WEEK 3 BOTW SPOTLIGHT: Orc 1-0 VS Ajax 1-0 ORC WINS

[UPN Zuch]

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[Ajax]

Checking in.

16.

[Orc]

Baby welcome to the party

[Orc]

Sent my verse to Z

[Ajax]

They say you’re one of Netcees' best…

but, to me…

You’re a weak artist. You’ll never BE hardly more than that…
The Delta between us ‘has more Mississippis’ than pick-up games with retards at quarterback.
This is a showdown between your BB gun and my wicked .44…
I rock arenas; This goblin couldn’t ‘bring the house down’ selling pillows door-to-door.
So, when I get done KO’ing this wack clone,
The crowd’ll be ‘unable to keep a straight face’ like a sumo free-soloing Half Dome.
For me, a stalemate’s picking which lethal weapon is best for the kill;
For you, a ‘stale mate’ is how your exes rate your sexual skill.
You talk tough. But, that corny brogue’s not adept at the lexicon…
I thought this was a clash of the titans; instead, I get Netcee’s resident leprechaun.
You’re straight up pussy. I’ll murder ya line for line….
You’re a bigger Snowflake than the one Ace Ventura was hired to find.
I’m a lord of the ring. You’re a pitiful, hopeless disgrace…
SO many epic losses; the Tolkien be seen written all over your face.
It didn’t take much to son this bitch speaker…
This verse put him on life support… and I just ‘pulled the plug’ like wig weavers.

Good luck.

[UPN Zuch]

ORC VERSE

Originally Posted by Ajax vs Aero

Best believe this African hack is in the red…
The last time he ‘took home anything from the markets’ he carried it back balanced in a basket on his head.

???

Oh boyyy. Cashius Finch you dirty animal
Ur last Cross Examination ended with “Great, & are we SURE it’s flammable?”
I’m sure u’ll finish a punch one day bro
Verses ain’t just Long-Winded. They’re enough to complete the Vendée Globe
Middle-aged UPN battlers ain’t got shit for me
Yikes. Dreamt of being Attorney General & finally won one in ur mid 40s
I get voters miss some bars but you should write less
Stop giving us the Third Degree. U were getting THAT when ur wife left
A 45yr old rapper-lawyer.. say that out loud
It was Instrumental in her leaving, so was uploading those on Soundcloud
Ajax could NEVER be boss. This fucker’s a dweeb
His Energy’s off — got issues with gay Chi that’d worry Khabib
The gangster rap obsession has really gotta stop friend
Boss asking about the Burden of Proof, you replying “Benny’s in my top 10”
I’ll b 5 up in votes. That’s how easy this shit is
I saw you were wack right away. No way you’re Leading the Witness

[Universe]

Ajax:

"You’re a weak artist. You’ll never BE hardly more than that…
The Delta between us ‘has more Mississippis’ than pick-up games with retards at quarterback."

- loved the multi's here.

"I’m a lord of the ring. You’re a pitiful, hopeless disgrace…
SO many epic losses; the Tolkien be seen written all over your face."

- Cool wordplay.

"It didn’t take much to son this bitch speaker…
This verse put him on life support… and I just ‘pulled the plug’ like wig weavers"


Ajax, your rhymes are technically impeccable. Really a pleasure to read. Flow is butter. But some of your concepts are a little... stretched out for my taste. Far fetched and slightly convoluted at times. But you def have a polished tongue-in-cheek style that I enjoy. Your verse last week was amazing to read as well. Consider me a new fan.


Orc:

"Oh boyyy. Cashius Finch you dirty animal
Ur last Cross Examination ended with “Great, & are we SURE it’s flammable?”"

"get voters miss some bars but you should write less
Stop giving us the Third Degree. U were getting THAT when ur wife left"

- Yikes.

"Ajax could NEVER be boss. This fucker’s a dweeb
His Energy’s off — got issues with gay Chi that’d worry Khabib"

- ^^this is one of those rare bars where I'm like, "Fuck, I wish I thought of that..." I'm a huge Gaethje fan but now I'll never be able to hear Bruce Buffer announce his name without thinking of Gay Chi lol.

Great battle, fellas. Ajax is something unique and I enjoy reading his stuff but Orc, for me, is the more focused battler and always delivers personals that really sting. The guy is a champ for a reason...

Vote - Orc

[TOP iLL DRAGSTER TWO]

Very nice battle

Quarterback lmao
Snowflake
Tolkien

Vs

Cross exam
Soundcloud
Khabib
Benny barely

Very close battle. Great styles on display. I got orc with barely one more quotable. This could go either way.


Vote Orc

[Wanderer]

Ajax

Quarterback lol cool
House down cool again
Snowflake decent

Those were stand outs but the whole verse was well worded and solid enough

Orc

Cross examination fire
Sound cloud dope
Khabib lol ok

Another well written, all around solid verse

I’ve got Orc on preference and the ones I didn’t quote being enjoyed better

Vote orc

[iSpaz]

Oh boyyy. Cashius Finch you dirty animal
Ur last Cross Examination ended with “Great, & are we SURE it’s flammable?”
I’m sure u’ll finish a punch one day bro
Verses ain’t just Long-Winded. They’re enough to complete the Vendée Globe
Ajax could NEVER be boss. This fucker’s a dweeb
His Energy’s off — got issues with gay Chi that’d worry Khabib


vs

You’re a weak artist. You’ll never BE hardly more than that…
The Delta between us ‘has more Mississippis’ than pick-up games with retards at quarterback.
For me, a stalemate’s picking which lethal weapon is best for the kill;
For you, a ‘stale mate’ is how your exes rate your sexual skill.
You talk tough. But, that corny brogue’s not adept at the lexicon…
I thought this was a clash of the titans; instead, I get Netcee’s resident leprechaun.
You’re straight up pussy. I’ll murder ya line for line….
You’re a bigger Snowflake than the one Ace Ventura was hired to find.

cool battle here, i got more quotables w ajax, orc has one less but they were heavy. v/orc barely

[Mac]

You’re a weak artist. You’ll never BE hardly more than that…
The Delta between us ‘has more Mississippis’ than pick-up games with retards at quarterback.
cool i see what this is about but it was too wordy imo.. but hit

This is a showdown between your BB gun and my wicked .44…
I rock arenas; This goblin couldn’t ‘bring the house down’ selling pillows door-to-door.
okk

So, when I get done KO’ing this wack clone,
The crowd’ll be ‘unable to keep a straight face’ like a sumo free-soloing Half Dome.
lol

For me, a stalemate’s picking which lethal weapon is best for the kill;
For you, a ‘stale mate’ is how your exes rate your sexual skill.
decent.. seen this kind of style before.. also seen people that say they were inspired by you.. which is cool

You talk tough. But, that corny brogue’s not adept at the lexicon…
I thought this was a clash of the titans; instead, I get Netcee’s resident leprechaun.
okk

You’re straight up pussy. I’ll murder ya line for line….
You’re a bigger Snowflake than the one Ace Ventura was hired to find.
kinda played but ok

I’m a lord of the ring. You’re a pitiful, hopeless disgrace…
SO many epic losses; the Tolkien be seen written all over your face.
ok mild

It didn’t take much to son this bitch speaker…
This verse put him on life support… and I just ‘pulled the plug’ like wig weavers.
not feelign this

vs.

Oh boyyy. Cashius Finch you dirty animal
Ur last Cross Examination ended with “Great, & are we SURE it’s flammable?”
cool

I’m sure u’ll finish a punch one day bro
Verses ain’t just Long-Winded. They’re enough to complete the Vendée Globe
lmao

Middle-aged UPN battlers ain’t got shit for me
Yikes. Dreamt of being Attorney General & finally won one in ur mid 40s
not getting this personal

I get voters miss some bars but you should write less
Stop giving us the Third Degree. U were getting THAT when ur wife left
decent

A 45yr old rapper-lawyer.. say that out loud
It was Instrumental in her leaving, so was uploading those on Soundcloud
lol mild

Ajax could NEVER be boss. This fucker’s a dweeb
His Energy’s off — got issues with gay Chi that’d worry Khabib
wow

The gangster rap obsession has really gotta stop friend
Boss asking about the Burden of Proof, you replying “Benny’s in my top 10”
ok

I’ll b 5 up in votes. That’s how easy this shit is
I saw you were wack right away. No way you’re Leading the Witness
sorry dont get this one..but wording is smooth

dope battle here... not as tight as I expected as Orc came more consistent with some haymakers.. orc i really dig ur style, ajax also came great but maybe rust was a factor here. I got orc

props to both

[Victor.]

Originally Posted by Ajax

They say you’re one of Netcees' best…

but, to me…

You’re a weak artist. You’ll never BE hardly more than that…
The Delta between us ‘has more Mississippis’ than pick-up games with retards at quarterback.
....this falls flat for me. yeah its clever but its really not impactful and the execution is long winded
This is a showdown between your BB gun and my wicked .44…
I rock arenas; This goblin couldn’t ‘bring the house down’ selling pillows door-to-door.
....I truly dont get this.. I like how you "bring the house down" in quotes to help us understand whats going on here. but yeah. so hes selling pillows that I get. do u mean like a down banket? yeah this is either going over my head or its ass. I imagine its ass
So, when I get done KO’ing this wack clone,
The crowd’ll be ‘unable to keep a straight face’ like a sumo free-soloing Half Dome.
lmao bro wtf are u talking about
For me, a stalemate’s picking which lethal weapon is best for the kill;
For you, a ‘stale mate’ is how your exes rate your sexual skill.
...ok this is my fav one so far. sometimes less is more
You talk tough. But, that corny brogue’s not adept at the lexicon…
I thought this was a clash of the titans; instead, I get Netcee’s resident leprechaun.
...cool multi bro . more punch next time
You’re straight up pussy. I’ll murder ya line for line….
You’re a bigger Snowflake than the one Ace Ventura was hired to find.
...hmm. was there a third ace ventura? i remember the finkle einhorn case and then the african thing with marrying the chick..iunno bro i didnt see the one wit the snow flake
I’m a lord of the ring. You’re a pitiful, hopeless disgrace…
SO many epic losses; the Tolkien be seen written all over your face.
this is pretty cool I like the setup. wp I like to. its good man could have been crazy but again, dig this for the most part
It didn’t take much to son this bitch speaker…
This verse put him on life support… and I just ‘pulled the plug’ like wig weavers.
the term wig weaver is just weird bro. I doubt those two words have ever been typed back to back prior to this verse. the idea is crazy creative and I like it. but its one of those things are just are borderline cringe cuz its awk as hell

Good luck.

Originally Posted by Zuch

ORC VERSE



???

Oh boyyy. Cashius Finch you dirty animal
Ur last Cross Examination ended with “Great, & are we SURE it’s flammable?”
lol cool.
I’m sure u’ll finish a punch one day bro
Verses ain’t just Long-Winded. They’re enough to complete the Vendée Globe
not gonna pretend im familiar with this, also not going to google it. lets count this as a miss
Middle-aged UPN battlers ain’t got shit for me
Yikes. Dreamt of being Attorney General & finally won one in ur mid 40s
this is heavy. lotb
I get voters miss some bars but you should write less
Stop giving us the Third Degree. U were getting THAT when ur wife left
dope idea, but unless his wife really left him the payoff on this is anticlimactic at best
A 45yr old rapper-lawyer.. say that out loud
It was Instrumental in her leaving, so was uploading those on Soundcloud
ok so im starting to think this angle is true iunno.. stilll this is eh at best for me
Ajax could NEVER be boss. This fucker’s a dweeb
His Energy’s off — got issues with gay Chi that’d worry Khabib
I kinda get half of this sorta almost. cuz I know who Khab is an I assume Chi is another fighter. shrug
The gangster rap obsession has really gotta stop friend
Boss asking about the Burden of Proof, you replying “Benny’s in my top 10”
thats cool
I’ll b 5 up in votes. That’s how easy this shit is
I saw you were wack right away. No way you’re Leading the Witness
I wish u let up on the law angle at some point cuz im bored of it by this ppoint

Ajax has some really creative shit but a dry delivery hurt him here. Orc landed 2 heavy haymakers which made this an easy call for me.


vote Orc.

[Destroyer]

Goddammit I did a bar for bar breakdown and then deleted Orc’s whole verse
Orc got this. It’s not a blowout but Orc came with more impact and went harder on Ajax than Ajax did. Both had a couple of googlers which cancelled out. Half dome and Vendee Globe.
But Ajax had an ace Ventura pet detective punch in 2020?
Also, wig weavers? Just simpler connects that hurt. Down/pillows. Too easy.
Orc was more direct at his opponent and took this fairly easily.

V/Orc

[Blue Bayou]

You’re a weak artist. You’ll never BE hardly more than that…
The Delta between us ‘has more Mississippis’ than pick-up games with retards at quarterback.
lol this concept is fire to me.. cool fresh idea, a tad longwinded with the punchline sure but the wording is great imo and great as is

This is a showdown between your BB gun and my wicked .44…
I rock arenas; This goblin couldn’t ‘bring the house down’ selling pillows door-to-door.
i've seen Down concepts before but the bring the house flip was alright.. decent overall

So, when I get done KO’ing this wack clone,
The crowd’ll be ‘unable to keep a straight face’ like a sumo free-soloing Half Dome.
pretty cool and interesting concept here imo, the punch as delivered is pretty light imo.. i'm assuming you're illustrating the crows "wincing" or something along those lines , cool enough but not super impactful

For me, a stalemate’s picking which lethal weapon is best for the kill;
For you, a ‘stale mate’ is how your exes rate your sexual skill.
i did a stalemate brit play a while back so it's not wowing from a freshness perspective, but lol i lvoe the way you delivered this.. cool bar

You talk tough. But, that corny brogue’s not adept at the lexicon…
I thought this was a clash of the titans; instead, I get Netcee’s resident leprechaun.
very nice multi but the irish/leprechaun as delivered is a little to obvious and straightforward on this one

You’re straight up pussy. I’ll murder ya line for line….
You’re a bigger Snowflake than the one Ace Ventura was hired to find.
lol funny movie reference.. line for line is 3 syllables and hired to find is 4 the multi threw me a bit.. but i haven;t seen a Snowflake concept before so i enjoyed this

I’m a lord of the ring. You’re a pitiful, hopeless disgrace…
SO many epic losses; the Tolkien be seen written all over your face.
dope.. like how you did this and it's fresh.. nice bar

It didn’t take much to son this bitch speaker…
This verse put him on life support… and I just ‘pulled the plug’ like wig weavers.
ehhh.. not a big fan of this flip

vs.

Oh boyyy. Cashius Finch you dirty animal
Ur last Cross Examination ended with “Great, & are we SURE it’s flammable?”
lol the quote set this up well... cool double personal in a sense and concept...nice open

I’m sure u’ll finish a punch one day bro
Verses ain’t just Long-Winded. They’re enough to complete the Vendée Globe
lol love the setup, cool enough long winded concept...like this

Middle-aged UPN battlers ain’t got shit for me
Yikes. Dreamt of being Attorney General & finally won one in ur mid 40s
attorney wp is pretty ancient but i think the flip here is dope with a double personal touch as well

I get voters miss some bars but you should write less
Stop giving us the Third Degree. U were getting THAT when ur wife left
haha pretty nice lawyer concept...hits

A 45yr old rapper-lawyer.. say that out loud
It was Instrumental in her leaving, so was uploading those on Soundcloud
cool personal again, worded well...dig it

Ajax could NEVER be boss. This fucker’s a dweeb
His Energy’s off — got issues with gay Chi that’d worry Khabib
haha this made me chuckle.. cool original wp

The gangster rap obsession has really gotta stop friend
Boss asking about the Burden of Proof, you replying “Benny’s in my top 10”
haha this is fire to me.. timing aligned on this one...another good lawyer bar

I’ll b 5 up in votes. That’s how easy this shit is
I saw you were wack right away. No way you’re Leading the Witness
'leading the witness' i really like the concept...good wit on a bar bragging about being wittier lol... nice closer


Great read guys strong verses from both sides...Ajax that opener was bonkers to me, Tolkien a concept i really enjoyed as well
But i've got orc here with the consistency... really didn;t miss much and had a good blend of comedy and creative personal hits
Props to both this was fun

Vote Orc

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Ajax -

You’re a weak artist. You’ll never BE hardly more than that…
The Delta between us ‘has more Mississippis’ than pick-up games with retards at quarterback.
You talk tough. But, that corny brogue’s not adept at the lexicon…
I thought this was a clash of the titans; instead, I get Netcee’s resident leprechaun.
I’m a lord of the ring. You’re a pitiful, hopeless disgrace…
SO many epic losses; the Tolkien be seen written all over your face.

Not the best I've seen you come honestly, bud. I maybe hyped this match up a bit too much in my head. Especially for 2020, I guess. Delta was awesome, Tolkein was dope, Leprechaun was a nice direct jab. The rest I either took issue with the wording or the concept itself, like Snowflake.

Orc -

I’m sure u’ll finish a punch one day bro
Verses ain’t just Long-Winded. They’re enough to complete the Vendée Globe
A 45yr old rapper-lawyer.. say that out loud
It was Instrumental in her leaving, so was uploading those on Soundcloud
Ajax could NEVER be boss. This fucker’s a dweeb
His Energy’s off — got issues with gay Chi that’d worry Khabib
The gangster rap obsession has really gotta stop friend
Boss asking about the Burden of Proof, you replying “Benny’s in my top 10”


Some of the lawyer bars were misses for me. I've seen Ajax get dissed with lawyer lines since like '05 or something, so they're kinda like fat lines against me at this point - they really have to be original and creative to hit their mark. That's just me. I loved the Vendee Globe bar after a quick google, possibly my favorite of the battle. All in all, I think Orc came slightly better, even with the minuses I gave him for the lackluster lawyer lines, Ajax just didn't come up to his usual par here and the lack of consistency hurt him.

V - Orc