AOWL Week 10: Mike Wrecka (5-4) VS. Nigma (4-3) [NIGMA WINS, 8-2.]

[Split]

16 lines minimum, 48 lines maximum. (if agreed upon by both participants, you may go beyond the limit at your own risk.)

Verses are due SATURDAY 4/23 at 11:59 PST.
Extensions are due SUNDAY 4/24 at 11:59 PST.
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Voting ends TUESDAY 4/26 at 11:59 PST. (Unless otherwise it may be extended another day at the most.)

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TOPIC:

“In preparing... I have always found that plans are useless, but planning is indispensable.”
Dwight D. Eisenhower

Good luck to both participants.

[Mike Wrecka]

check in. gonna need an extension.

[Nigma]

You should just no show, that's the only way I know how to win. Extension granted, I'm just reading the topic now. Dunno wtf I'm gonna write about

[Nigma]

Those Shaky Spirit Days
“In preparing... I have always found that plans are useless, but planning is indispensable.”

Yes, I intended that you'd read this.. Wait

These demon creatures team as mates
Creators scheme to break us
Plan to place us beasts in cages
Then our dreamscape changes
Can't e-scape each others gazes hey?
At first it feels so great
But then it causes grief and takes off
Hung unseen beneath the shade
If we went to reach this day,
I know we won't, which seems okay
But to go and see, to know completely
Don't it seem so great? Would this stoic ego break?
Will the seeds of change grow or freeze in place?
Too cold for me to say, suppose the moment leaped away...
Mold off green, decay and fade into diseased mistakes
But will the gold retreat to grey?
Will the cold impeach the rays?
I hold the key to free the slave
But do I leave this cage or re-chain Django and plead my case?
Do I believe in fate? Maybe she's my lady
Baby, I need you.. What, no, we agreed to break up
Said our feelings changed, that's strange though
I remained faithful in case we were to be complete again
Since lately I'm thinking it would feel so great to see your face
Embrace you, quiet your fears and wipe your tears away
But face it, we're weird again and each have careers to chase
So here's to dreary days awake and trapped in the passed re-enacted
Can't just grab the nearest plane or path to craft my advancement
Can't just take a gal and fly away the way Aladdin did Jasmine
We agreed to scrap it, won't tamper the plans
Since interacting in the past wouldn't actually happen
If planning to plan wasn't planned in advance hmm?
That's that, happy packing, with good there is bad
You can't, in person, gather your words when you have to
Then in text you go berserk, end up burstin and spazzin
Talkin personal matters you don't dare blurt when we're gathered
And if I don't reply the words you imagine, the worst of infractions
Immersed in more drama than rehearsals for acting
Thoughts to flourish, abandoned, nah survive by a thread
Alive but the purpose is shattered, a worthless cadaver
No time to waste in days you aren't sure are your last
Maybe work our way past with encouraging laughter
We strayed away from mundane, all I'm sure of is that...
I stepped inside the cage one way and emerged a new man
What I learned in the shackles was worth the entrapment
It's that plans don't have to be perfect to have them

[Mike Wrecka]

a flash of white light ignites a horrible sound,
as a meteorite crashes, hard into the ground/
I fall down, from all the tremors im trembling,
look around, as black clouds are directly assembling/
this crowd wasn't expecting, such a turn of events,
we weren't prepared, this just doesn't make any sense/
as the many fragments, disperse into the air,
every living creature on this planet, is visibly scared/
instantly aware, that things are about to get drastic,
im angry because I literally put all my eggs in one basket/
no one stands a chance, under this circumstance,
some stare in a trance, while others try to advance/
but I physically cant, so im seeking support,
try to reach out for help, but it seems that my arms are too short/
my vision distorts, I contort feeling weak and defenseless,
getting trampled by those, I would normally eat for breakfast/
a wall of fire is approaching and the heats tremendous,
Ive always been a loner, but now I seek acceptance/
some funnel into tunnels that are completely endless,
while others take to the air , extremely reckless/
but im alone in the chaos, my resolve withers,
no plan for this, our species should have evolved quicker/
I figure that the galaxy lacks respect,
or why would they want to destroy me, a tyrannosaurus rex/
but hey if you gotta go, we all goin out with style,
except as im consumed by the flames, I see a mammal smile /

[Red glare]

Nigma. I was picturing Kayne west spitting this

o here's to dreary days awake and trapped in the passed re-enacted
Can't just grab the nearest plane or path to craft my advancement
Can't just take a gal and fly away the way Aladdin did Jasmine
We agreed to scrap it, won't tamper the plans
Since interacting in the past wouldn't actually happen
If planning to plan wasn't planned in advance hmm?

This verse had a unique flow - it was a fun read and I could relate to the writers voice behind it. 'What I learned in the shackles was worth the entrapment' was a powerful punch line in an otherwise superficial sea of wordplay. You nailed the agenda and summed it up in a serious; observant kind of way. Enjoyable read. Also nice touch catering to the 'love of your life' audience. Mike is the LL cool J of that shit

Mike Wrecka. You see a Mammal smile? Lol You gotta little reading rainbow there but the verse was methodical and picturesque so well done. I get the little arms reference now but I think you could've done more, like a a chase scene or something. I like how the build up lead to a simple; land before time moment lol. This is dope from a childrens book perspective.

Overall. MVGT Nigma; with the denser and edgier verse. But Mike had a ephiphahny towards the end; It was corny but it made me feel like like I was a kid again so good shit

[IamBenT]

tough..

Nigma - Wow such an unorthodox and refreshing flow to this, i was really impressed with the first 10 or so lines before it got a bit muddy. The rhyming is great and it brings us into this personal space that you seem very strong in. I liked several of the metaphors you mix in and references as well, great poetical tip.

Can't just grab the nearest plane or path to craft my advancement
Can't just take a gal and fly away the way Aladdin did Jasmine

felt that could have been worded better

I stepped inside the cage one way and emerged a new man
What I learned in the shackles was worth the entrapment
It's that plans don't have to be perfect to have them

great icing on the cake

Mike - ha, wow what a twist ending, I did not see that coming and Im a huge fan of the twist, the concept is very dope, i felt the execution lacked a little because I have read more descriptive and engaging verses from you. Felt this was a solid showing though.

or why would they want to destroy me, a tyrannosaurus rex/
but hey if you gotta go, we all goin out with style,
except as im consumed by the flames, I see a mammal smile

LOL holy crap that was cool

Vote -Nigma

I think this was a very solid battle in using such a scant topic, I really liked the layers of Nigma's verse over Mike's crazy twist-story. great work

[Zen]

I've tried posting this three times....Here goes the fourth try...

Nigma: Very interesting read here. I read the other voters and I agree that flow was unique and it seemed effortless forreal. I admit it did start to slow down by the middle of it but regardless the piece left an impact on me after reading it. Maybe the best I've ever read from you forreal. The line of locking Django back up sticks in my mind. Very good piece here Nigma.
Mike Wrecka: Short simple verse here, but the ending? Damn didn't see it coming honestly lol. I never pictured anyone here would be writing a dinosaur piece lol. But anyway you're writing here was precise and on point with no wasted words in between although I felt some things could have been worded better, but no worries on that. All in all a solid piece from our hero.

Both pieces were good no doubt, but I've got Nigma on this one.

[Just Write]

Yes, I intended that you'd read this.. Wait

These demon creatures team as mates
Creators scheme to break us
Plan to place us beasts in cages
Then our dreamscape changes
Can't e-scape each others gazes hey?
At first it feels so great
But then it causes grief and takes off
Hung unseen beneath the shade
If we went to reach this day,
I know we won't, which seems okay
But to go and see, to know completely
Don't it seem so great? Would this stoic ego break?

this whole beggining was hmm... interesting and i read that first little mind fuck line twice like wait, what? lol

Will the seeds of change grow or freeze in place?
Too cold for me to say, suppose the moment leaped away...
Mold off green, decay and fade into diseased mistakes
But will the gold retreat to grey?
Will the cold impeach the rays?
I hold the key to free the slave
But do I leave this cage or re-chain Django and plead my case?

ok now were getting to the meat, laughed at you mentioning django tho

Do I believe in fate? Maybe she's my lady
Baby, I need you.. What, no, we agreed to break up
Said our feelings changed, that's strange though
I remained faithful in case we were to be complete again

yea, been there

Since lately I'm thinking it would feel so great to see your face
Embrace you, quiet your fears and wipe your tears away
But face it, we're weird again and each have careers to chase
So here's to dreary days awake and trapped in the passed re-enacted
Can't just grab the nearest plane or path to craft my advancement

yea this last part was solid

Can't just take a gal and fly away the way Aladdin did Jasmine
We agreed to scrap it, won't tamper the plans
Since interacting in the past wouldn't actually happen
If planning to plan wasn't planned in advance hmm?
That's that, happy packing, with good there is bad
You can't, in person, gather your words when you have to
Then in text you go berserk, end up burstin and spazzin
Talkin personal matters you don't dare blurt when we're gathered
And if I don't reply the words you imagine, the worst of infractions

lol totally agree, sometimes i cant believe the stuff ill share with complete strangers on here but couldnt tell some of my closest friends in person

Immersed in more drama than rehearsals for acting
Thoughts to flourish, abandoned, nah survive by a thread
Alive but the purpose is shattered, a worthless cadaver
No time to waste in days you aren't sure are your last
Maybe work our way past with encouraging laughter
We strayed away from mundane, all I'm sure of is that...
I stepped inside the cage one way and emerged a new man
What I learned in the shackles was worth the entrapment
It's that plans don't have to be perfect to have them

this was a very chill laid back verse and i enjoyed it very much, thanks








a flash of white light ignites a horrible sound,
as a meteorite crashes, hard into the ground/
I fall down, from all the tremors im trembling,
look around, as black clouds are directly assembling/
this crowd wasn't expecting, such a turn of events,
we weren't prepared, this just doesn't make any sense/
as the many fragments, disperse into the air,
every living creature on this planet, is visibly scared/
instantly aware, that things are about to get drastic,
im angry because I literally put all my eggs in one basket/

everything ive read from you just seems effortless and i comend that, its hard for me sometimes to get what i want to say across without it being hard to follow

no one stands a chance, under this circumstance,
some stare in a trance, while others try to advance/
but I physically cant, so im seeking support,
try to reach out for help, but it seems that my arms are too short/

i was gunna ask if you were a mdget or something before i read this whole thing haha

my vision distorts, I contort feeling weak and defenseless,
getting trampled by those, I would normally eat for breakfast/
a wall of fire is approaching and the heats tremendous,
Ive always been a loner, but now I seek acceptance/

i really liked these last two lines right here.. the loner seeking acceptence was nice

some funnel into tunnels that are completely endless,
while others take to the air , extremely reckless/
but im alone in the chaos, my resolve withers,
no plan for this, our species should have evolved quicker/
I figure that the galaxy lacks respect,
or why would they want to destroy me, a tyrannosaurus rex/
but hey if you gotta go, we all goin out with style,
except as im consumed by the flames, I see a mammal smile /

yea i definitely liked the surprise ending, i didn't see it coming.


overall i really enjoyed this battle and this is a tough decision for me, maybe the toughest this week. i like both pieces for different reasons, I think nigma came with a more thought provoking verse while MW's story telling skills were just superb but in the end there can only be one and the verse I enjoyed more (not by much though) was nigma so he gets my vote. great job guys

[zygote]

Enigma, interesting treatise on the value of plan making and goal setting. The final line concluded everything nicely. Had a logical flow of ideas throughout, although it was largely example-giving or symbolic writing. Don't know how I feel about the popular culture references, perhaps they work as examples but also did not seem fitting with the beginning.

Mike Wrecka, very enjoyable to read. It was great how you wrote from perspective of the dinosaur. Some lines were also humorous (E.g., my arms were too short) which is an undervalued skill, because humor can be difficult to communicated let alone with only writing. Overall, Enigma had gave a grander scheme in relation to the topic, but Mike Wrecka had a better self-contained message and more interesting take on the topic.
Voted for mike Wrecka.

[Nigma]

Thank you Zygote. I usually have one line that doesn't fit in with my verses, sometimes they stick out more then others. My worst aspect of a writer is beginning to write. I usually wait until I think a concept I feel is interesting, and branch of that. This week, I based my verse off of 'rechain Django'. I do agree with you though. It is most definitely out of place. I've done worse though

[Mike Wrecka]

so @zygote is that a vote for me or nigma?

[patrown]

editing in real vote here.

[Cereal_Killa]

eNigma’ma:

Surely you are an audio head.. the way you write with the tight, back to back internals is the sign of someone who seriously records.. I love it.. so straight your styles cool, still poetic with a nice vocab.. and your end bar was a real sweet closer.. im glad I finaly got to see you battle someone :)


Miky mike:

Dude this was ace.. like I mean you set the scene and tbh you could have gone so fucken hectic with this even though you did do plenty.. solid writing, I was kinda like oh man he did make the story about a damn dinosaur not a modern day apocalypse.. but that final line with the mamal smiling was priceless.. perfect way to finish it.. throw the reader into utter doubt then smash em in the face.. loven it..

Vote = mike wrecka

Wow was that unbelievably tough.. it came down to closer and that ish was tight on both parts.. I went with mike cause his cheeky final words where not just comical but held a lot of ground.. that last bar opens up a whole new can of worms.. which cld eventually lead in the same cycle – he leaves it up to the reader, like here you go this is just the begging and I fucken dug the ish outta that.. if this was on wax, nigma wld have taken this by a massive landslide.. but as it stands I got mike and this was a damn ill battle.. cheers guys..

[Nigma]

Originally Posted by patrown

editing in real vote here.

@patrown

[King Ra.]

4-2. Re-opened for more votes!!!

[Aesthetic]

Nigma:

Always impress me;

only problem is it felt like the scheme moved a little bit here and there your work is pretty difficult to get man.

Mike Wrecka:

That shit was pretty sly and like clever lol I like how ya ended it.


V/Nigma is out of wrecka's league, or he dropped less time. idk all around nigma takes it

[Split]

nigma

go listen to Opposites Attract by Kendrick Lamar, immediately. specifically the spoken word/ def jam poet w/e at the end.

If we went to reach this day,
I know we won't, which seems okay
But to go and see, to know completely
Don't it seem so great? Would this stoic ego break?
Will the seeds of change grow or freeze in place?

nice.

But face it, we're weird again and each have careers to chase
So here's to dreary days awake and trapped in the passed re-enacted
Can't just grab the nearest plane or path to craft my advancement
Can't just take a gal and fly away the way Aladdin did Jasmine

wow. that shit speaks.

Thoughts to flourish, abandoned, nah survive by a thread
Alive but the purpose is shattered, a worthless cadaver
No time to waste in days you aren't sure are your last
Maybe work our way past with encouraging laughter
We strayed away from mundane, all I'm sure of is that...
I stepped inside the cage one way and emerged a new man

flawless, seamless scheme switch.

incredible verse. everything was in place and executed perfectly.

mw.

aha from the "eggs in one basket" line i realized this was about the extinction event. really enlightening glimpse about how 'what is meant to be' is really just a reflection of everything that has happened in the past, and we are at the mercy of faith, by nature

lyrically another impressive verse.

but im alone in the chaos, my resolve withers,
no plan for this, our species should have evolved quicker/

that sticks out to me. powerful wording throughout


I thought both were creative takes on the topic, MW's in the sense of being unconventional and Nigma's in the sense of showing how a relationship revolves around both the course it is taken and the expectations for how it is heading at any given moment/ the moment it was conceived. and especially how these are not explicitly tied together as you would expect.

V/ Nigma. really enjoyed the insight he provided/ how he expounded on the topic this week.

[Objective]

My vote gets edited in here in about 10-20 minutes. don't close it yet.

Edit:

Nigma: Great showing. The flow and rhyme-structure throughout was on point and well crafted imo. Some interesting lines in there but would like it to go more in depth on the subject matter rather than just scratching the surface of why it went wrong, but that's nitpicking. You followed the topic well with a theme I didn't see coming, cool. The closure couldn't have been better, loved everything about the last 3-4 lines. You caught my attention with the opener and the closure left me with a good impression of your piece, well done.

Mike Wrecka: Haha, I didn't see that coming. A muh'fuckin' T-Rex, huh? Creative twist to the story. It was kinda short, but that's cool, I can enjoy short pieces. You did the topic justice and the rhymescheme was decent. I liked the approach you were taking and enjoyed the read.

My vote goes to Nigma. While Mike Wrecka wins on the creativity department and went all-out with it I felt that Nigma gets it on consistency, rhyme structure, interesting lines and story. Mike Wrecka had a good showing for sure but looking at the stories at hand and picking a winner I think Nigma edges it in this one with a more serious tone to his verse and stuff that made me think. I just can't get how an animal whose closest relative on earth today is the chicken can plan and/or evaluate the situation like a human being, but then again, the verse was all fiction so everything goes I guess. Either way I think Nigma got it. MW's verse was enjoyable for sure, but he didn't show me enough to snatch my vote.

[Vulgar]

Nigma - This was an upbeat, socially lucrative synopsis of how relationships can be in the present society, from misunderstandings to ranting through texts, and from my interpretation, you lay it on us that this man-to-woman dilemma boxes us in but having a plan is better than planning for the worst turnout. I thought it was nicely done; the highlight was the flow especially. Dynamic.

Mike Wrecka - As soon as you mentioned 'short arms' it shot an image of a T-Rex into my brain, but that isn't to say it took away from the twist you chose. Fresh take. The writing was self explanatory, meaning it was a good tale as a whole. I did walk away a little hungry afterwards though. I feel like more personal touch could've been added to the piece. Some zest, some signature Mike Wrecka T-Rex remains. Just my opinion.

My vote goes to Nigma.