is this a good start, tryin to find a balance between flow and content

[YDK]

Originally Posted by gitto138

My prospective thoughts are gathered, and kept protected in a collective box, receptors squashed, and stretched across some septic moss,
until all of my respect is lost,
perception crossed a path except it often lacks conception, balls, ive left them on the reception desk, to prevent erection, so i cant ascend, lie low,
offend a decent question,
with the least neglection, end up with a yeast infection,
a beasts reflection on what he sees, perfection, tossed in a priests confession, box, im dangerous till this recent lesson stops, i need affection, cuz my internal pump has undergone repossession, no wonder im real possessive,

shorten the line lengths first off, that alone will help you balance it a lot better. you can keep the same content just break the lines up so you can see if the syllable counts and lengths are are close/balanced. once you get that part somewhat even focus more on the content itself and don't just write to rhyme, write to actually vent and put yourself into it so the emotion comes naturally and doesn't just come off as words that happen to rhyme