10-01-2014, 05:20 AM | #1 |
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Certain vs. Beans [Certain Wins]
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10-01-2014, 11:54 AM | #2 |
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THIS IS NO CONTEST. SEE, HE LOST FROM THE FIRST GO.
I'LL LEAVE BEANS BAGGED, BUT IT WON'T BE HIS FIRST TIME BEING TOSSED IN A CORNHOLE. |
10-01-2014, 02:54 PM | #3 |
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There's nothing dope insert, but hope he dies that way |
10-01-2014, 03:18 PM | #4 |
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Certain u lucky I googled bean bags/cornhole
At first I was lile ok hes baggin beans Then the tossed in the cornhole part had me Like wtf? Beans was aight..kind or primitive but its ight Enter google Apparently theres a game called tailgate where u toss bean bags in some device with a hole at the end.(called cornhole) The reference vague as fuck but I did the legwork 4 ya V certain
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10-01-2014, 07:29 PM | #5 |
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lulz at the corn hole shit was clever I liked it, my family use to play that.
beans your bar wasn't bad I liked the concept but your follow through was bad. Vote cert
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10-01-2014, 10:35 PM | #6 |
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v/certain punch was ok. i would of gave it to beans with a better setup/wording..if worded different i think it would have hit harder
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10-01-2014, 10:40 PM | #7 |
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I liked the insert np but I think beans didn't do much with the actual punch.. setup and execution needed work to tie in. Certains had some wording issues that I wasn't feeling but he put more into the concept and it worked well for me.
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10-02-2014, 08:56 PM | #8 |
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Beans had a bar that when I first read it earlier the np went right over my head (im sick). After reading it again I thought it was a pretty decent flip on a drug concept and the np fit perfectly into it. Against a different bar I would say this would of been a win, but Certain had a np and reference that I'm intimately familiar with, so it hit hard and brought me in from the get go.
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10-02-2014, 10:11 PM | #9 |
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Cert...get wha u did..thought it was a lil "corny" as far as how it was worded...but creative
Beans...this had alotta potential ..u made it to be dope in cert... but.if.u usin.the word insert...shoulda flipped it so it was relating to a more direct wording of inserting somethin dope in him...I dunno real nice concept...juz.not.connectin Vote... Certain for Certain |
10-04-2014, 10:22 PM | #10 |
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Bean...u have the potential to be nice bro. Just spend a little more time connecting your wp tio your concept.
Cert got this tho.. Good concept. V cert |
10-04-2014, 11:41 PM | #11 |
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read this battle 3 times and sheesh..
i actually liked both. certain had a funny bean bag/cornhole nameplay which i think is fresh but then i get to beans and...he takes the nameplay route as well but his was unique due to the fact, it didnt hit me til later.. which i think makes it that much better. vote: beans.
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Quote:
I feel this battle may have been one that matched up a great Netcee vs. a new up & coming guy. You could've done better, but you tossed this out quickly. Instead of "Overall", I'll say: all together, scored it 8/10. Quote:
My best advice to you is talk to Sharp Nine about punchlines, and study past posts on this forum. One dude gave me the best advice, which write your verse, then read it backwards and make sure it still rhymes and flows. I think the A,B,B,A format gets unused a lot… which is good, writers should have freedom of what to write… given its 2 lines. /v Certain PS: I believe the term is "plug" or "plugged"... lol
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