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Old 12-13-2022, 05:20 PM   #21
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Old 12-13-2022, 06:11 PM   #22
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A BATTLE OF MOMILITH PROPORTIONS
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Old 12-13-2022, 06:39 PM   #23
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Dang! I been writing all morning...eh...I guess I'll try again this upcoming round. I apologize @MMLP.
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Old 12-14-2022, 02:39 AM   #24
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Old 12-14-2022, 04:42 AM   #25
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@Universe @Diablo/@sral

I want to qualify this comment by saying that I respect both of you very much... You must believe me... Reading your verses over the years has been a pleasure. FFS, my signature is a Universe quote, and I know for a fact reading Lars verses over the years has helped me improve AND entertained me.


ALL THAT SAID, (yes you're right it does feel good to complement)
but I just take issue with the tone of your votes for each other, as though the massive rhyming skills are being slept on? Universe had a clean sweep in votes (at the time) and many compliments in those votes, to which Lars said they are sleeping on his talent?
Or Uni's vote which basically said only those who can pull off those rhymes can recognize it in others? (Also a clean sweep at the time)

This is a text site and I'm pretty sure most regular readers are aware you two are top notch at rhymes/multi/structure.

Perhaps it's like a competitive athlete creating a chip on the shoulder -- whether that chip is fictional or not doesn't really matter because it helps the athlete perform.


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Speaking of multis
In a lighthouse off the coast of Greenland, some sunken alien crashed ship
The shuttle made it to Rapture amongst other subterranean factions


Lol, I really love the attempt here. Do you rap your own stuff?
I really do appreciate pushing the boundaries of multies--
I will say this is very difficult (maybe impossible) to execute, even if you speed up the first rhyme of sunken-alien-crashed-ship...
Let's take a look at the very last 2 syllables.. crashed ship / Rapture/ factions... not great on the tongue no matter how well the first part of the multi is bent to match.
Just giving you my feedback -- do not let it discourage you from pushing the boundaries though!
Most of the others looked clean and well-executed to me.

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Old 12-14-2022, 06:00 AM   #26
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lmao for what it’s worth I think that line you quoted may be more down to Uni’s accent than anything more

I gave him the benefit of the doubt
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Old 12-14-2022, 08:13 AM   #28
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Old 12-14-2022, 08:43 AM   #29
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Pharaohs Army will write a three page essay in the chat but won’t drop no damn bars though
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Old 12-14-2022, 11:47 AM   #30
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Speaking of multis
In a lighthouse off the coast of Greenland, some sunken alien crashed ship
The shuttle made it to Rapture amongst other subterranean factions


Lol, I really love the attempt here. Do you rap your own stuff?
I really do appreciate pushing the boundaries of multies--
I will say this is very difficult (maybe impossible) to execute, even if you speed up the first rhyme of sunken-alien-crashed-ship...
Let's take a look at the very last 2 syllables.. crashed ship / Rapture/ factions... not great on the tongue no matter how well the first part of the multi is bent to match.
Just giving you my feedback -- do not let it discourage you from pushing the boundaries though!
Most of the others looked clean and well-executed to me.
no bias but
https://voca.ro/1frIazRhNZBN

also p sure rapture amongst is lining up with greenland, some so I probably should have paused longer

wait shit this audio is gonna give Diablo a terrifying realization that I'm not an alt lmao
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all I'm saying for the kids that ain't writing where they should be, y'all some heads in here that they prolly look up to and are impressed by.

maybe they're not ready for AWOL but they're still allowed to contend, give them something constructive or helpful, even if you don't wanna dig in to find an unpolished gem of advice. give them encouragement.

seems dumb to have a mostly dead event, and some of the people that seem enthusiastic about it aren't being encouraged to grow and help improve the event *shrug*

everyone's got a unique writing style, and inevitably it can be dope once they figure out how to clean it up.
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Good verse @NYCSPITZ. Sorry I didn’t write anything after I said I would. Credit where it’s due - Frank, these topics are excellent. Don’t put me in again though, I don’t have the right combination of motivation and time to actually write anything.
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no bias but
https://voca.ro/1frIazRhNZBN

also p sure rapture amongst is lining up with greenland, some so I probably should have paused longer

wait shit this audio is gonna give Diablo a terrifying realization that I'm not an alt lmao
Fair enough. I will admit that my “maybe impossible” comment was wrong, as yours doesn’t sound bad. I detect a slight accent on your clip, which may have helped. I guess I stand corrected @Universe
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