Championship Match: BROKE LESNAR vs. Jilti [BROKE LESNAR Wins]

BROKE LESNAR · 09-16-2014, 10:19 PM

BROKE LESNAR (C)

BROKE became champion when defeating Destroyer a few weeks back. Since then he has defended against a hungry YDK and an even more respected opponent in Meth. Jilti will definitely be a challenge and this battle should not disappoint.

Jilti

Jilti, similar to Blanco Bishop, has been doing exceedingly well for himself and elevating at an admirable rate. Which explains why both are currently embroiled in a BA Contenders match. I'm not going to link it. Since Jilti arrived he was quick to adopt the requisite NC text battle format. He has been cutting his teeth in the BA and used that experience to successfully make a name for himself in the 1-2 Punch League. His creativity is improving every battle and I applaud him for pushing himself. The future of NC relies on guys like Jilti to keep it relevent, and if he stays dedicated to the site, I believe we are in good hands.

Due Monday 12am PST

BROKE LESNAR · 09-18-2014, 05:19 AM

Check.

BROKE LESNAR · 09-20-2014, 07:40 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by BROKE LESNAR

The future of NC relies on guys like Jilti to keep it relevent, and if he stays dedicated to the site, I believe we are in good hands.

i lied

u dimwitted shit for brains, no way this twit is offin me
if ur a glimpse of the future, its what mike judge envisioned with idiocracy

jilti · 09-21-2014, 02:36 PM

since ur a big wrestling fan, here u go..

this Mankind of a hardcore legend in his own right, no lie
cuz Dude Love getting pounded thru tables more than that old guy

bang, bang

El Muffin · 09-21-2014, 02:56 PM

iono.

jilti I like all the tie ins..but ive seen dude love lines b4 but not flipped like that

pretty good line tho

I think broke took it though

smooth n direct beats a good flip on a played concept

v broke

theMuzzl3 · 09-21-2014, 05:49 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by BROKE LESNAR

i lied

u dimwitted shit for brains, no way this twit is offin me
if ur a glimpse of the future, its what mike judge envisioned with idiocracy

Over-all, great creative concept & stuck to it; and still was insulting. I had to google "Mike Judge idiocracy", but the description of the movie said it all. I love learning new shit. Good over-all structure, though the 2nd line was a bit long, I don't think that matters because of the conceptual ideas.

Quote:

Originally Posted by jilti

this Mankind of a hardcore legend in his own right, no lie
cuz Dude Love getting pounded thru tables more than that old guy

Jilti's lines were much more insulting, which I have learned is a huge part of battling. You had to put ",no lie" just to make the lines rhyme though, and I think you tossed this together in like 5-10 minutes. You have more potential than what was posted here… and the structure wasn't perfect. I'd like to see you put words in the lines that rhyme (other than the last word of the line) and keep the structural content solid.

/v BROKE LESNAR

Kin · 09-21-2014, 08:07 PM

Broke....set up.fit good wit.punch....dope shit...pretty hard

J...set up had a nice play of."mankind a" ...nice...dude love again was nice but the pounded through tables/gay play was the weak point...thought this coulda been more creative using the mick foley better besides /hardcore/tables....

Close.... j woulda had it in my eyez if he had better closer

Vote ...broke

Kill Spree · 09-22-2014, 08:57 AM

Broke a bar was nice. Executed smoothly. Where j I felt could have made this bar harsher. Still pretty dope battle here but I got broke edging this

V/broke

Packed Graves · 09-23-2014, 11:37 PM

The tid bit about mankind I like how it ties in just didn't come across with great impact where I feel the idiocracy was more creative with better impact.

Champ

Tomb · 09-24-2014, 09:18 AM

Jil had a alright punch but broke was more smoother n direct

V/ broke

Certain · 09-24-2014, 11:28 AM

BROKE LESNAR: Quoting your own battle preview as part of the setup for a two-line battle is amateur shit. Also the line was really direct. It was like a 4Chan sweet burn once the invented personal was delegitimized.

jilti: Wrestler name flips are tough because they've been done so much. Yours was OK.

Vote: jilti

09-21-2014, 02:56 PM	#5
El Muffin DOHpe since 02' Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: Surrounded by white ppl Posts: 14,693 Battle Record: 43-24 Champed - Netcees Battle League - 1-2 Punch Onslaught - 1-2 Punch League - Hot or Thot Roast - Hot or Thot 2018 - Fight Night 11 - NPL Roast Rep Power: 34230532	iono. jilti I like all the tie ins..but ive seen dude love lines b4 but not flipped like that pretty good line tho I think broke took it though smooth n direct beats a good flip on a played concept v broke __________________ It’s like weed in Highschool- w/ the cans I’ll smoke you Bitch I floss . I Got the chain out to see like Constantinople

09-18-2014, 05:19 AM	#2
BROKE LESNAR βгοкε ㄴεςηαг Join Date: Jun 2013 Posts: 2,245 Battle Record: 9-4 Champed - 1-2 Punch League Rep Power: 12760961	Check.

09-21-2014, 02:36 PM	#4
jilti neckties Join Date: Jul 2014 Posts: 1,629 Battle Record: 43-19 Champed - BA Cypher - 1-2 Punch League Rep Power: 20816225	since ur a big wrestling fan, here u go.. this Mankind of a hardcore legend in his own right, no lie cuz Dude Love getting pounded thru tables more than that old guy bang, bang

09-21-2014, 08:07 PM	#7
Kin Kill.It.Nonstop Join Date: Jun 2014 Posts: 666 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 662198	Broke....set up.fit good wit.punch....dope shit...pretty hard J...set up had a nice play of."mankind a" ...nice...dude love again was nice but the pounded through tables/gay play was the weak point...thought this coulda been more creative using the mick foley better besides /hardcore/tables.... Close.... j woulda had it in my eyez if he had better closer Vote ...broke

09-22-2014, 08:57 AM	#8
Kill Spree Senior Member Join Date: Feb 2014 Posts: 4,439 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 37645695	Broke a bar was nice. Executed smoothly. Where j I felt could have made this bar harsher. Still pretty dope battle here but I got broke edging this V/broke

09-23-2014, 11:37 PM	#9
Packed Graves Name Flips Are Clever Join Date: Sep 2014 Posts: 471 Battle Record: 9-10 Champed - Alias Tourney '14 Rep Power: 777844	The tid bit about mankind I like how it ties in just didn't come across with great impact where I feel the idiocracy was more creative with better impact. Champ

09-24-2014, 09:18 AM	#10
Tomb Your Place Of Residents Join Date: Sep 2014 Posts: 29 Rep Power: 0	Jil had a alright punch but broke was more smoother n direct V/ broke

09-24-2014, 11:28 AM	#11
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,072 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899403	BROKE LESNAR: Quoting your own battle preview as part of the setup for a two-line battle is amateur shit. Also the line was really direct. It was like a 4Chan sweet burn once the invented personal was delegitimized. jilti: Wrestler name flips are tough because they've been done so much. Yours was OK. Vote: jilti