08-11-2016, 01:24 PM | #1 |
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Friendship Whoa's
We used to talk, eat, and love to be together
Now all you do is stalk, cheat, and monitor the screen forever Wishing upon my next move, stfu man you don't even let me text you! Somethin I need to get off my chest dude, techs groove..u can get sumthn off ur chest too! . . . . . Giggle, laugh, jump around, hands in the air.....s'what we used to do I used to root, cheer...ask for you. Now a 9 to ur heads the only way I'll ever clap for you I've slept on your air matress, thank god it was waterproof Even sonned you in the bed to make sure it would forever be daughter proof You had a smile like Wayne Brady, until you put me on trial like Tom Brady I peeped you peepin her! Twas way shady, you even lied about it & said ur eyes lazy You were my protector, mentor, always came prepared for "shh"...if it ever came to that Bro you even named yourself AK cuz I know ur stay in strapped, shawty I'm just statin #facts.... ~1~ Links coming up Last edited by i single; 08-11-2016 at 01:26 PM. |
08-11-2016, 02:34 PM | #2 |
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This is open for feed btw
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08-11-2016, 04:37 PM | #3 |
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Did not like much, if any, of this at all.
Thanks for the read!
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08-11-2016, 04:50 PM | #4 |
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That's bullsht and ou know it @PancakeBrah
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08-12-2016, 08:01 AM | #5 |
As-salamu alaykum!
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Utterly gay. Don't ever tag me again.
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08-18-2016, 01:40 AM | #6 |
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Wow, this was mad okayish. Keep writing
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08-24-2016, 06:35 PM | #7 |
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literally lold when you said that your eyes lazy.
this was an interesting take on a piece for around here. pretty cool introduction, the lines seemed well crafted thought you could have fared better with more lines. kind of reminded me of something.....especially after the ~1~... that seems ....odd
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04-12-2020, 08:18 PM | #8 |
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This was alright to me, it could have been better
add more spice would be cool |
04-15-2020, 04:26 AM | #9 |
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It's better than what Robranda would write...
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04-15-2020, 01:16 PM | #10 |
low tide in serotonin bay
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Leave it to Roro to sniff out a 4 year old post from someone named "I <3 dick"
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