bleak vs. Boredom {Boredom wins}

[Sn00p]

Round 1 Rules

Due Dates:
Verses are due Wednesday,
February 20th 2013 11:59 PM PST.
Voting ends Saturday 11:59 PM PST.
(Battles that lack votes may close later.)
(One sided battles may get closed early.)
(Extensions can be no longer than 36 hours
and have to be granted by your opponent.)

Line Limit:
Min. = 10 lines
Max. = 16 lines
(The max. can be higher if different is agreed upon by both.)

Voting:
Must vote on 5 battles and post your links.
Post the links in the thread titled "Round 1 Voting Links".
You will be punished if you don't post all 5 voting links.
You will not like the punishment, so just vote so you
don't have to cry later.

General Rules:
1st person can't edit after the 2nd person posts.
2nd person can't edit after a vote has been made.
Feeding = DQ.
Recycling = DQ.
Biting = DQ.
No freeposting, swaying or bitching.
Competitors should agree on a line limit in their check in.
If no line limit is agreed on, then the 2nd person to post
MUST match the 1st person's line amount.

@bleak vs. @Boredom

[Boredom]

How many?

[bleak]

doesnt matter

check

[Boredom]

Ill be dropping ten tonight

[Boredom]

sent 10 to snoop

[bleak]

ext?

[Boredom]

dawg we had like almost 2 weeks to write and theres still an hour at least before dead line..

quit fighting with seyance n write 10 lines

[Boredom]

You posting today or what @bleak

[bleak]

Yes I'm for sure posting today brah.

[bleak]

Boredom aka Alphabet aka Shank Sinatra

Your lines are dull. tic for tac, n repetition blocked your saving graces.
The only people intrigued by the Alphabet r watching Barney on a daily basis.
Part of the infantry, in back cause you're gay and shoot like a bafoon
How you champ a noob tourney, n still not the best noob in your platoon?
Stop fronting, you're not showtime. keep it up, n I think Frank'll pop ya.
And that g shit should cease quick. in prison you'd get the Shank, Sinatra.
You're a one man army huh? Simply cause you aint seein no friends.
Couldn't imagine Alpha team up unless they're riding Mr. T to the win.
That e thug role is beyond stupid. Me? I send fags into the hearse
In breakdowns, we'll see more 9's to bleak than you're braggin in that verse

[Boredom]

u love that smooth jazz when jerkin dudes n for a fag thats great
but ur so quick to blow da horn theres men in philharmonics u make look straight
i'm champin this tourney leavin lames snapped on a gurney, i'm a true giant
so if it's predicted in the mag nothin other than here comes the king sn00p lyin
i'm from times when hens boasted n verses posted had hype dude
now the future of text battling looks bleak..it’s because of faggots like you
u are officially gows bitch, he could have u cleaning pots in his house
so when u get on ur knees for god ur not praying ur taking shots in the mouth
these are raw facts dude, anyone on this site'll leave u stomped fast noob
n if u keep beefing w/ seyance ur family will need to have one to contact u

[Flow]

Your lines are dull. tic for tac, n repetition blocked your saving graces.
The only people intrigued by the Alphabet r watching Barney on a daily basis.
ok
Part of the infantry, in back cause you're gay and shoot like a bafoon
How you champ a noob tourney, n still not the best noob in your platoon?
ok
Stop fronting, you're not showtime. keep it up, n I think Frank'll pop ya.
And that g shit should cease quick. in prison you'd get the Shank, Sinatra.
ok
You're a one man army huh? Simply cause you aint seein no friends.
Couldn't imagine Alpha team up unless they're riding Mr. T to the win.
too many name flips now so this one is a miss for me
That e thug role is beyond stupid. Me? I send fags into the hearse
In breakdowns, we'll see more 9's to bleak than you're braggin in that verse
so so

Over all I felt this drop was a very average and played safe fam. I felt it was consistent but felt that those punches were more like slaps then jaw snapping hooks. You may win on points for landing the jabs but I could feel an exposed chin, you have given him the chance for a smash and grab.

VS

u love that smooth jazz when jerkin dudes n for a fag thats great
but ur so quick to blow da horn theres men in philharmonics u make look straight
lol
i'm champin this tourney leavin lames snapped on a gurney, i'm a true giant
so if it's predicted in the mag nothin other than here comes the king sn00p lyin
Wondered when I would first see one of these - ok nice concept but punch aint hurtin him too much
i'm from times when hens boasted n verses posted had hype dude
now the future of text battling looks bleak..it’s because of faggots like you
certainly on topic with the discussion....but no better then the jabs you just recieved
u are officially gows bitch, he could have u cleaning pots in his house
so when u get on ur knees for god ur not praying ur taking shots in the mouth
lol - liked this
these are raw facts dude, anyone on this site'll leave u stomped fast noob
n if u keep beefing w/ seyance ur family will need to have one to contact u
lol

I liked the personals and the many referrences to present wheeling an dealings... I still think you struggled to land a killer blow but you got alot more lols from me with that

The bells rung and for me its Boredom with the lols

V/Boredom

[Jah Homie]

Originally Posted by Boredom's Line of the match

u are officially gows bitch, he could have u cleaning pots in his house
so when u get on ur knees for god ur not praying ur taking shots in the mouth

Boredom's personals were great. The punches landed hard at the end of the verse -- and the scheme was above average. Loved the rhyme within the schemes... you were really able to stretch your bars to maximize the format

Originally Posted by bleak's line of the match

Stop fronting, you're not showtime. keep it up, n I think Frank'll pop ya.
And that g shit should cease quick. in prison you'd get the Shank, Sinatra.

The long verse was well demonstrated, I feel the rhyme could have been structured better. The name flips were good on a stand alone basis yet the repetitive nature left the punches soft. The concepts were great visually but they weren't cohesive enough

v/Boredom

[Sharp]

Originally Posted by bleak

Boredom aka Alphabet aka Shank Sinatra

Your lines are dull. tic for tac, n repetition blocked your saving graces.
The only people intrigued by the Alphabet r watching Barney on a daily basis.
like it, nice start
Part of the infantry, in back cause you're gay and shoot like a bafoon
How you champ a noob tourney, n still not the best noob in your platoon?
Feel like it could've hit harder... seems almost like you were focused on the miltary aspect here a little more
Stop fronting, you're not showtime. keep it up, n I think Frank'll pop ya.
And that g shit should cease quick. in prison you'd get the Shank, Sinatra.
alright
You're a one man army huh? Simply cause you aint seein no friends.
Couldn't imagine Alpha team up unless they're riding Mr. T to the win.
lol alright
That e thug role is beyond stupid. Me? I send fags into the hearse
In breakdowns, we'll see more 9's to bleak than you're braggin in that verse
pretty good, feel like the connection wasnt quite there tho - not entirely clear on what you mean by 9's, though I do understand the concept as a whole so it was pretty nice

Originally Posted by Boredom

u love that smooth jazz when jerkin dudes n for a fag thats great
but ur so quick to blow da horn theres men in philharmonics u make look straight
not to nitpic, but a philharmonic isn't related to smooth jazz at all, so it isn't really as gay. still thought it was a funny line
i'm champin this tourney leavin lames snapped on a gurney, i'm a true giant
so if it's predicted in the mag nothin other than here comes the king sn00p lyin
Obey did something like this in b2b against sn00p, but this was much better and hit regardless
i'm from times when hens boasted n verses posted had hype dude
now the future of text battling looks bleak..it’s because of faggots like you
Was expecting a line like this, but it was done well enough to still hit
u are officially gows bitch, he could have u cleaning pots in his house
so when u get on ur knees for god ur not praying ur taking shots in the mouth
pretty nice
these are raw facts dude, anyone on this site'll leave u stomped fast noob
n if u keep beefing w/ seyance ur family will need to have one to contact u
Solid personal

More consistent verse overall with harder hits, I'd say boredom got this

V/Boredom

[Camp Bell]

Your lines are dull. tic for tac, n repetition blocked your saving graces.
The only people intrigued by the Alphabet r watching Barney on a daily basis.
ok nameplay,

Part of the infantry, in back cause you're gay and shoot like a bafoon
How you champ a noob tourney, n still not the best noob in your platoon?
lol nice

Stop fronting, you're not showtime. keep it up, n I think Frank'll pop ya.
And that g shit should cease quick. in prison you'd get the Shank, Sinatra.
another nice nameplay

You're a one man army huh? Simply cause you aint seein no friends.
Couldn't imagine Alpha team up unless they're riding Mr. T to the win.
lolol dope

That e thug role is beyond stupid. Me? I send fags into the hearse
In breakdowns, we'll see more 9's to bleak than you're braggin in that verse
ehh


vs


u love that smooth jazz when jerkin dudes n for a fag thats great
but ur so quick to blow da horn theres men in philharmonics u make look straight
nah

i'm champin this tourney leavin lames snapped on a gurney, i'm a true giant
so if it's predicted in the mag nothin other than here comes the king sn00p lyin
iono, its nice but the wording or lack of punctuation fucks it up

i'm from times when hens boasted n verses posted had hype dude
now the future of text battling looks bleak..it’s because of faggots like you
weak nameplay

u are officially gows bitch, he could have u cleaning pots in his house
so when u get on ur knees for god ur not praying ur taking shots in the mouth
lolol ouch

these are raw facts dude, anyone on this site'll leave u stomped fast noob
n if u keep beefing w/ seyance ur family will need to have one to contact u
ok nameplay



yo this was a slick battle, both yall had some nice nameplays
bleak was more consistent with his lines tho. each one had sting
bore was straight but he had a couple that missed, the snoop lion
concept was nice but like i said, something was off and fucked it up
going with bleak on this, more consistent. good battle yall.

vote: bleak

[Malachi]

Your lines are dull. tic for tac, n repetition blocked your saving graces.
The only people intrigued by the Alphabet r watching Barney on a daily basis.
Nice/ok
Part of the infantry, in back cause you're gay and shoot like a bafoon
How you champ a noob tourney, n still not the best noob in your platoon?
nah
Stop fronting, you're not showtime. keep it up, n I think Frank'll pop ya.
And that g shit should cease quick. in prison you'd get the Shank, Sinatra.
ok
You're a one man army huh? Simply cause you aint seein no friends.
Couldn't imagine Alpha team up unless they're riding Mr. T to the win.
aha
That e thug role is beyond stupid. Me? I send fags into the hearse
In breakdowns, we'll see more 9's to bleak than you're braggin in that verse
aight i guess

vs


u love that smooth jazz when jerkin dudes n for a fag thats great
but ur so quick to blow da horn theres men in philharmonics u make look straight
ha cool
i'm champin this tourney leavin lames snapped on a gurney, i'm a true giant
so if it's predicted in the mag nothin other than here comes the king sn00p lyin
lol
i'm from times when hens boasted n verses posted had hype dude
now the future of text battling looks bleak..it’s because of faggots like you
ok ok
u are officially gows bitch, he could have u cleaning pots in his house
so when u get on ur knees for god ur not praying ur taking shots in the mouth
this was aight but lol
these are raw facts dude, anyone on this site'll leave u stomped fast noob
n if u keep beefing w/ seyance ur family will need to have one to contact u
really nice, lotb

V/ Boredom

had a better verse overall, and took it with the closer.
Good match

[Swerve]

Bleak - everything felt a little to predictable. Alphabet/Barney...Alpha team/Mr.T....the shank and noob tourney lines I didn't like...the 9 line was okay, but even nein/9 lines have been done. Overall, your wording is solid but you need to work on thinking outside the box more. Get at your tutor about that and see what they say.

Boredom - A lot of played concepts, but your verse was a lot more consistent than Bleaks. I enjoyed the text's future looks bleak line the most, but just like bleak you gotta think outside the box more. However, you did a slightly better job than Bleak so that's why you get the W for me.

Vote - Boredom