Swerve 1-1 Vs E Tha Real 1-2 - SWERVE WINS

[Allen Knight]

Netcees Battle League Season VIII


Rules

Due Dates:

Verses are due Thursday, December 11th 2014 11:59 PM PST. and will be open until the following Sunday
EXTENSIONS ARE LIMITED - IF YOU USE YOURS IT WILL BE NOTED
Battles that lack votes may close later.
One sided battles may get closed early.
Extensions are 24 hours



Line Limit:

Minimum of 10, maximum of 16
If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first


For additional Rules refer to rule thread


First to 5, win by at least two votes
Good luck!
Swerve E the real

[Swerve]

sup

[E Tha Real]

Hello.

[Swerve]

Ironically jazz trumpet, i played in jazz band and combos for college.

Heard you got hitched in October, but that’s such tough sledding,
When you know I gave her the pump action minutes before your shotgun wedding.
You blow on a trumpet for fun huh? You know you can’t hurt me,
When I put the metal in your mouth, you’ll be shaking jazz hands begging for mercy
I’ve got furious fists, wondering how much more you can take,
Cause I’ll slump you while you’re still wondering “Diddy do that?” like Drake.
Got so many girls on my jock, learning what whores can do,
While you wouldn’t have a bitch on your arm rocking Orc’s tattoo.
You’re fake, weak and fraudulent, homie I see right through ya,
Just one shot will leave Reel spinning faster than all the seasons of Wicked Tuna.

[E Tha Real]

Silly twists on played concepts stand to abuse him
Biter trucking through with more accidental flips than Cam Newton
When my bullets lego at this minifigure, everything is awesome!
Idiot makes a shameless role look better than Emmy Rossum
Pathetic, who digs up personals for a text drop
Jerkoffs right hand is a masterson that coulda signed for the redsox
you got a liver infection, then don't stick with me
My Fist'll make ya hepburn as breakfast at tiffanys
As Oscar the Grouches wetdreams... He's fucking garbage
In such a sad state of affairs, NBC is pressing charges

[El Muffin]

this battle is nice imo

swerve had

opener
jazz hands was strange but the visual was gully n made me lol
bitch on ur arm(i kno ur the originator of this ;)

disliked diddy

not too familiar w/ closer but the concept is obv. dnt like it much

effective vers



e had

opener. which was nice
masterson lol
n sad state of affairs. although k think u should of used something else instead of the suing angle.

that hepburn shit is borderliine. its troubling

coz the first 5 times k said it outloud it sounded like hyup

now its sounding morevn more like Hip lol
iono

thot shameless was too easy.

tied on quotes

i got swerves first 4 as being slightly stronger than e's opener n masterson which were dope as well

very close

v/swerve by a hair

[El Muffin]

this battle is nice imo

swerve had

opener
jazz hands was strange but the visual was gully n made me lol
bitch on ur arm(i kno ur the originator of this ;)

disliked diddy

not too familiar w/ closer but the concept is obv. dnt like it much

effective vers



e had

opener. which was nice
masterson lol
n sad state of affairs. although k think u should of used something else instead of the suing angle.

that hepburn shit is borderliine. its troubling

coz the first 5 times k said it outloud it sounded like hyup

now its sounding morevn more like Hip lol
iono

thot shameless was too easy.

tied on quotes

i got swerves first 4 as being slightly stronger than e's opener n masterson which were dope as well

very close

v/swerve by a hair

[Spoken]

Shorgun, orc tattoo the reel spinning could have been fire but it just fell flat for me.

Vs.

Newton, Masterson, nbc

Seemed swerve didn't try in this as I have seen better tbr. The drake bar felt ehhh.. nothing major for me. The jazz hands was worded weird in a sense. E.. your Masterson line was nice the newton was played but ok with this one. The Emmy Rossum was forced to me and the hepburn.

To me it was whose bars I quoted hit hard and I got E with more clever and sting

[Glossy Finish Dick Lips]

Swerve:

Opener was a dope concept but lack luster as a pun. Metal to your mouth was more on the simple side but right to the point. Diddy do that could have been dope, actually. Enjoyed the concept but the pun was soft. Bitch on your arm, I feel like I've recently seen that concept recently, referencing Orc's tattoo or some shit? Maybe I'm wrong but, ehhhhh - I feel as if you could have gotten a little more creative and wittier with it, tbh. Reel spinning was ok'ish. Seen better from you. This was not one of your better drops, IMO. I think you dropped what you felt would be enough for the DUB, maybe? IDK... Maybe just not inspired to battle the person your matched with? Oh well... On to the next...

vs

E Tha Real:

Opener had potential. You kept it wayyy to basic and simple. Think you could have added just a tad bit more wits & creativity to it. Shameless role fell flat for me. Masterson was nice, actually. You kept it simple but how you delivered it was dope, IMO. Hepburn worked, IMO but think you could have did more with it as a whole. Sad state of affairs was just like your opener, IMO. You could have did more with it. I can see you definitely have an older style but more for audio rather then text. Add a little more thought, wits and creativity to your bars and you'll be straight man. I think you have good concepts but they are executed more on the simple side, feel me? And there is nothing wrong with being simple, but in order to perfect that style, your execution of something simple as to be harsh as fuck, dig? Keep writing tho, that rust shaking quick, I see...

v/Swerve - Punches tad bit more effective, IMO.

[Destroyer]

Heard you got hitched in October, but that’s such tough sledding,
When you know I gave her the pump action minutes before your shotgun wedding.
decent
You blow on a trumpet for fun huh? You know you can’t hurt me,
When I put the metal in your mouth, you’ll be shaking jazz hands begging for mercy
eh
I’ve got furious fists, wondering how much more you can take,
Cause I’ll slump you while you’re still wondering “Diddy do that?” like Drake.
ok
Got so many girls on my jock, learning what whores can do,
While you wouldn’t have a bitch on your arm rocking Orc’s tattoo.
seen it by now, decent
You’re fake, weak and fraudulent, homie I see right through ya,
Just one shot will leave Reel spinning faster than all the seasons of Wicked Tuna.
nah

Silly twists on played concepts stand to abuse him
Biter trucking through with more accidental flips than Cam Newton
ok
When my bullets lego at this minifigure, everything is awesome!
Idiot makes a shameless role look better than Emmy Rossum
decent
Pathetic, who digs up personals for a text drop
Jerkoffs right hand is a masterson that coulda signed for the redsox
nah
you got a liver infection, then don't stick with me
My Fist'll make ya hepburn as breakfast at tiffanys
not feeling
As Oscar the Grouches wetdreams... He's fucking garbage
In such a sad state of affairs, NBC is pressing charges
nah

I got swerve with more hitters and lotb with the opener probably
v/swerve

[kami]

I think if e worked on his wording he would be dope. With that being said his wording through it off for me. Swerve had jazz hands and morn with the shotgun punch.

V/ swerve

[Blanco Bishop]

E u should construct ur setups to tie in more with the punches. Your wording was a little archaic me...like your concepts tho.

Swerve had orcs tat..Jazz hands

V swerve

[King Karaoke]

Hi...

Swerve had some unusually corny lines like the orc line and Drake line but the rest was dope...
E had the masters on and shameless line which were fire...
Shameless line should be a top line in this week's mag...
But I think you got lazy on the other lines...
Swerve was more consistent...
Vote/swerve...

Bye...

[Cashius]

Swerve got it. He was consistant and that Orc tattoo concept was BONKERS!!!

E just didn't have string enough wording to go with some decent concepts.

Swerve.