Colour Gradient Of Past

Alice White · 03-02-2016, 03:19 PM

[I"]Miss, we know this is going to be difficult for you,
but we need you to answer some questions.
Were you here in the house when it happened?"
"Miss, can you hear me?"
"Emily..?"
[/I]

She finally nodded, departing her eyes from a solace which revived on the portrait
of times in abundance; startled by her own spiteful enjoyment of her familiarised fortunes
unisonous, in an abnormal bliss, as the pendulum swings..
rocking back and forth in tenebrous lilts, she reminisced..

sunrays surpassed the ambiguity of that day
unveil the best for memorability is at stake
an arcadian set can tarnish brutally;the fate, that's left..
can emanate a threat, of manic-morality, a children's break?
The family of four, as they strolled down an alley once restored,
so happily on tour they couldn't see the break in the melody performed
by Emily's adjourn.

A broken prism altered into melodic waves
the molded spirit calmly consoled with craze
achromatic rays are begone in haze;
the echoing voices remain, as thoughts
circulating in a colour gradient past
to refractions of a shade - her savouring last!
besetting soliloquy as a variegated splash; of red..
what the officers couldn't say, was her fading in a mask..
when they asked for her parents and brother - fatally stabbed
finally, they were colourful amassed; - three souls, vacating at last..

Alice White · 03-05-2016, 08:30 PM

any feed on this is appreciated.

Alice White · 03-10-2016, 08:00 PM

up

Dabble MC · 03-16-2016, 11:17 AM

Alice, as ive said before - this piece is an amazing depiction of trauma. I think you painted the shock well, as well as set a very real setting. typical family outting turned mayhem. always enjoy your work.

Alice White · 03-16-2016, 12:00 PM

Thank you, I really appreciate it!

dull boy · 03-16-2016, 02:16 PM

Too vague. Abstract for the sake of abstraction, I felt. At times the seemingly 'advanced' vocabulary was unnecessary and worked as a cover for the lack of any real grasp on a concept or ability to paint it verbally.

Alice White · 03-16-2016, 03:25 PM

thanks!

emcee squared · 03-19-2016, 10:25 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by dull boy

Too vague. Abstract for the sake of abstraction, I felt. At times the seemingly 'advanced' vocabulary was unnecessary and worked as a cover for the lack of any real grasp on a concept or ability to paint it verbally.

03-02-2016, 03:19 PM	#1
Alice White Member Join Date: Dec 2015 Posts: 72 Rep Power: 0	Colour Gradient Of Past [I"]Miss, we know this is going to be difficult for you, but we need you to answer some questions. Were you here in the house when it happened?" "Miss, can you hear me?" "Emily..?" [/I] She finally nodded, departing her eyes from a solace which revived on the portrait of times in abundance; startled by her own spiteful enjoyment of her familiarised fortunes unisonous, in an abnormal bliss, as the pendulum swings.. rocking back and forth in tenebrous lilts, she reminisced.. sunrays surpassed the ambiguity of that day unveil the best for memorability is at stake an arcadian set can tarnish brutally;the fate, that's left.. can emanate a threat, of manic-morality, a children's break? The family of four, as they strolled down an alley once restored, so happily on tour they couldn't see the break in the melody performed by Emily's adjourn. A broken prism altered into melodic waves the molded spirit calmly consoled with craze achromatic rays are begone in haze; the echoing voices remain, as thoughts circulating in a colour gradient past to refractions of a shade - her savouring last! besetting soliloquy as a variegated splash; of red.. what the officers couldn't say, was her fading in a mask.. when they asked for her parents and brother - fatally stabbed finally, they were colourful amassed; - three souls, vacating at last.. __________________ https://theprincesstroll.wordpress.com

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Alice White Member Join Date: Dec 2015 Posts: 72 Rep Power: 0	any feed on this is appreciated. __________________ https://theprincesstroll.wordpress.com

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03-16-2016, 12:00 PM	#5
Alice White Member Join Date: Dec 2015 Posts: 72 Rep Power: 0	Thank you, I really appreciate it! __________________ https://theprincesstroll.wordpress.com

03-16-2016, 03:25 PM	#7
Alice White Member Join Date: Dec 2015 Posts: 72 Rep Power: 0	thanks! __________________ https://theprincesstroll.wordpress.com

03-16-2016, 11:17 AM	#4
Dabble MC Member Join Date: Mar 2016 Location: BAMF-Ville Posts: 44 Rep Power: 79521	Alice, as ive said before - this piece is an amazing depiction of trauma. I think you painted the shock well, as well as set a very real setting. typical family outting turned mayhem. always enjoy your work.

03-16-2016, 02:16 PM	#6
dull boy consults Lloyd Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 4,075 Battle Record: 0-8 Champed -1-2 Punch League Roast Rep Power: 39345600	Too vague. Abstract for the sake of abstraction, I felt. At times the seemingly 'advanced' vocabulary was unnecessary and worked as a cover for the lack of any real grasp on a concept or ability to paint it verbally.