WEEK 8: Jayfresh 3-3 VS iSpaz 3-3 iSPAZ WINS

UPN Zuch · 11-22-2020, 09:02 PM

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iSpaz · 11-23-2020, 10:38 AM

Yoo.. 10?

iSpaz · 11-26-2020, 04:30 PM

You cock sucka. I'm like blockbusta in its prime with the mag gripped
Thinkin you can go blow for blow with me but I aint down with that fag shit
Hate the kid. This beta bitch only frontin online thats ad hoc
You prolly readin this verse as aggressive as if I pressed caps lock
Back from vacay. You were great in ur heyday but what you had is far
You tried graspin a power line nd then shocked us all with how bad you are
Outfit crispy. Cashmere cuz it fits me you must be tweakin on a limb
Yeah I'll beat Fresh to death and the drip is just blood leakin outta him
I'll take ur wife. Show her the life nd then the pump break ya in two
1 shot'll have the steel ring around my finger.. after I take it from you

JaysonFresh · 11-28-2020, 04:52 PM

get him some pain killers

quick key

yo,

hands around ya neck nigga i gotta tight hold grip
Percocet? Naah. Spaz searching for an entire bottle like u cant hold it in long enuff ona road trip.
fresh the type to crush ya spine while u screaaam stop
when Im done u'll need somethin' to prop ya neck up like airport souvenir shops
& Im pickin off every member of his fam when the gun cock
brrrrrat..every body 'count doubles' ..10 sec left on Pop-a-Shot
uppercut alone'll make u extremely nauseous
rearrange ya jaw, when ya mouth waters for food it turns to a leaky faucet
gotchu targeted, sniper scope in close range
must be scared cuz 'Spaz out on a dash' & I pray u become a victim of road rage.

fraze · 11-29-2020, 01:54 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by iSpaz

You cock sucka. I'm like blockbusta in its prime with the mag gripped
Thinkin you can go blow for blow with me but I aint down with that fag shit
don't like the wording in the punch.
Hate the kid. This beta bitch only frontin online thats ad hoc
You prolly readin this verse as aggressive as if I pressed caps lock
straightforward. light
Back from vacay. You were great in ur heyday but what you had is far
You tried graspin a power line nd then shocked us all with how bad you are
ok concept. still kinda light
Outfit crispy. Cashmere cuz it fits me you must be tweakin on a limb
Yeah I'll beat Fresh to death and the drip is just blood leakin outta him
this is ok
I'll take ur wife. Show her the life nd then the pump break ya in two
1 shot'll have the steel ring around my finger.. after I take it from you
don't like this

Quotes: Fresh to death
close: power line

Ok verse, most of the misses were from picking concepts that aren't very strong disses. Saying he's reading the verse as aggressive isn't much of a put down, concepts like that are hard to make hit.

Quote:

Originally Posted by JaysonFresh

hands around ya neck nigga i gotta tight hold grip
Percocet? Naah. Spaz searching for an entire bottle like u cant hold it in long enuff ona road trip.
there is a flip there but it's light
fresh the type to crush ya spine while u screaaam stop
when Im done u'll need somethin' to prop ya neck up like airport souvenir shops
too direct for me
& Im pickin off every member of his fam when the gun cock
brrrrrat..every body 'count doubles' ..10 sec left on Pop-a-Shot
ok concept. wording is a little off
uppercut alone'll make u extremely nauseous
rearrange ya jaw, when ya mouth waters for food it turns to a leaky faucet
ok imagery, punch is too simple for me
gotchu targeted, sniper scope in close range
must be scared cuz 'Spaz out on a dash' & I pray u become a victim of road rage.
wording is off. concept is ok

Quotes: n/a
Close: Pop-a-shot, road rage

Didn't have any quotes from you but you still had some cool concepts. Keep working on your wording. This battle would have been closer if you had worded your punches to hit b/c the concepts aren't bad.

Vote: iSpaz close battle but Spaz edges this with 'Fresh to death'. it's probably a little played, but the drip tie in was cool and it was well worded.

Coop · 11-29-2020, 02:10 PM

iSpaz

You cock sucka. I'm like blockbusta in its prime with the mag gripped
Thinkin you can go blow for blow with me but I aint down with that fag shit
Meh not much of a diss
Hate the kid. This beta bitch only frontin online thats ad hoc
You prolly readin this verse as aggressive as if I pressed caps lock
Wasn't feelin it
Back from vacay. You were great in ur heyday but what you had is far
You tried graspin a power line nd then shocked us all with how bad you are
Kinda funny
Outfit crispy. Cashmere cuz it fits me you must be tweakin on a limb
Yeah I'll beat Fresh to death and the drip is just blood leakin outta him
Using "his" drip somehow woulda connected more but this aight. As written it could be misconstrued as your drip, since you were just talkin about your shit
I'll take ur wife. Show her the life nd then the pump break ya in two
1 shot'll have the steel ring around my finger.. after I take it from you
Avg gun bar

Kudos for the internal rhyme, but now you gotta improve the disses. Power line and drip were your best two. 5/10

VS

hands around ya neck nigga i gotta tight hold grip
Percocet? Naah. Spaz searching for an entire bottle like u cant hold it in long enuff ona road trip.
Holy run on sentence...
fresh the type to crush ya spine while u screaaam stop
when Im done u'll need somethin' to prop ya neck up like airport souvenir shops
The shops aren't the ones that need em so this didn't quite work as worded.
& Im pickin off every member of his fam when the gun cock
brrrrrat..every body 'count doubles' ..10 sec left on Pop-a-Shot
Wasn't feelin it
uppercut alone'll make u extremely nauseous
rearrange ya jaw, when ya mouth waters for food it turns to a leaky faucet
lol
gotchu targeted, sniper scope in close range
must be scared cuz 'Spaz out on a dash' & I pray u become a victim of road rage.
ehhhhh

The jaw line was ok but the rest... nothing really stood out. Also don't admit when you quick key even if you are. You're basically telling people 'I didnt put in any effort so dont vote for me" 4/10

Outfit crispy. Cashmere cuz it fits me you must be tweakin on a limb
Yeah I'll beat Fresh to death and the drip is just blood leakin outta him

VS

....

then power line = jaw

Vote: iSpaz

Ajax · 11-29-2020, 05:46 PM

This was a cool read. Both had solid wording, although I give Jaysonfresh the edge there. Ispaz’s power line/shocking punch was top notch. I LOL’d at leaky faucet and thought the bottle punch was clever from Jaysonfresh. Overall, I think Jaysonfresh came a little more consistently funny/witty. Close one, but he takes it. Cheers.

UPN Zuch · 11-30-2020, 05:44 PM

Need many more votes here

UPN Zuch · 11-30-2020, 09:04 PM

I wasn’t feeling jays wording. A lot of extra words that threw the timing and flow off. Concepts were good as usual, I just feel you could do more with them.

Ispaz doesn’t have the greatest angles but he worded his smoother and it hit more that way. Was a close battle.

Good shit guys

Vote spaz

11-23-2020, 10:38 AM	#2
iSpaz Gang shit on my brain Join Date: May 2015 Posts: 265 Battle Record: 10-11 Rep Power: 161231	Yoo.. 10? __________________ But don't say I can't rap like I'm not a Rap God, Like I won't break your fucking favorite rapper's rap jaw

11-26-2020, 04:30 PM	#3
iSpaz Gang shit on my brain Join Date: May 2015 Posts: 265 Battle Record: 10-11 Rep Power: 161231	You cock sucka. I'm like blockbusta in its prime with the mag gripped Thinkin you can go blow for blow with me but I aint down with that fag shit Hate the kid. This beta bitch only frontin online thats ad hoc You prolly readin this verse as aggressive as if I pressed caps lock Back from vacay. You were great in ur heyday but what you had is far You tried graspin a power line nd then shocked us all with how bad you are Outfit crispy. Cashmere cuz it fits me you must be tweakin on a limb Yeah I'll beat Fresh to death and the drip is just blood leakin outta him I'll take ur wife. Show her the life nd then the pump break ya in two 1 shot'll have the steel ring around my finger.. after I take it from you __________________ But don't say I can't rap like I'm not a Rap God, Like I won't break your fucking favorite rapper's rap jaw Last edited by iSpaz; 11-28-2020 at 03:10 PM.

11-28-2020, 04:52 PM	#4
JaysonFresh Member Join Date: Jun 2019 Posts: 45 Battle Record: 3-5 Rep Power: 263271	get him some pain killers quick key yo, hands around ya neck nigga i gotta tight hold grip Percocet? Naah. Spaz searching for an entire bottle like u cant hold it in long enuff ona road trip. fresh the type to crush ya spine while u screaaam stop when Im done u'll need somethin' to prop ya neck up like airport souvenir shops & Im pickin off every member of his fam when the gun cock brrrrrat..every body 'count doubles' ..10 sec left on Pop-a-Shot uppercut alone'll make u extremely nauseous rearrange ya jaw, when ya mouth waters for food it turns to a leaky faucet gotchu targeted, sniper scope in close range must be scared cuz 'Spaz out on a dash' & I pray u become a victim of road rage. Last edited by JaysonFresh; 11-28-2020 at 05:27 PM.

11-29-2020, 05:46 PM	#7
Ajax Senior Member Join Date: May 2020 Posts: 344 Battle Record: 5-4 Rep Power: 95147	This was a cool read. Both had solid wording, although I give Jaysonfresh the edge there. Ispaz’s power line/shocking punch was top notch. I LOL’d at leaky faucet and thought the bottle punch was clever from Jaysonfresh. Overall, I think Jaysonfresh came a little more consistently funny/witty. Close one, but he takes it. Cheers. __________________ https://soundcloud.com/ajaxinstrumentals

11-29-2020, 02:10 PM	#6
Coop Senior Member Join Date: May 2020 Posts: 352 Battle Record: 3-6 Rep Power: 1313632	iSpaz You cock sucka. I'm like blockbusta in its prime with the mag gripped Thinkin you can go blow for blow with me but I aint down with that fag shit Meh not much of a diss Hate the kid. This beta bitch only frontin online thats ad hoc You prolly readin this verse as aggressive as if I pressed caps lock Wasn't feelin it Back from vacay. You were great in ur heyday but what you had is far You tried graspin a power line nd then shocked us all with how bad you are Kinda funny Outfit crispy. Cashmere cuz it fits me you must be tweakin on a limb Yeah I'll beat Fresh to death and the drip is just blood leakin outta him Using "his" drip somehow woulda connected more but this aight. As written it could be misconstrued as your drip, since you were just talkin about your shit I'll take ur wife. Show her the life nd then the pump break ya in two 1 shot'll have the steel ring around my finger.. after I take it from you Avg gun bar Kudos for the internal rhyme, but now you gotta improve the disses. Power line and drip were your best two. 5/10 VS hands around ya neck nigga i gotta tight hold grip Percocet? Naah. Spaz searching for an entire bottle like u cant hold it in long enuff ona road trip. Holy run on sentence... fresh the type to crush ya spine while u screaaam stop when Im done u'll need somethin' to prop ya neck up like airport souvenir shops The shops aren't the ones that need em so this didn't quite work as worded. & Im pickin off every member of his fam when the gun cock brrrrrat..every body 'count doubles' ..10 sec left on Pop-a-Shot Wasn't feelin it uppercut alone'll make u extremely nauseous rearrange ya jaw, when ya mouth waters for food it turns to a leaky faucet lol gotchu targeted, sniper scope in close range must be scared cuz 'Spaz out on a dash' & I pray u become a victim of road rage. ehhhhh The jaw line was ok but the rest... nothing really stood out. Also don't admit when you quick key even if you are. You're basically telling people 'I didnt put in any effort so dont vote for me" 4/10 Outfit crispy. Cashmere cuz it fits me you must be tweakin on a limb Yeah I'll beat Fresh to death and the drip is just blood leakin outta him VS .... then power line = jaw Vote: iSpaz