm done Keenan Allen finishes 2nd in votes, guess i'll be the rookie to beat 12 lines @Allen Knight Last edited by jilti; 07-14-2014 at 12:11 AM. Reason: left word out |
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ur slut fucks me daily, son I rocker, cuz ur dumb n awkward
her pussy's Juicy J, & she bounce it on my cock till she screams like she won a oscar off the rip i demolished u, on one thinks this scrub raw this weak bitch been done by the first bar faster than a lightweight at a pub crawl try to use guns on me, then rippin is my resolution if J Gatsby out, im shootin'em in face so theres a book written on the execution ur couldn't make a ho squirt, this ugly fuck a frail guy U never got a pussy terrain cuz ur face has more bumps on it then a trail ride ur the biggest faggot around, ur gayness shred's eyelids j & silent bob go perfect together cuz hes always suckin off fat dudes in dead silence ur mom loves to slurp my dick, she's in a thong workin me That slut jerked it till her elbow blew out & needed 5 major Tommy john surgeries on to the next rd.
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Allen, THAT CLOSER/OUTRO was fuckin dope, son. How did you come w/ it? Hahaha, anyways... v/Allen Knight - Cleaner/harsher punches/execution. |
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07-14-2014, 04:00 PM | #7 |
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that's a do or die bitch. cuz if any girl Marion Knight, she must look like him Whoa' haha nice and i thought this Hostess supposed to be a viable champ, not a cupcake like that brand CRAZY...ughhh! snap A. Knights armor leg like a toothpick. and that suit wouldnt help if he used it name flips gettin' at Him! anything he'll do ta win. whether blowout or by a hair, even if he's pulling it damn neva seen that flipped before...Nice my Dude solid verse...not many weak points...brought the fire out Knight if J Gatsby out, im shootin'em in face so theres a book written on the execution neva seen that flipped...liked the set up line fittin' wit' it too some nice other lines in there too....But I'm not a fan of battle rap wit' a lotta "ya Mom...Ya girl...ya so Gay" that shits kinda corny to me...yea that made you have harsher insults towards J then he had at you....But he took a much more creative approach that showcased his battle talent more Juz my opinion but I'd rather hear one dope general battle bar I've neva heard before then 100 you can neva get any ho's lines Vote- Jilti |
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jilti: I liked the Suge Knight line as a concept, but that wording style always bothered me. See, if "Marion" is meant to be a verb and "Knight" is meant to refer to Allen, then "him" would be referring to Allen as well. But I get that your wording choice falls in line with a very conventional structure, so I'm not holding it back. That was a solid line in that format. Hostess lines are old, and I didn't get the Michael Sam line. Sam didn't get outed; he came out on his own terms. The line about armour didn't make much sense the way it was worded. The "blowout or by a hair" idea should have been flipped to incorporate the blowout hairstyle into the play. The Keenan Allen line was good. This was a very average and typical battle verse. Nothing stood out. Your wording, rhyme mechanics and punch concepts all could use some work but fall about even par with what's expected.
Allen Knight: The Juicy J and J Gatsby lines had real potential but not enough thought put into making the closing phrases tougher or cleverer. The J & Silent Bob line was a complete miss, and pub crawl lines really require more originality and specificity. Tommy John surgery was OK. That would have been way, way better with a Tanaka wordplay or something. So the only line that really landed for me was the pussy terrain wordplay, which I haven't seen and worked even though I don't know what this guy looks like. This was below what I expect from you, for sure. The big misses and sloppy phrasing cost you the battle. Vote: jilti
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lame for years and ur the favorite here? y not, Flavor Flav made a career outta ugly but at least he had a house & money. Allen Poe, his poems wont amount to nothing alright opener so fuck tying the knot, ladies rather hang themselves on some suicide shit that's a do or die bitch. cuz if any girl Marion Knight, she must look like him lol, this was cool book the win, this guys no match. he'll get outted this round like Michael Sam and i thought this Hostess supposed to be a viable champ, not a cupcake like that brand lol, aight stand back man. jilti a pugilist, schooled in jujitsu since a school kid snap A. Knights armor leg like a toothpick. and that suit wouldnt help if he used it not bad. i duel with fists. while AL rather catfight like a bully bitch anything he'll do ta win. whether blowout or by a hair, even if he's pulling it nice. real dope cool, at the end of typing ur eulogy. got that deer in the headlights look in defeat cuz when i'm done Keenan Allen finishes 2nd in votes, guess i'll be the rookie to beat okay alittle forced. allen knight ur slut fucks me daily, son I rocker, cuz ur dumb n awkward her pussy's Juicy J, & she bounce it on my cock till she screams like she won a oscar okay opener off the rip i demolished u, on one thinks this scrub raw this weak bitch been done by the first bar faster than a lightweight at a pub crawl nice try to use guns on me, then rippin is my resolution if J Gatsby out, im shootin'em in face so theres a book written on the execution this was cool ur couldn't make a ho squirt, this ugly fuck a frail guy U never got a pussy terrain cuz ur face has more bumps on it then a trail ride haha dope ur the biggest faggot around, ur gayness shred's eyelids j & silent bob go perfect together cuz hes always suckin off fat dudes in dead silence okay ur mom loves to slurp my dick, she's in a thong workin me That slut jerked it till her elbow blew out & needed 5 major Tommy john surgeries nice Overall, decent battle. Def seen better from allen. and jilti had an okay verse, had a nice flow to it. This one is real tough to call, but i think ima go with jilti. Mvgt - Jilti good battle tho fellas
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so fuck tying the knot, ladies rather hang themselves on some suicide shit
that's a do or die bitch. cuz if any girl Marion Knight, she must look like him duel with fists. while AL rather catfight like a bully bitch anything he'll do ta win. whether blowout or by a hair, even if he's pulling it vs ur slut fucks me daily, son I rocker, cuz ur dumb n awkward her pussy's Juicy J, & she bounce it on my cock till she screams like she won a oscar try to use guns on me, then rippin is my resolution if J Gatsby out, im shootin'em in face so theres a book written on the execution ur couldn't make a ho squirt, this ugly fuck a frail guy U never got a pussy terrain cuz ur face has more bumps on it then a trail ride this was a pretty even battle, i thought i would see more from Allen but he barely posted enough to take the win. Jit came decent which was unexpected. Vote- Allen |
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Marion Knight / by a hair
Vs Pussy terrain / Tommy john This was close. Allen you half assed this. I liked J's 2 quotes better but thought Allen was more consistent. I almost quoted the. Gatsby line and the opener wasn't bad. He had less misses, so for consistency... V/ Allen Knight |
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so fuck tying the knot, ladies rather hang themselves on some suicide shit
that's a do or die bitch. cuz if any girl Marion Knight, she must look like him vs off the rip i demolished u, on one thinks this scrub raw this weak bitch been done by the first bar faster than a lightweight at a pub crawl try to use guns on me, then rippin is my resolution if J Gatsby out, im shootin'em in face so theres a book written on the execution a lot closer than i thought it would be...I think AK barely snuck by here...Jilt came outta nowhere...good shit fellas! v/AK
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Marion Knight; by a hair; vs. Allen Knight: juicy j; j gastby; pussy terrain; I edged this one to Allen Knight. Not his best work but he was more creative and had better wording that Jilti. Although I was impressed by some of Jilti's stuff it still needs some fine tuning. V/ Allen Knight |
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I thought jil dropped fire imo
Blowout hair n marion barz were dope. Really raw verse. Ak had a dope verse with the bumps on face n gatsby lines but i actually think jil wirding was better. Also the pull hair line was lotb to me so Vite jil |
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I had J with Marion Knight and hair line....had Allen with Gatsby (which was a fresssssh line and my LOTB), pussy terrain and dead silence....J almost surprised allen here....but honestly that Gatsby line was so dope, won the whole battle....although I did enjoy the Marion Knight line second most in the battle.
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so fuck tying the knot, ladies rather hang themselves on some suicide shit
that's a do or die bitch. cuz if any girl Marion Knight, she must look like him vs off the rip i demolished u, on one thinks this scrub raw this weak bitch been done by the first bar faster than a lightweight at a pub crawl try to use guns on me, then rippin is my resolution if J Gatsby out, im shootin'em in face so theres a book written on the execution Being generous Ak got it
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I got AK taking this pretty easily
I was surprised jilti got as many votes as he did honestly the flow was there, but the lines are loooong and some were punch less Allan had Gatsby and pub crawl, which was enough to take it I thought jiltis closer had potential v/AK |
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