Nonsensical Crap

[Mael]

Delete this, thanks. Making some changes.

[Split]

Yesssss... Let the paragraphs flow through you


syncopated. like that shit. the opener was strongest, though "island life taught us life was stupid" and "I'm a guy whose shoes is tied with toothpicks" were two above average lines. didnt change up your schemes enough, paragraphs feel stale if you're not shuffling them around enough


good shit, ill be watching you...

[Mael]

Yesssss... Let the paragraphs flow through you


syncopated. like that shit. the opener was strongest, though "island life taught us life was stupid" and "I'm a guy whose shoes is tied with toothpicks" were two above average lines. didnt change up your schemes enough, paragraphs feel stale if you're not shuffling them around enough


good shit, ill be watching you...

Aye cheers for the feed, mate.

Yeah, I spent about an hour just fucking with the same rhyme schemes, definitely will switch it up for my next piece. This was more of a freestyle paragraph (like you said), so appreciate it.