~ Individually, we are one drop. Together, we are an ocean. ~ Ryunosuke Satoro

Hush · 01-28-2013, 01:30 PM

In a time way before recognition two lovers stirred
Way Before the simplest colors merged or man discovered words
these endless entities since the days of young conferred
beyond space and times curves, they lay where none disturb
as raindrops became torrents then shrunk into fountains
an embrace that saw dust to stone and stone to a mountain
observing forests tower from the seeds of a flower
still they held fast with all strength an there power
gripping tighter as roots grew to trunks at there bower
to a love the minutes seconds an hours sought to devour
when summers was hottest an winters were colder
hope hung on un cowered shoulders as days made them older
volcanoes grew from boulders an hellfire burnt out to smolder
when all other wonders were over he still gasped to behold her
still holding as the world advanced at no more than a prance
forever entranced…
stuck in the bitterest curse if it isn’t romance

Split · 01-28-2013, 01:36 PM

slick verse... I'll feed this tonight

Nice · 01-28-2013, 02:23 PM

Even though you're a faggot and spelled their wrong this was pretty dope. Props

Dope girl · 01-28-2013, 10:52 PM

Dope piece Hush, Fix errors.

NYCSPITZ · 01-31-2013, 12:25 AM

HelloKitty approves of this title and now has psychoanalyzed Hush: we can assume that Hush is inclined towards monogamy and he will marry for life when he does. Although he will yell at his wife to take out the garbage every Thursday, it's only out of love. He is a philosopher at heart and has taken to heart much of the glib advice offered by sagacious OG's rolling blunts at the park. When Hush goes to KFC, he uses the sauce in the green packets but after he has his fourth child he will switch to the mild habernero. You have been evaluated.

Split · 01-31-2013, 06:18 AM

,bower" was strange word choice. I thought the multis felt natural and unforced.

The opening was strong, an abstract/ thought-provoking statement to set the mood. the effects of time were a big focus, the uncertainty that comes with it was nicely portrayed.

an embrace that saw dust to stone and stone to a mountain
observing forests tower from the seeds of a flower

That imagery stood out to me, pretty vivid over all. Nice read

Allen Knight · 01-31-2013, 12:27 PM

this was dope, i usually never peep om but this was def a good read

as raindrops became torrents then shrunk into fountains
an embrace that saw dust to stone and stone to a mountain
^^^
that was slick as fuck imo

props on this vic

Flow · 02-01-2013, 06:13 AM

Great Title - Enjoyed the topic choice.

as raindrops became torrents then shrunk into fountains
an embrace that saw dust to stone and stone to a mountain
Love the imagary here

Very impressive with keeping the multis going throughout, topic on point and great imagery.

Agree with Split though on the Bower part. Seemed forced. Didnt work fo me.

01-28-2013, 01:30 PM	#1
Hush NJ Devil Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,042 Battle Record: Who Cares Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Rep Power: 84181417	~ Individually, we are one drop. Together, we are an ocean. ~ Ryunosuke Satoro In a time way before recognition two lovers stirred Way Before the simplest colors merged or man discovered words these endless entities since the days of young conferred beyond space and times curves, they lay where none disturb as raindrops became torrents then shrunk into fountains an embrace that saw dust to stone and stone to a mountain observing forests tower from the seeds of a flower still they held fast with all strength an there power gripping tighter as roots grew to trunks at there bower to a love the minutes seconds an hours sought to devour when summers was hottest an winters were colder hope hung on un cowered shoulders as days made them older volcanoes grew from boulders an hellfire burnt out to smolder when all other wonders were over he still gasped to behold her still holding as the world advanced at no more than a prance forever entranced… stuck in the bitterest curse if it isn’t romance

01-28-2013, 01:36 PM	#2
Split . Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 8,904 Battle Record: 27-22 Rep Power: 85899395	slick verse... I'll feed this tonight __________________ http://split8.yolasite.com

01-31-2013, 06:18 AM	#6
Split . Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 8,904 Battle Record: 27-22 Rep Power: 85899395	,bower" was strange word choice. I thought the multis felt natural and unforced. The opening was strong, an abstract/ thought-provoking statement to set the mood. the effects of time were a big focus, the uncertainty that comes with it was nicely portrayed. an embrace that saw dust to stone and stone to a mountain observing forests tower from the seeds of a flower That imagery stood out to me, pretty vivid over all. Nice read __________________ http://split8.yolasite.com

01-31-2013, 12:27 PM	#7
Allen Knight The Bad Guys. Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 9,166 Battle Record: 106-34 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - Key to Greatness I - BA Cypher Tournament - Tag Team Tournament I - Fight Night LXXVI - Time to Kill V - Fight Night LXXX - 1-2 Punch League - Fight Night Cypher II - Key Grand Prix IV - NBL Cypher (7x) - Throwdown Cypher - Netcees Battle League (2x) - BA Cypher III - Fight Night 1 - Tag Team Tournament V Rep Power: 85899398	this was dope, i usually never peep om but this was def a good read as raindrops became torrents then shrunk into fountains an embrace that saw dust to stone and stone to a mountain ^^^ that was slick as fuck imo props on this vic __________________ C.O.B

01-28-2013, 02:23 PM	#3
Nice Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 93 Rep Power: 0	Even though you're a faggot and spelled their wrong this was pretty dope. Props

01-28-2013, 10:52 PM	#4
Dope girl Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: I live in Florida Posts: 4,706 Battle Record: 3-8 Rep Power: 55521416	Dope piece Hush, Fix errors.

01-31-2013, 12:25 AM	#5
NYCSPITZ SYRACUSE Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,033 Battle Record: 31-37 Champed - Write Night II - Alias Topical Tournament Rep Power: 4743544	HelloKitty approves of this title and now has psychoanalyzed Hush: we can assume that Hush is inclined towards monogamy and he will marry for life when he does. Although he will yell at his wife to take out the garbage every Thursday, it's only out of love. He is a philosopher at heart and has taken to heart much of the glib advice offered by sagacious OG's rolling blunts at the park. When Hush goes to KFC, he uses the sauce in the green packets but after he has his fourth child he will switch to the mild habernero. You have been evaluated.

02-01-2013, 06:13 AM	#8
Flow Upset Champion Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: West Mids Posts: 3,861 Battle Record: 57-49 Accomplishments - 50 Wins Champed - BA Rookie Tourney - 1-2 Punch League (x2) - Pandemonium Cypher - 1-2 Punch league Season 9 Rep Power: 24894578	Great Title - Enjoyed the topic choice. as raindrops became torrents then shrunk into fountains an embrace that saw dust to stone and stone to a mountain Love the imagary here Very impressive with keeping the multis going throughout, topic on point and great imagery. Agree with Split though on the Bower part. Seemed forced. Didnt work fo me.