11-18-2015, 08:42 PM | #1 |
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Bonus Battle: 1-2 Adonis vs. 2-1 Vulgar (Vulgar wins 2-1)
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Let me know if you want a different one, I can change it due tomorrow, Thursday @Vulgar The records are from what I remeber, though I feel like we might be 1-1 or 2-1 in favor of you? No matter, horrible luck to you my friend EDIT: Fixed You are 2-1 against me here. Not counting PR cause I was learning Voting on this will count towards voting for participants *obviously more important to vote on the actual battles but hey, I'm vein*
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11-18-2015, 09:11 PM | #2 |
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I'm in love
@Vulgar fell in love @20:50 - 24:00 Hard mix right there entire thing is dope tho peace in death sir @asylum @Nigma might like these beats?
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11-18-2015, 09:58 PM | #4 |
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Belly of the beast, no, belly so serene
See, Mother bore her beliefs Knowing she could only teach what she sees Could never live for the seeds she conceived So if they learn love but recede Her teachings would become unjust with replete After all, angel dust is a fucking receipt The path to failure is abrupt for the weak And the tailored suits are tied to a tree Dangling ankles won't survive if they're free Darkened pigment lights once deceased Just a hue, but it's alright, we despise their disease After all, who doesn't love a swing in a breeze? Who doesn't love a Jew on it's knees? Pleading is a character loved by the king King David, King Yeshua, King little horn blowing decree It's all for the hope of gold manifesting in beings As a people we've infested her dreams Her love of free will, well, she's confessed it's empty Left dry rotting with the corpse's we freed From hand written letters to iPhones copying our speech The rabbit hole is one she dug and regrets having so She created We segregated So forget what you know
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11-20-2015, 04:17 PM | #5 |
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Itinerary for the Indigo Children
Venus fly trap time-lapse, deepened pockets swallow cress No river at end - sleep along the water crests Feel the songs of bonding flesh Plea a Tonkin dollar fetish caught in Unigod's remembrance... too bad the unibrow is gone - I'm headless A cuneiform of severed cords and Semtex bound to fires of dusk: a feudal lord's descendants Ode to rustled Jimi's - the true immortal Hendrix Life was born from more than metrics Dark matter nursery - mystery of formless gender Farming sulfur, borrowed from a foreign lender conception Gaelic, but abortion's Celtic and Saturnalia's a 1/4th pretentious Pour a quarter of this endorphin mixture it's more than pensive (this terra firma liquor ain't endless) Parent company of the Mars Rover, paying child support and Earth is our single home We live in an asylum of sorts Live. Adore. Barbed culture Moonchild's sonogram starts over Last edited by Vulgar; 11-20-2015 at 04:25 PM. |
11-21-2015, 01:13 AM | #6 |
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adonis- racism on mother earth. you tackled this from a cool angle. I think some of these ideas could have been expanded on with a little more complexity, but I like what I read also. Good job bro.
vulgar- i'm glad this is a bonus round. Some ideas were accesible for me, but I'm not so sure I got the main idea. To be fair I won't vote. This seems to ba a metaphor-laden piece about the coming about of the cosmos? Earth? Either way, I need to read more of you so I can get a grasp of you, as I barely scratched the surface on your pieces before my absence. Good job, I guess? As I said, I elect not to vote on this battle. Good job, you two.
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11-21-2015, 01:30 AM | #7 |
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Mvgt adonis here.. from what i understood, his piece was the more well rounded of the two. I understood his approach and he stuck with it. To be fair im not really sure what vulgar was talking about.... but it sounded fresh as fuuck. I read through it a couple times and was a dope verse but it was over my head if it was fully cohesive,
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11-21-2015, 12:11 PM | #8 |
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Adonis, I thought that opening line was written pretty smoothly
I like shit like that its like saying peter piper picked a peck of pickled peppers but what really stood out to me was the whole flow of your piece the transitioning is nice, the overall topic was cool for the topic at hand you two seem evenly matched as far as styles go though. this seemed straightforward to me nice work. Vulgar, its nice to see you take a break from the whole poetry sensation going on lately your verse seems more loosely based on the topic but not to the point you dont understand what you are saying. at first the opener felt kind of weird but then I felt like you were complimenting Adonis verse as well v/I feel like both verses were great they reflected their opponents in style & line length which makes this an easy read to say the least, of course Vulgar came with a more complicated approach, more metaphorical. Adonis came more mechanical and came with a pretty cool flow.....well so did Vulgar either way I feel like this battle all comes down to entertainment value. Adonis shined and its been awhile since I read anything from him, as for Vulgar his approach is reminiscent of his older verses really enjoyable reading both works. next time both of you can come catch this L from me though.... v/ Vulgar...for having the more entertaining verse
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11-22-2015, 05:14 AM | #9 |
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3 more votes and a winner is crowned.
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11-30-2015, 07:20 PM | #10 |
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Just felt like a better verse. Better concept, too. Adonis verse was pretty dope too. But, c'mon- indigo children?? dope idea. Any of ya'll actually into that shit?? Gotta thank the reefers for getting me into stuff like that.. Lol |
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