09-08-2014, 06:41 PM | #1 |
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Potatosacklegend vs Beans - BEANS WINS
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09-08-2014, 06:53 PM | #2 |
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http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=92621 Some gay poem he wrote got no feed I fuck moms into vegetable state, I'll son ya shit weak text & if they talk'n of a hot potato? It's gossiping about their kids recess I'm champ'n this tourney, this beat down won't be fun Whip U wit the belt, so change your User Title ...to "this my only one:(" Dude you'll never shine, I hit a bitch wit hot rights So it's no problem for potato to roger good-L's... <---& thats ya only spot light! Nothing you release is positive, negative note? I punch heads Cos we'll never see P-sacks dope unless it's failing a drug test Ya posted poem was gay, even U sees that We couldn't stomach that read, that's why U got no feed back That shit was choppy as fuck! Ya can't cut hype with beans kid So if U ever think you gotta edge in this? I'll use it to slice U to pieces |
09-11-2014, 07:56 PM | #5 |
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ya girls tired of u fuckin her, she needs me to charge her. my sex is liver, dunny
poundin her ass out with my drum stick is all i need to energizer bunny everyday i wake up under the weather n need a pick me up to write glossy schemes im too sick to be around you n im highly doubtful u want to end up coughy beans this sloppy feen will need rehab after i flip bars N set bombs i wanted to show him what bein dopamine its too bad he'll inject that into his arm from heron u got ko'ed by allen knight after claimin u spark infrareds like u hectic son we never seen sunbeams but judging by ur pic u'd break the scale if u stepped on 1 faggot evry bitch u picked up ended up likcin my ass sauce im not playin no fuckin games even tho i always have bean bags toss Tellem "I lost my limbs but if i show u my dick ull want it in ur mouth in a sec" once i send them a pic of daddy long leg they start to bug out on the web |
09-12-2014, 12:33 PM | #6 |
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I fuck moms into vegetable state, I'll son ya shit weak text & if they talk'n of a hot potato? It's gossiping about their kids recess thought this couldve been worded better, dope concept tho I'm champ'n this tourney, this beat down won't be fun Whip U wit the belt, so change your User Title ...to "this my only one:(" nah Dude you'll never shine, I hit a bitch wit hot rights So it's no problem for potato to roger good-L's... <---& thats ya only spot light! thought this was coo w/o the spotlight ending Nothing you release is positive, negative note? I punch heads Cos we'll never see P-sacks dope unless it's failing a drug test lol coo coo Ya posted poem was gay, even U sees that We couldn't stomach that read, that's why U got no feed back smh dope That shit was choppy as fuck! Ya can't cut hype with beans kid So if U ever think you gotta edge in this? I'll use it to slice U to pieces[/QUOTE] nah, weak potato: ya girls tired of u fuckin her, she needs me to charge her. my sex is liver, dunny poundin her ass out with my drum stick is all i need to energizer bunny tbh, the energizer bunny lines are played, i liked the flow of this tho everyday i wake up under the weather n need a pick me up to write glossy schemes im too sick to be around you n im highly doubtful u want to end up coughy beans mad potential but "coughy" is a stretch "ima charge you a cough fee bean" this sloppy feen will need rehab after i flip bars N set bombs i wanted to show him what bein dopamine its too bad he'll inject that into his arm from heron i hate that you misspelled heroin u got ko'ed by allen knight after claimin u spark infrareds like u hectic son we never seen sunbeams but judging by ur pic u'd break the scale if u stepped on 1 nah faggot evry bitch u picked up ended up likcin my ass sauce im not playin no fuckin games even tho i always have bean bags toss the wording too sloppy Tellem "I lost my limbs but if i show u my dick ull want it in ur mouth in a sec" once i send them a pic of daddy long leg they start to bug out on the web lmaooo wtf this was a very entertaining battle. both were inconsistent at times. with one being more than the other. i have potato edging this out. due to more inconsistencies on potato part. vote: beans
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09-13-2014, 12:27 PM | #7 |
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I fuck moms into vegetable state, I'll son ya shit weak text & if they talk'n of a hot potato? It's gossiping about their kids recess You saying kids play hot potato at little lunch? weird, dont get it. I'm champ'n this tourney, this beat down won't be fun Whip U wit the belt, so change your User Title ...to "this my only one:(" Kinda ok Dude you'll never shine, I hit a bitch wit hot rights So it's no problem for potato to roger good-L's... <---& thats ya only spot light! Dont get it Nothing you release is positive, negative note? I punch heads Cos we'll never see P-sacks dope unless it's failing a drug test wack Ya posted poem was gay, even U sees that We couldn't stomach that read, that's why U got no feed back nah That shit was choppy as fuck! Ya can't cut hype with beans kid So if U ever think you gotta edge in this? I'll use it to slice U to pieces[/QUOTE] weak potato ya girls tired of u fuckin her, she needs me to charge her. my sex is liver, dunny poundin her ass out with my drum stick is all i need to energizer bunny you calling her puss a bunny? weird everyday i wake up under the weather n need a pick me up to write glossy schemes im too sick to be around you n im highly doubtful u want to end up coughy beans weak this sloppy feen will need rehab after i flip bars N set bombs i wanted to show him what bein dopamine its too bad he'll inject that into his arm from heron. seen doper mean/dopamine before, bad flip u got ko'ed by allen knight after claimin u spark infrareds like u hectic son we never seen sunbeams but judging by ur pic u'd break the scale if u stepped on 1 I seen sunbeams, wack faggot evry bitch u picked up ended up likcin my ass sauce im not playin no fuckin games even tho i always have bean bags toss homo Tellem "I lost my limbs but if i show u my dick ull want it in ur mouth in a sec" once i send them a pic of daddy long leg they start to bug out on the web. wack V-Beans, marginally less weird |
09-14-2014, 12:37 PM | #8 |
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Tough battle to pick a winner cuz HONESTLY I felt u both had strong verses. And I capitalized honestly cuz real talk some dudes on this site vote against people cuz either 1 they feel threatened by them and wanna get rid of them or 2 they just don't know how to vote. That's my opinion and fuck whoever mad about it.
beans I fuck moms into vegetable state, I'll son ya shit weak text & if they talk'n of a hot potato? It's gossiping about their kids recess Enjoyable line it's decent but just needed a newer metaphor for hot potato since that's not known as a big recess game right now or if it is should uh just linked it to an article explaining it's popular and that would have made this line more effective. I'm champ'n this tourney, this beat down won't be fun Whip U wit the belt, so change your User Title ...to "this my only one:(" Solid line. Felt u didn't need the ellipsis but other than that solid line. Dude you'll never shine, I hit a bitch wit hot rights So it's no problem for potato to roger good-L's... <---& thats ya only spot light! Best line so far, solid, just lacking in creativity Nothing you release is positive, negative note? I punch heads Cos we'll never see P-sacks dope unless it's failing a drug test Nice line, pretty creative too, and it tied nameplay into the meta, good shit. Ya posted poem was gay, even U sees that We couldn't stomach that read, that's why U got no feed back Line way to simple for me and I didn't think it was harsh enough to excuse its simplicity. That shit was choppy as fuck! Ya can't cut hype with beans kid So if U ever think you gotta edge in this? I'll use it to slice U to pieces very nice closer. Ok metaphor, and solid punch with a good flow. potato ya girls tired of u fuckin her, she needs me to charge her. my sex is liver, dunny poundin her ass out with my drum stick is all i need to energizer bunny I get it and it's an effective line but I don't like it lol yet it's still effective and works well, especially in the imagery department. everyday i wake up under the weather n need a pick me up to write glossy schemes im too sick to be around you n im highly doubtful u want to end up coughy beans Ok line just felt the coffee metaphor could have been better connected. this sloppy feen will need rehab after i flip bars N set bombs i wanted to show him what bein dopamine its too bad he'll inject that into his arm from heron. Didnt like this bar nor feel it was strong because the heron line could have punched him more directly besides just insulting his intelligence u got ko'ed by allen knight after claimin u spark infrareds like u hectic son we never seen sunbeams but judging by ur pic u'd break the scale if u stepped on 1 Didnt like this bar at all and felt it wasn't strong due to the fact that the sunbeams part could have had a more creative insult instead of the obvious scale thing. faggot evry bitch u picked up ended up likcin my ass sauce im not playin no fuckin games even tho i always have bean bags toss Didnt like the way u structured the punch and bean bags is waaaaay to obvious. Tellem "I lost my limbs but if i show u my dick ull want it in ur mouth in a sec" once i send them a pic of daddy long leg they start to bug out on the web Not an effective closer, it was different for sure, but the punch was not hard hitting. V/ Beans Beans won more bars and did it in majority of the cats. |
09-15-2014, 12:28 PM | #9 |
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Ya posted poem was gay, even U sees that
We couldn't stomach that read, that's why U got no feed back That shit was choppy as fuck! Ya can't cut hype with beans kid So if U ever think you gotta edge in this? I'll use it to slice U to pieces Vs ya girls tired of u fuckin her, she needs me to charge her. my sex is liver, dunny poundin her ass out with my drum stick is all i need to energizer bunny this sloppy feen will need rehab after i flip bars N set bombs i wanted to show him what bein dopamine its too bad he'll inject that into his arm from heron conclusion: even on quotes at 2 a piece, so i'm gonna judge by the rest of each verses. thought PSL was more consistent, better attempts. Good battle here by both Vote-Potato Sack in a close one |
09-15-2014, 03:10 PM | #10 |
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Nothing you release is positive, negative note? I punch heads
Cos we'll never see P-sacks dope unless it's failing a drug test vs Tellem "I lost my limbs but if i show u my dick ull want it in ur mouth in a sec" once i send them a pic of daddy long leg they start to bug out on the web Beans: "That shit was choppy as fuck! Ya can't cut hype with beans kid So if U ever think you gotta edge in this? I'll use it to slice U to pieces" is overused concept beans. PTS: "everyday i wake up under the weather n need a pick me up to write glossy schemes im too sick to be around you n im highly doubtful u want to end up coughy beans" thought this was a cool concept. could have been worded better though imo to make it hit harder. overall, both were okay. but if i had to chose one that had less lines that didn't miss it would be Beans
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09-15-2014, 03:14 PM | #11 |
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I fuck moms into vegetable state, I'll son ya shit weak text
& if they talk'n of a hot potato? It's gossiping about their kids recess EH WORDING, OK NP I'm champ'n this tourney, this beat down won't be fun Whip U wit the belt, so change your User Title ...to "this my only one:(" NO Dude you'll never shine, I hit a bitch wit hot rights So it's no problem for potato to roger good-L's... <---& thats ya only spot light! NOT FEELING THIS Nothing you release is positive, negative note? I punch heads Cos we'll never see P-sacks dope unless it's failing a drug test COULD HAVE BEEN BETTER Ya posted poem was gay, even U sees that We couldn't stomach that read, that's why U got no feed back NO REAL DISS JUST A STATEMENT That shit was choppy as fuck! Ya can't cut hype with beans kid So if U ever think you gotta edge in this? I'll use it to slice U to pieces EH VS ya girls tired of u fuckin her, she needs me to charge her. my sex is liver, dunny poundin her ass out with my drum stick is all i need to energizer bunny OK everyday i wake up under the weather n need a pick me up to write glossy schemes im too sick to be around you n im highly doubtful u want to end up coughy beans HAD POTENTIAL, FELL FLAT this sloppy feen will need rehab after i flip bars N set bombs i wanted to show him what bein dopamine its too bad he'll inject that into his arm from heron TOO WORDY u got ko'ed by allen knight after claimin u spark infrareds like u hectic son we never seen sunbeams but judging by ur pic u'd break the scale if u stepped on 1 COOL faggot evry bitch u picked up ended up likcin my ass sauce im not playin no fuckin games even tho i always have bean bags toss WTF ? Tellem "I lost my limbs but if i show u my dick ull want it in ur mouth in a sec" once i send them a pic of daddy long leg they start to bug out on the web NAH PSL had 2 bars I likes that I think was enough for him to win. Vote: PSL |
09-15-2014, 04:51 PM | #12 |
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I'm champ'n this tourney, this beat down won't be fun
Whip U wit the belt, so change your User Title ...to "this my only one:(" vs Tellem "I lost my limbs but if i show u my dick ull want it in ur mouth in a sec" once i send them a pic of daddy long leg they start to bug out on the web Ehh the wording in this was bad to me, No creativity, No hard hitting lines... I had to settle for a winner after the read. vote/ Beans |
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3&4rd lines good. 5th & 6th line, not really structured well… you had to put a <--- just to get your point across. Woulda been good if the 6th line matched the 5th, in length. 7th & 8th lines, really good. 9th & 10th, I don't like how you went after his poem & posted a link, but its a battle. closing lines, very good. Quote:
3rd, & 4th, not sure if you spelled "coughy" like that on purpose, but good lines. 5th & 6th line -- 6th line was too long & misspelled words on both lines. 7th - 10th lines -- very good 11,12th lines as a closer wasn't good enough. /v Beans |
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