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Geno
01-23-2014, 05:57 AM
Loving you was an easy design, easy as pie
Now I love you so much that it easts me alive
You call it creepy and wrong, and that you see me at fault
But I don't understand how you could fucking leave me at all
You know you laugh when I'm there, and all the passions apparent
Cause when I'm fucking you it's nothing you can pass as comparent
You ask me to leave, please, its cause your ass in them jeans..
Is what you want me to grab when your sexy ass is asleep
You can't hide the facts when I see it, but you calling me crazy
When a couple months ago you took all of these babies
But your already dating some fucking fagot who's cowardly
Well ill be doing me whenever you come back to reality
Cause I'm a maintenance man, who fucking hates this plan
Who's gonna wait for you until his fucking patience can't!!
...Take it no more, im damn near game to abort
Except for my daughter, she won't let me break anymore.

Chorus 2x's
Yo..
This love shit ain't a game
Its been fucking with my brain
Since I've met you and swept you, and you just left, you said F you!
..I ain't fuckin been the same

This is crazy intense, I'm still stuck way in my head
Never knew a love like this that would hate me to death
Makes me depressed, thinkin bout her beautiful esssence
Put a hole in my heart that made room for a tenant
And the rent isnt cheap, but you gotta make you a plan
Cause there's to much damage for a maintenance man
Can't wait to fix what's broken, and your hopes are high
But your love's one sided, and your hope's to die
You've got a rope to climb, leaves your arms in knots
You've fallen head over heels,, and its hard to stop
From this awful drop, but I still need you as my wife
I'd do it all again to, even though you've ruined my life
Cause I stay true to my shit, feel we're born to connect
but your killing me softly, and ima keep loyal til death
This world is a mess, hoping you change after a while
If your ever upset, I got your back with a laugh or a smile
The physical attraction is wild, the girl of my dreams
When I woke up though, you werent that important to me

Chorus 2x's
Yo..
This love shit ain't a game
Its been fucking with my brain
Since I've met you and swept you, and you just left, you said F you!
..I ain't fuckin been the same

Everyone sings a sad song at somepoint in our lives
When your hearts been torn out, with guns pointed inside
Fuck it, form in a line, let's all kill a bitch to my words
Drink liquer, drive drunk, and build bridges to burn
If your sick and fuckin tired of living undesired
Get high with a bigger assortment of different drugs than I am
Until everything around you's a little more compliant
Date rape a bitch and fucking figure four her hymen
I'm a maintenance man nowadays, fixing broken hearts
Choking broads, coke and mirrors, smoking stones of raw
Open toes get razor bladed, jaded, broken toes get lost
Walk it off now bitch, the same way you've blown me off
All my love lost soldiers unite when I flow on the mic
Or at the fucking tity bar where sluts choke on the pipe
Where a couple bucks might get you laid for cheap
Where the bitches doing drugs share the same pain as me
But her pains only as deep as her pussy cavern is
If your maintenance man to, fuck that trashy bitch!!!

Chorus 2x's
Yo..
This love shit ain't a game
Its been fucking with my brain
Since I've met you and swept you, and you just left, you said F you!
..I ain't fuckin been the same

Exis
01-23-2014, 10:59 AM
Loving you was an easy design, easy as pie
Now I love you so much that it easts me alive

^^You meant eat right? Good openin' tho.

Cause I'm a maintenance man, who fucking hates this plan
Who's gonna wait for you until his fucking patience can't!!
...Take it no more, im damn near game to abort
Except for my daughter, she won't let me break anymore.

^^Chea.

Open toes get razor bladed, jaded, broken toes get lost
Walk it off now bitch, the same way you've blown me off

^^Lol.

Nice shit man...I commented on the second verse already I think so I didn't pull out anything' from that section here.Great emotion is found in all 3 parts, and this would fly in audio...hated the chorus tho lol.It fits the verse just thought it was kinda dull in comparison to everythin' else, that's nitpickin' at it's finest tho as this is tight Geno...really liked it fam.

Stay uppity.

Geno
01-23-2014, 03:45 PM
Thanks man. M not a big fan of the chorus yet either. Gotta twrk it some.. but it'll be catchy when it done

Verb
01-23-2014, 10:28 PM
The chorus seems kind of awkward but I feel you could salvage it.

This is crazy intense, I'm still stuck way in my head
Never knew a love like this that would hate me to death
Makes me depressed, thinkin bout her beautiful esssence
Put a hole in my heart that made room for a tenant
And the rent isnt cheap, but you gotta make you a plan
Cause there's to much damage for a maintenance man
Can't wait to fix what's broken, and your hopes are high
But your love's one sided, and your hope's to die


I love this right here.


overall the verses flowed well and had good content but it lack multis which I would have liked to see more of but all in all this was sweet man.

Pent uP
01-23-2014, 10:36 PM
WTF?!^

big baby
01-24-2014, 05:37 PM
lol @ her sleeping in her jeans. This was cool. Very structured as always geno.