07-19-2014, 07:33 AM | #1 |
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Amen vs. Malachi - [Amen WINS]
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07-19-2014, 09:37 AM | #2 |
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07-19-2014, 11:01 AM | #3 |
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07-19-2014, 12:14 PM | #4 |
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I fuck pussy in ALL types of positions, leave'em sore & damage them,
When Malposition’n pussy… His moms wished the umbilical chord strangled him. Last edited by Amen; 07-19-2014 at 12:29 PM. |
07-24-2014, 01:54 AM | #5 |
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Hoes worhsip me ya virgin, you stressin cause yo girl no exception pal
Only way amen can get in her mouth ever, is if shes prayin to Mal
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07-24-2014, 02:38 AM | #6 |
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Amen - you should of added the s to malposition, it still would have worked and come off way smoother..malpositions' n pussy as opposed to malposition'n. Great bar.
Malachi - only way amen could get in her mouth ever..really did a disservice to the execution of ur bar. I think saying only way amen could ever get in her mouth would have been a much better direction to take it. Also the way it ended with..is if she prayin to mal felt somewhat abrupt. Not a bad attempt, though. v-Amen |
07-24-2014, 11:05 PM | #7 |
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I liked mal's line better
the fact that his name is Amen is confusing because you want to read it like a nameplay like the only way 'Aman' can get in her mouth, but that's not the concept it's the only way Amen can get in her mouth is when she's praying to mal. that's clever shit. Amen's punch was worded poorly IMO and doesn't really rhyme either v/malachi |
07-24-2014, 11:35 PM | #8 | |
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I really had ta read a vote to catch this punch. That was clever. I dug it way more than the Amen drop. Good stuff.
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07-25-2014, 02:00 AM | #9 |
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Had to read Mal's like 7 times but it finally struck me. It was pretty cool
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07-25-2014, 02:09 AM | #10 |
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A Dis vs. Bragadocia in a battle contest = dis will always win
V/ Amen Two crisp and solid bars though
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07-25-2014, 10:10 AM | #11 |
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I felt three praying to mal part made no sence to me. I get the amen n praying part but maybe u should of used an on her knees reference.
Amens bar was pretty harsh n solid to me. I like the concept n execution. V amen |
07-25-2014, 11:23 AM | #12 |
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Amen yours is good but I think mals was smoother and hit harder
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07-25-2014, 09:48 PM | #13 |
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Tough battle to decide with this one. Two pretty good lines but I feel Amen's was a lot fresher since I haven't heard it, the nameplay hit harder, and the flow was a bit better. Mak good line as well but I gotta go with your opponent for more originality & impact here.
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07-27-2014, 08:25 AM | #14 |
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Interesting. Amen, I have a love/hate relationship with your bar. The set up was okay. The nameplay attempt is a bit awkward. And for me, it's because of the punch you used to deliver it. It doesn't seem to connect for me. Probably could have reworded it to make it more cleaner. Mal, I have a similar issue with your bar as well. But for yours, it's more of the fact that the "punch" aspect reads a bit more bragging than a straight punch.
Reading both bars a couple more times... Amen's set up was a self-hype set up leading to a nameplay-punch connection which doesn't deliver much for me. Mal's set up was a direct shot, leading to his nameplay-punch connection, which comes off more brag than punch, but still has a bit more of a connection. All in all, Mal's bar reads more cleaner, smoother for me while Amen's seemed to build up to the nameplay-punch... but slightly misses the point. MVGT: Malachi. Good job by both competitors.
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07-27-2014, 08:29 PM | #15 |
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5-4 Malachi
Is it really that hard to put Vote - (Person you are voting for) at the end of your vote people lol |
07-29-2014, 10:19 AM | #16 |
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V/ Amen
Dug both to some extent but Amen's moreso. Mal's flip seemed a little too contrived to make the wp work.
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07-29-2014, 12:13 PM | #17 |
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Good battle. Felt amen punch was nice af. Mal yours was good too, but the amen/prayer flip has been done to death and this flip could of been better.
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07-30-2014, 04:10 AM | #18 |
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MVGT mal btw.
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07-30-2014, 02:59 PM | #19 |
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vote amen
close battle an mal had a good punch but the wording was just a bit off while amen's concept and execution was enough to win my vote
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07-30-2014, 05:40 PM | #20 |
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Amen 7 - Mal 5 - Can we get some more votes?
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