08-05-2014, 02:36 AM | #1 |
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Advanced Placement [VS] Taking Hostages [Advanced Placement WINS]
@Aero and @Dominate @Blanco Bishop and @Lyfza Gamble Rules Due Dates:
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08-13-2014, 01:02 AM | #2 |
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08-13-2014, 01:19 AM | #3 |
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08-13-2014, 07:17 PM | #4 | |
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Ayo Blanc, Try & pursue the title's suicidal esp since Roar had you in dire straits I'm a great - You lost to a guy who named himself after noise a Lion makes Yea I still contact your wife, it's great until you accuse the slut Ask Tyson, your wife needs privacy when texting a man she used to fuck I'll bruise Gam's shoulders & brake his hands, have reporters in place with cams He'll be shameful when anchors cover his swollen arms like Popeye the Sailorman You impressed Universal Execs? LOL Bitch what the FUCK are you on?! If jaws dropped & they put their hands together it was to cover a yawn Delusional, claim your sex counts high & you stay with a different bitch Lost count at 16 but couldn't count on one to spend Thanksgiving with Quote:
@Paradigm STOP MY TIME YO, REAL TALK, AERO THE GOAT, THIS NIGGA ATOMIC BEEN ON MY DICK, FUCKBOY, LISTEN WE ARE NOT FRIENDS SO QUIT ACTING LIKE WE'RE COOL IF WE ARRANGED TO MEET IN PERSON I'D FUCK YOU UP REAL TALK . . It'd be Rocky theme, I'd do prison just for you showing up & won't cop a plea Shiiit I'd willingly take the years from your appearance like a fucking oxy cream My stock's supreme so if I feel like hopping on a jet, I gave my paper Your broke ass you only goes into airplane mode trying to save on data Blanco its a FACT your wife (slut) dresses you, this a personal bar Last time you put your foot down & selected gear was to reverse in her car ~ It's Aero |
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08-13-2014, 07:19 PM | #5 |
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When TH c both u lames, the piece assures u getting your brains blown. A rapture with no 'scape Goat.....except when Dom blames u for the loss u'll take though. Queer Aer's in love with my partner..no homo, but that fruit should quit the site. I mean... the way he tried to dodge Murda...proves this coon's a BITCH................ for Lyfe. The hype's actually bull. I swear Dom champing these duels is luck. But'f anyone on the BoreDom innate its, this fool..... cuz his style's naturally dull as fuck. No hygiene I mean.. U just can't tell he fuckin smells?.. Ntm, dumb as hell But to actually see a chick giving Airhead...... she'd have to literally be one herself. Your partnership is a big fat corruption, of two fags untrusting.. Your just a martyrdom; ..and even Aero wouldn't step in front of that dysfunction.. aero poppin off?? Lbr this friggen peasant ain't lifting weapons.. Let's just face it... Airsoft, an that's worthless against a 3 fifty seven Buried alive, under a tombstone lying in rubble God?.....ur finished That would be Airplane and simple.... Wishing to b 'fly an above'the squad. But isn't. Bet both were in a frenzy to write. Trying to rush to win but we saw the ploy. So for the record......we came to show we're taking AP's throne: LeSean Mccoy. |
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08-13-2014, 11:38 PM | #7 |
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Try & pursue the title's suicidal esp since Roar had you in dire straits I'm a great - You lost to a guy who named himself after noise a Lion makes Decent Yea I still contact your wife, it's great until you accuse the slut Ask Tyson, your wife needs privacy when texting a man she used to fuck Heh I'll bruise Gam's shoulders & brake his hands, have reporters in place with cams He'll be shameful when anchors cover his swollen arms like Popeye the Sailorman Ok You impressed Universal Execs? LOL Bitch what the FUCK are you on?! If jaws dropped & they put their hands together it was to cover a yawn Dope Delusional, claim your sex counts high & you stay with a different bitch Lost count at 16 but couldn't count on one to spend Thanksgiving with Nice hit It'd be Rocky theme, I'd do prison just for you showing up & won't cop a plea Shiiit I'd willingly take the years from your appearance like a fucking oxy cream Decent My stock's supreme so if I feel like hopping on a jet, I gave my paper Your broke ass you only goes into airplane mode trying to save on data Lol Blanco its a FACT your wife (slut) dresses you, this a personal bar Last time you put your foot down & selected gear was to reverse in her car Sick, LOTV TH When TH c both u lames, the piece assures u getting your brains blown. A rapture with no 'scape Goat.....except when Dom blames u for the loss u'll take though. Alright Queer Aer's in love with my partner..no homo, but that fruit should quit the site. I mean... the way he tried to dodge Murda...proves this coon's a BITCH................ for Lyfe. Ok The hype's actually bull. I swear Dom champing these duels is luck. But'f anyone on the BoreDom innate its, this fool..... cuz his style's naturally dull as fuck. I found this forced No hygiene I mean.. U just can't tell he fuckin smells?.. Ntm, dumb as hell But to actually see a chick giving Airhead...... she'd have to literally be one herself. Alright Your partnership is a big fat corruption, of two fags untrusting.. Your just a martyrdom; ..and even Aero wouldn't step in front of that dysfunction.. Ehh aero poppin off?? Lbr this friggen peasant ain't lifting weapons.. Let's just face it... Airsoft, an that's worthless against a 3 fifty seven Ok Buried alive, under a tombstone lying in rubble God?.....ur finished That would be Airplane and simple.... Wishing to b 'fly an above'the squad. But isn't. Nah Bet both were in a frenzy to write. Trying to rush to win but we saw the ploy. So for the record......we came to show we're taking AP's throne: LeSean Mccoy. Cool My vote goes to Advanced Placement. Better concepts with better set ups, overall. Decent match. |
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Think this was cool. Not bad. Couldve been better. Gave AP 18.0/40, and the other team 17.9/40 So really close, but I'll expand on that.
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It sounds like a bad joke a comedian told. I know you guys can do better. You guys have the potential and capability. Of course most of this post is harsh because I'm in a bad mood, but you guys couldve taken this because aero delivered with a lot of sub par lines. I'm going with AP with a slightly better verse, Gamble didnt seem as good as his usual self, and blanco couldnt hold the team up, as he needed some help as well. AP aero wanted me to break down your verse so I will. I already said the Mccoy line was lane, those set ups are mediocre and lack contrast. The first line was decent, the next two couplets were complete misses in my book. Airhead was very good and refreshing! Martyr-dom was kinda lame, dysfunction? Idk, seemed eh. Airplane and simple was wow, idk not very connective there. Seemed weak. But I thoroughly enjoyed the 357 line. Good stuff, enjoyable.
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08-14-2014, 08:12 PM | #9 |
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Advanced Placement: It's not often that Aero attacks so personally. This was a very good verse. I liked the Popeye line a lot, but then that closer was awesome. Nothing missed, really, though the airplane mode line could have been worded better (or even turned into a nameplay, potentially).
Taking Hostages: The opener was a good concept that needed more concise wording. After that, it started to go downhill. The only redeeming line in the last 10 was the martyrdom concept, which could have been worded much better. The closer read like a Lil Wayne outtake. Vote: Advanced Placement
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08-14-2014, 11:40 PM | #10 |
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08-15-2014, 01:04 PM | #11 |
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Try & pursue the title's suicidal esp since Roar had you in dire straits
I'm a great - You lost to a guy who named himself after noise a Lion makes Yea I still contact your wife, it's great until you accuse the slut Ask Tyson, your wife needs privacy when texting a man she used to fuck I'll bruise Gam's shoulders & brake his hands, have reporters in place with cams He'll be shameful when anchors cover his swollen arms like Popeye the Sailorman You impressed Universal Execs? LOL Bitch what the FUCK are you on?! If jaws dropped & they put their hands together it was to cover a yawn Delusional, claim your sex counts high & you stay with a different bitch Lost count at 16 but couldn't count on one to spend Thanksgiving with vs nothing v- AP. them bars I quoted were straight heat, the LOTB was the noise a lion makes line, had me LOL'ing as I was reading. then the stop in the middle was GOAT, it gave me that fresh txt breather like I was reading a long topical, but I went and got some grape juice, then came back and I wasn't feeling them last ones though, the wording was mad off. Then I saw Gamble and Blanc's stuff, none of that was hitting anything to me. Some of those lines was mad corny, like the LeSean Mccoy stuff, keep that in ya audios Gamble, nobody wanna read that. sounding like the txt version of YMCMB, u had a Tyga verse w/o mentioning someone's grandma. Aero took the credit for this win though, smh. good bars yo |
08-15-2014, 04:23 PM | #12 |
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Advanced Placement wins 5-0.
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