07-07-2013, 03:58 PM | #1 |
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Flo Real v Ronic - {Flo wins}
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07-07-2013, 09:21 PM | #2 |
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10! 10 lines in the battle! Ah ah ah!
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07-08-2013, 07:47 AM | #3 |
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my 10 ready
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07-09-2013, 03:53 AM | #4 |
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@Flo Real count them
I know there's no strength packed in Flo rist Yo prick, flower power had its chance n missed You're dog food, think u Flo Rida's younger brother? Get real Is what I told Pitbull just to give my pet meal How many cunts I scraped? Stacks, queer Flo dont get it - bitch asked me for a papsmear Bro, ya lines wet, no power, relyin' on gas spouts Call me demolition man, I'm battlin pat's house I coulda modeled this verse silk smooth, conditioned it perfect but F l'oreal - because you're not worth it |
07-09-2013, 05:16 AM | #5 |
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he ain't frightening, I'm rolling thunder he jus rolls the dice
if this cats lightning... its cus he's over in a flash and he never hits twice Your known for stinging eyes with that face of yours - you ugly bitch! Your so minging that if a girl "eye ronic" << thats exactly what that is Im real, you a fake, your a pedo wit an ego ill puncture like a lumbar I separate the man from the boys.......and with you i'd need a crowbar I got that fresh new era style, that gets respect, so fuck the win whilst your style fuckin common! bitch stop tryin, you'll never be him your out of luck cus we are not equal, your a gay fuck an your feeble mainespitz n you suck..the semen back through the anal canel usin straws for retrieval |
07-09-2013, 08:23 AM | #6 |
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"any bitches that eye ronic are being exactly that" - Dominate vs Ronic rnd1 SC Classic
flower power vs lightening (being generous to quote it) Both verses were simple with a lack of quotes. also flo real questionably bit but i wont hold it against him since dom worded it 100x better. ill give this to ronic because his misses wete less awful. flo work on being more creative and less corny. v/ ronic |
07-09-2013, 04:11 PM | #7 |
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I know there's no strength packed in Flo rist
Yo prick, flower power had its chance n missed flo wrist/florist might be a stretch depending on accent. cool idea but the general excecution of the punch was lacking. You're dog food, think u Flo Rida's younger brother? Get real Is what I told Pitbull just to give my pet meal another case of an okay flip, but it feels like you put a little too much idea-wise into it with your bars that short. How many cunts I scraped? Stacks, queer Flo dont get it - bitch asked me for a papsmear funny idea, excecuted decently in really shortbar form Bro, ya lines wet, no power, relyin' on gas spouts Call me demolition man, I'm battlin pat's house this was more of a boast/brag line that wasn't bad but doesn't really hit. i try to avoid these in regular battles, save them for flex battles/drops/spontaneous disc cyphers I coulda modeled this verse silk smooth, conditioned it perfect but F l'oreal - because you're not worth it funny concept but not a huge punch he ain't frightening, I'm rolling thunder he jus rolls the dice if this cats lightning... its cus he's over in a flash and he never hits twice could've been worded to hit harder but alright Your known for stinging eyes with that face of yours - you ugly bitch! Your so minging that if a girl "eye ronic" << thats exactly what that is been done, yeah Im real, you a fake, your a pedo wit an ego ill puncture like a lumbar I separate the man from the boys.......and with you i'd need a crowbar okay idea, punchline was done alright but setup couldve added to that I got that fresh new era style, that gets respect, so fuck the win whilst your style fuckin common! bitch stop tryin, you'll never be him cool concept, little lacking in wording your out of luck cus we are not equal, your a gay fuck an your feeble mainespitz n you suck..the semen back through the anal canel usin straws for retrieval jokey line that was kind of a miss imo lemme say first @Ronic you've definitely got potential. On old NC i went from badly worded regular text to decent shortbar by the end (my first battle or two on AOB i was still at that point) so when i got some pointers in that UW tourney things clicked pretty easily. you've got a good selection of concepts but at the moment you're not always giving yourself enough space to work with. it's kind of a throwback to older shortbar stuff and done alright, so it reads well but it doesnt quite hit as hard as other shit you'll see. definitely stay up, when i bitch enough to knuck to finally make another 101 thread definitely get in there and work on bringing out ideas, cause you're closer than you might think Flo, the only big picture thing i'd say about your verse is that your setups could add more to the bar. Like that men from boys idea was delivered a little obviously because the setup ended right on 'youre a pedo'... so it was fresh in the reader's mind when they got to the punch. imo a really effective bar hits the same way a joke would, getting its effect from a somewhat unexpected punchline. like nik-a's ring bar in the SC is a great example. otherwise no real complaints, just a matter of selecting more creative concepts to work with imo flo hit harder due to stronger wording. ronic's on track tho. v/flo |
07-10-2013, 03:23 AM | #8 |
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Vs. Lightening I got flo though with Better misses really... Seen better from both but this hear was real lackluster my friends but I got flo in this
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07-10-2013, 11:50 AM | #9 |
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flo took it easily
just all around better concepts/execution eye ronic was terrible lol c'mon now... |
07-10-2013, 01:47 PM | #10 |
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Yep, flow took this one pretty easy. I actually felt the I-ronic bar was his best bar, but to each his own I suppose. It was a clever concept but it could of been worded better, not too fond of those little arrows to make the punch better. Just pretty lame if you ask me. Well, it's text, so do what you do, I guess it works.
Anyway down to the vote, I didn't see anything from Ronics verse, his short bar style just wasn't working for him, and it probably wasn't the smartest decision for a battle. Didn't see 1 line from Ronics verse that were special, flower power had potential if you elongated the bar a bit. Your closer was prob the best line of your verse. Flow/schemes were alright, but the punches just weren't there. Flo, you did what you had to do to take it basically, and as I mentioned earlier, the eye ronic bar was a pretty clever concept, even if it has been taken before. You worded it differently and it came off ok. The rest of your verse was OK hits that accumulated damage to your opponent. Pretty easy decision ultimately. Vote - Flo |
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