if you never say goodbye

[dead man]

simple

safety latch. the basement ballroom
dancing wolves to leaky cauldrons
great exalted, ye of faithful fortune. make me wanted
if you wish. i've traced
you often onto desktops with a razor from
my father's cupboard. made you paper cranes and
bought you supper. sent you love in silent wonder
whisper me your darkness i could shiver
here for years and smile. listen to you wax romance
through rotary receiver dial
how do you mean? i ask this every night
a coward in sheepskin. chained ourselves
to any missing link evolving between us
count me in, coach i'm ready to play. set in my praises
dreaming of some end-stage we may
never attain. i placed an envelope on our gravestones
with a letter that i copy and pasted
all it said, more or less
was see you later

[El Muffin]

This was a quirky one

Something about the way you were doing those continuations that made it “ quirky “ for me

Probably just the mongoloid way I’ve been indoctrinated into perceiving a verse Cause most of your shit is beyond fluid. So obviously it’s intentional . That being said? Good stuff as always . I’m more so ridiculing my own perspective

[El Muffin]

My apologies. Yeah I should of approached it different .

I see what you are doing

[corleone]

^ true crackhead.

cool verse.

[dead man]

lol no apology necessary muffin thanks

[Pharaohs Army]

This reads more like an unpolished note when compared to some of your bangers. Few spots had rhyme droughts as well. Don't know if I'm a fan of the disjointed lines.

Don't take that the wrong way. You've got all the talent to make a better one.

[big baby]

lol dm
you didn't put the rhyme in the end of the line

so it not good and it doesn't rhyme apparently

ppl stoop af.


anyway, loved this! message+content> rhyme scheme any day of the damn week.

always loved the nostalgia you nested in each little writing you let us read. great stuff as yujual.


i will admit you seemed to chsnge up the thematic element towards the end but stayed on guard and focused. was dope. thanks for lighting the scene

[dead man]

Love ya bb