Week 10 Chat/Matchups/Rankings

[El Muffin]

Broke im going to make a concerted effort to stop clogging threads nxt week

Lol sawy

[BROKE LESNAR]

Originally Posted by Muff Diggity

Broke im going to make a concerted effort to stop clogging threads nxt week

Lol sawy

lmao don't worry I don't really care what happens after each bar is posted

[theMuzzl3]

I'll be back next time, and hopefully next time my lines won't be limited by 2 minutes of my time.

[theMuzzl3]

Originally Posted by BROKE LESNAR

Now, Muzzl3.

Your set up was awesome. They have been getting better and better. "Tomb registered minutes ago" was you vaguely setting up your concept. "his heart still beating in the womb" was you elaborating on the concept and supporting it with a subtle misdirected description, which is good.

"I assume there's no limits to the room; time for netcees to give the broom" wasted EVERYTHING you built upon in the setup. It had nothing to do with the concept you initially set in the opener. This line should have been used to deliver the punchline you were subtly hinting towards, instead you disregarded all the hard work you put into the concept. Don't assume anything. "no limits to the room" - are you referring to how many ppl are allowed in the hospital room during childbirth? If so, I get it. But this doesn't belong here. You aren't assuming ANYTHING when you're dissing somebody (of course you are). You know for a FACT Tomb is new to NC. You know for a FACT he is still green. Having limits in a room does nothing to progress your concept and NC giving him the broom is as light as a punch as you can get. You might as well have given him a 10 minute timeout on the couch while being hand-fed grapes and feathered by bratz dolls for being a pretentious faggot. Also, you didn't need to throw the "room" word in there to rhyme. It was unnecessary. You know what Muff talks ab with slant rhymes? Practice that.

It's either

blah blah rhyme, blah blah blah rhyme
blaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahbhbhblaaaah blaaaaah blah rhyme

or

blaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahbhbhblaaaah blah rhyme
blajajalajs hesitation, blalalalallakallalaahahahahaha rhyme

Don't put two rhymes the way you did in the second line (closer). It cripples whatever impact you were hoping for.

Your words are helpful, but I tend to disagree with the blah rhyme blah part. Playing with words should be wordplay and it shouldn't be limited to some fixed structure… all though I do see your point and I will write lines according to those structures, more often.

"limits to the room" referred to limits of space within the womb (or in this case, limits to members taking up space on netcees). It was word play and metaphorical. I'm surprised no one got it. Giving him the broom would represent kicking him off of the site, or his mother giving birth to him.

Originally Posted by Camp Bell

ehh...

both of these were wack but had maa potential to be dope
muzzle, it was just boring, get the broom and do what?
whats the limits in the room, how does all that tie into him
being in the womb? you have to be more creative.

I guess leaving shit open to interpretation is not so able to be done here…. giving someone the broom means giving them the boot. Limit to room refers to him being too big to be in the womb, or to fat to be on nettles.



In conclusion: I accept my loss without any hesitation, that votes were based on content without discrimination. I did have two lines in my head at one point that would have gone over well, but I was on the toilet with no pen & paper.


@BROKE LESNAR @Camp Bell

[BROKE LESNAR]

Originally Posted by theMuzzl3

Your words are helpful, but I tend to disagree with the blah rhyme blah part. Playing with words should be wordplay and it shouldn't be limited to some fixed structure… all though I do see your point and I will write lines according to those structures, more often.

"limits to the room" referred to limits of space within the womb (or in this case, limits to members taking up space on netcees). It was word play and metaphorical. I'm surprised no one got it. Giving him the broom would represent kicking him off of the site, or his mother giving birth to him.




I guess leaving shit open to interpretation is not so able to be done here…. giving someone the broom means giving them the boot. Limit to room refers to him being too big to be in the womb, or to fat to be on nettles.



In conclusion: I accept my loss without any hesitation, that votes were based on content without discrimination. I did have two lines in my head at one point that would have gone over well, but I was on the toilet with no pen & paper.


@BROKE LESNAR @Camp Bell

You assume there's no limits to the room. Okay that clears it up somewhat. What you're doing is using topical metaphors in a text battle format. Which isn't going to work. And I've never in my life heard of childbirth being referred to as being given the broom. I think it would work more in your favor, since you're trying to be a better rapper and translate what you're doing in text to what you will be doing in audio, if you did AOWL. By all means, you don't have to take my advice or anybody elses, I could give a shit if you do. Alot of ppl don't take advice anymore. They just find an excuse to negate it. So I'm not surprised. But I will tell you this, if you don't compromise, you will lose every single battle on this site.

[theMuzzl3]

I will (compromise), except for in AOWL.

And, thank you for taking the time to give me clear advice.

[BROKE LESNAR]

If we can get all the battles voted on by tonight then I will put the new battles up late in the evening, early Wednesday AM.

[Defiant]

Expect my retirement thread in the morning guys

[BROKE LESNAR]

Originally Posted by Defiant

Expect my retirement thread in the morning guys

lmao don't be so hard on urself

[YDK]

Originally Posted by Muff Diggity

AIDS ISNT FUNNY YDK



Lol

i was half asleep an just posted a no show bar...but you're right aids aint funny. but stiktas aids are

[Tic]

@murda sho Bastid.

[murda sho]

*emoji with sunglasses on*

[Tic]

Haha good battle.

[Packed Graves]

Originally Posted by Tic Tac

Haha good battle.

sup champ.

[theMuzzl3]

Originally Posted by Defiant

Expect my retirement thread in the morning guys

Don't quit.

[Tic]

Originally Posted by Packed Graves

sup champ.

Sup homie, congrats to you as well ; )

[El Muffin]

Originally Posted by Tic Tac

Sup homie, congrats to you as well ; )

Uhuh..I see u rb niggas


Winking


Sending subliminals



I see u niggas

[Tic]

Originally Posted by Muff Diggity

Uhuh..I see u rb niggas


Winking


Sending subliminals



I see u niggas

Lol I see you too, Muff. Ya dig?

[El Muffin]

TARGETS ACQUIRED

[Packed Graves]

Originally Posted by Muff Diggity

TARGETS ACQUIRED

RB is just a stepping stone, like nc.