Kin vs. Storyteller [Storyteller Wins]

[BROKE LESNAR]

Rebuttal Option

▪both competitors must agree to it at time of check-in
▪format is A, B, B, A (A posts first, B drops next, B posts follow-up, A drops final bar)

Due Monday 12am PST

[Kin]

ChecK... want the rebuttal?

[Spoken]

Yeah

[Kin]

We're Separate Levels, time to Wrestle, your move next
This match'll be 1 Fall..but it'll take 2 Story's to Do Plex

[Spoken]

I'm fine with separate levels cus I got experience on this geek,
1 fall is true cus whose next in kin is in question once I lay him 6ft

[Spoken]

Ur bars are replicated from the past W/ horrid wording but u claim seperate
A fucking rip off of originals but what u expect from a haunting in kin etiquette

[Kin]

Etiquette?? shiiiit...Kin bout to teach u how to be proper
Keep ya mouth Closed when its Full of bars Slouchin' in Posture

[BROKE LESNAR]

Originally Posted by Kin

We're Separate Levels, time to Wrestle, your move next
This match'll be 1 Fall..but it'll take 2 Story's to Do Plex

I liked the concept here, pretty creative. Some ppl might not get it, but I'm a wrestling mark so I do. I like how you used seperate levels in the setup to accentuate your misdirect. Idk ab the do plex though. I'm assuming your referring to suplex, only omitting the su for the du in duplex to go along with the first half of your setup. In this regard, I don't think it hit that hard bc essentially you're using two different concepts here that are on completely different wavelengths. You juggled 2 when I think it would have been better to focus on 1. But I understand your need to include the wrestling aspect as it it helped to make the plex in duplex work.

Originally Posted by Storyteller

I'm fine with separate levels cus I got experience on this geek,
1 fall is true cus whose next in kin is in question once I lay him 6ft

I'm assuming you were trying to say "next of kin" instead of "next in kin". In this regard, when I think of a np for Kin, that is the first thing I think of. I had a battle with him recently and purposefully tried to stay away from that angle bc of how predictable it would be. With that said, I don't fault you for it. I think the rebuttal was on point, but the 6 feet finish was kind of anticlimactic. Everything up to the "next in kin" part was more focused from a rebuttal perspective than Kin's first bar in terms of creativity, but the finish felt flat.

Originally Posted by Storyteller

Ur bars are replicated from the past W/ horrid wording but u claim seperate
A fucking rip off of originals but what u expect from a haunting in kin etiquette

This wasn't that bad. One thing I've been trying to become more lenient on is what distinguishes between a np and a reach. Normally I would have said Kinnecticut and Connecticut is forced and just discount it based on that. But murda sho has kind of taught me to be more lax so I think in this instance I will just say well done. Sounded out it works for me. Now the execution was kind of off, which is funny bc the concept was on how bad your opponent's wording was, but as I said it was a slight nuance.

Originally Posted by Kin

Etiquette?? shiiiit...Kin bout to teach u how to be proper
Keep ya mouth Closed when its Full of bars Slouchin' in Posture

The setup was perfect. Had a great rebuttal tone to it. The downside here at first glance would be the statementish underpinnings of the second line. However, instead of going setup, buildup, punchline, you basically included the setup and buildup in the opening line. Probably the best bar of the 4 posted.

This came down to 2 bars, the creativity of Story's Kin etiquette np vs. the strength of Kin's rebuttal.

In the end, I have Kin's rebuttal taking it.

v-Kin

[~RustyGunZ~]

kin, if his name was plex that'd be dopeish I guess. It wasn't. Nor was the last bar

story, rebuttal was crap. the second line was forced to me but an attempt at an actual punch I guess.

v/story

[Mike Wrecka]

I got story. Didn't care for any of the bars but the kin etiquette concept at least had the potential to be dope.

[fresh]

Originally Posted by Kin

We're Separate Levels, time to Wrestle, your move next
This match'll be 1 Fall..but it'll take 2 Story's to Do Plex

I feel like if your name was plex this owuld be ok. I duno if thats ur alias or what. The wrestling aspect seem to be just thrown in there tho. I suppose it does tie in with separate levels, but something is missing here for me.

Originally Posted by Storyteller

I'm fine with separate levels cus I got experience on this geek,
1 fall is true cus whose next in kin is in question once I lay him 6ft

next of kin would have been the proper way to write this, but I kinda like the flip on separate levels / 6ft deep and 1 fall / next of kin

Originally Posted by Storyteller

Ur bars are replicated from the past W/ horrid wording but u claim seperate
A fucking rip off of originals but what u expect from a haunting in kin etiquette

Ok not bad. Concept was clever and overall the execution was decent.

Originally Posted by Kin

Etiquette?? shiiiit...Kin bout to teach u how to be proper
Keep ya mouth Closed when its Full of bars Slouchin' in Posture

I liked this rebuttal. The set up was worded nice, it just sounded edgy to me. The punch didn't follow the same tone, but it was still cool nonetheless.

This is a close match up. I liked kins rebuttal more, but I didn't really enjoy his opening punch. Story had a decent rebuttal and a decent punch. So for consistency I'ma have to go with story on this one.

/Story

[Similac]

This was pretty close..I like both second drops but the haunting in Connecticut won it for for me ..the 1st drops were pretty even

[Glossy Finish Dick Lips]

I got Story here.


I think Kin had a cool concept in which could have been a haymaker but is execution lacked the major impact it potentially had if he took a couple of more attempts at flipping them for more of a harsher impact.