06-18-2015, 10:39 PM | #1 |
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SHADOW BOXING - Artificial vs Dre {Dre wins by KO}
Artificial
Imma true player tho, gotta beat the girls off with a stick... While u should stick to beating off to girls who don't even know u exist. Im being honest kid, u look monstrous.. On the flip... You should stick to beating off on girls who haven't regained consciousness. U racist faggit, everything bout u a lie, believe it... Cause when his family feud..u hosting a tall bald black guy the reason. Imma seasoned vet, been thru many a campaign n go hard... Only one this dude been thru was riding 'round stickn signs in ur front yard. I put this square in a hole when the heater pops... U hear the pop when i put a hole in this square..speaker box. Shadow boxing? I'm heavy handed, got the right cocked... Fight u in rain or snow..then leave u bleeding in it like the nights watch. Dre You livin a fantasy lifestyle, he’s NEVER placed his hands on triggers, Listen; If you’re EVER holdin Atreyu copped the never ending story action figure. I got gun bars for days, but only need hands to leave son scar’d & maimed, My fist’ll roll your frame so quick, it’ll put ANY high performance car to shame. His chick a hoe & BEEN AROUND, but he think her sex is bomb or hot… shit, Your girls pussy’s such a joke, when she spreads a circus tent an clowns hop out it. I stay beaten dudes, so this geek is through once I bring the heat to you, It’s ironic, I always got my face ‘n a pussy… & HUSH put you in line to be eaten too. You love MMA? HA! I’ve molded greats, 1 swift kick’ll cause bones to break, 1st, I’m catch you w/ a leg sweep & take your Cavs out the game like Golden State. My flows insane… you just wack & a clown that’ll get smashed to the ground, Honestly, if He be G, Bz? that’s the feelin female’s get when this faggots around.
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06-18-2015, 11:06 PM | #2 |
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Imma true player tho, gotta beat the girls off with a stick...
While u should stick to beating off to girls who don't even know u exist. Nice swag to this but wasn't a harsh hit Im being honest kid, u look monstrous.. On the flip... You should stick to beating off on girls who haven't regained consciousness. Eh nah U racist faggit, everything bout u a lie, believe it... Cause when his family feud..u hosting a tall bald black guy the reason. This is the kind of thing you don't do in this format tourney. You ended up facing a bald black dude. And the wording was shitty. Imma seasoned vet, been thru many a campaign n go hard... Only one this dude been thru was riding 'round stickn signs in ur front yard. Okay idea but wasn't heavy, no sting I put this square in a hole when the heater pops... U hear the pop when i put a hole in this square..speaker box. Okay gunbar, don't like the Drake delivery. Shadow boxing? I'm heavy handed, got the right cocked... Fight u in rain or snow..then leave u bleeding in it like the nights watch. Not a great flip on this idea, no one says rain or snow, it's rain or shine. vs You livin a fantasy lifestyle, he’s NEVER placed his hands on triggers, Listen; If you’re EVER holdin Atreyu copped the never ending story action figure. Pretty dope lol I got gun bars for days, but only need hands to leave son scar’d & maimed, My fist’ll roll your frame so quick, it’ll put ANY high performance car to shame. Kind of cool but didn't hit for me. Idk. His chick a hoe & BEEN AROUND, but he think her sex is bomb or hot… shit, Your girls pussy’s such a joke, when she spreads a circus tent an clowns hop out it. Nah I stay beaten dudes, so this geek is through once I bring the heat to you, It’s ironic, I always got my face ‘n a pussy… & HUSH put you in line to be eaten too. Ehh, swaggy bar but concept was kind of lame and a bit played You love MMA? HA! I’ve molded greats, 1 swift kick’ll cause bones to break, 1st, I’m catch you w/ a leg sweep & take your Cavs out the game like Golden State. Pretty good, the you love MMA bit wasn't very generic though so takes from it here My flows insane… you just wack & a clown that’ll get smashed to the ground, Honestly, if He be G, Bz? that’s the feelin female’s get when this faggots around. Forced and corny Vote: Amen |
06-18-2015, 11:13 PM | #3 |
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06-19-2015, 03:34 AM | #4 |
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Art...So I wasn't really feeling your opening bars to begin with
and as I progressed I feel like you were just dropping random line I'm sure this would be impressive in a 'swag' battle, possibly but a lot of the lines just weren't hard hitting enough to me... Dre, thanks for the promotion in your first few bars bruh.. smooth little punch thrown in there to match too I think your best bar was the MMA/NBA punch..thats your strongest bar really otherwise I think you get this with 2 harder hitting punches the rest of it just seemed like filler but nice work.. v/Dre
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06-19-2015, 07:06 AM | #5 |
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Imma true player tho, gotta beat the girls off with a stick...
While u should stick to beating off to girls who don't even know u exist. ^aaaite Im being honest kid, u look monstrous.. On the flip... You should stick to beating off on girls who haven't regained consciousness. ^concept wasn't good enough for two lines i think. standalone this woulda been more impactful. also, rhyme is kinda awkward for me. shud'a been monstrous, bitch or smth. but i see the humor. so yea. kinda dece U racist faggit, everything bout u a lie, believe it... Cause when his family feud..u hosting a tall bald black guy the reason. ^u hosting a guy the reason? uhm. yea. this needed to be cleaned up Imma seasoned vet, been thru many a campaign n go hard... Only one this dude been thru was riding 'round stickn signs in ur front yard. ^okay. was decent I put this square in a hole when the heater pops... U hear the pop when i put a hole in this square..speaker box. ^this had nice rhymes. concept was good too. very solid line Shadow boxing? I'm heavy handed, got the right cocked... Fight u in rain or snow..then leave u bleeding in it like the nights watch. ^well, if ur connection is just leaving someone in the snow then it's too loose a connection. if u also tried to do a snow wp, then u didn't reference that anymore. cud'a been like, "then leave this bastard bleeding..." or smth. but the concept overall wasn't bad vs. You livin a fantasy lifestyle, he’s NEVER placed his hands on triggers, Listen; If you’re EVER holdin Atreyu copped the never ending story action figure. ^cool I got gun bars for days, but only need hands to leave son scar’d & maimed, My fist’ll roll your frame so quick, it’ll put ANY high performance car to shame. ^aaaight His chick a hoe & BEEN AROUND, but he think her sex is bomb or hot… shit, Your girls pussy’s such a joke, when she spreads a circus tent an clowns hop out it. ^eh, kinda weak connection. also her pussy is a joke? & the rhyme was awkward cuz the syllables didn't match I stay beaten dudes, so this geek is through once I bring the heat to you, It’s ironic, I always got my face ‘n a pussy… & HUSH put you in line to be eaten too. ^okay You love MMA? HA! I’ve molded greats, 1 swift kick’ll cause bones to break, 1st, I’m catch you w/ a leg sweep & take your Cavs out the game like Golden State. ^yea, this is cool My flows insane… you just wack & a clown that’ll get smashed to the ground, Honestly, if He be G, Bz? that’s the feelin female’s get when this faggots around. ^Bz? as in Bs? as in Bros? it wooorks, but it's not the smoothest. still a decent line this was not a bad read. i was being critical in the breakdown, but both verses had some nice lines. so props yall. that said, dre had atreyu and cavs which i both thought were nice, one of them being lotb, doesnt rly matter which one. art had speaker box which i also thought was pretty cool. but in the end, dre had two hits to one, and also the better ones. so he takes this. good shit yall on showing so early. v/dre |
06-19-2015, 07:28 AM | #6 |
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First 6 lines of Artificials were swings and misses for me, tbh. I didnt even know text 'remixes' like that were even a thing, so I guess I got to give him some points on creativity at least lol
I dunno, didnt feel like much 'hit' for me in the verse. Maybe they went over my head or something, but yeah... I didnt feel like much needed quoting. Amen had the Atreyu, face in a pussy and clown shit I thought were solid enough. I wasn't a huge fan of the Cavs thing as i've seen the idea used before and the closer was a little stretched I guess, but I can still appreciate the originality of it. Anyway, Amen got this... pretty comfortably IMO... |
06-20-2015, 09:54 AM | #7 |
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Opener, campaign was decent and speaker box was pretty cool.
Vs. Atreyu was fire, clowns and Cavs was dope. See takes this for having stronger punches. That Atreyu was dopeee. Art had some pretty good lines too, but they didn't hit as hard. Dre got it. |
06-20-2015, 09:54 AM | #8 |
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Campaign, speaker box
vs Opener, cavs, & hebgibz Cool battle, not the best but nonetheless decent. Art didnt really have any fire in his verse, speaker joint was borderline quotable. I liked dres cavs flip n closer was pretty cool V/ - dre |
06-20-2015, 10:09 AM | #9 |
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open is ok 2nd line cool that you continued on from first line. Not hard but 8mpressive. family feud. nope. Campaign ok speaker box I'd ok concept kinda corny execution tho w/ the hesitation..I'd rather say No instead of ... I learned my lesson long time ago w/ a schoolbus driver line closer. Recycled from nbl. Nooope andres. Open was cool af. I like it alot 2nd line. There go u n tictac w/ these tuner car shit. Stop watching fast n furious lol. It'd ok hush eatin. Was slick how it was worded cavs was cool he b G, bz? Was gay ad fuck if u do that again ima slap u with a tube of neosporin The sharp side I got amen winning this. Just stronger showing imho V/chap stick chapo
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06-20-2015, 02:04 PM | #10 |
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[QUOTE=Hush;493050]Artificial
Imma true player tho, gotta beat the girls off with a stick... While u should stick to beating off to girls who don't even know u exist. Lol okay Im being honest kid, u look monstrous.. On the flip... You should stick to beating off on girls who haven't regained consciousness. Lol U racist faggit, everything bout u a lie, believe it... Cause when his family feud..u hosting a tall bald black guy the reason. Heh Imma seasoned vet, been thru many a campaign n go hard... Only one this dude been thru was riding 'round stickn signs in ur front yard. Nah I put this square in a hole when the heater pops... U hear the pop when i put a hole in this square..speaker box. Slick Shadow boxing? I'm heavy handed, got the right cocked... Fight u in rain or snow..then leave u bleeding in it like the nights watch. Ehh Dre You livin a fantasy lifestyle, he On my life i fixed it. If you preview post it fucks it up. V art Cavs was cool but circus was a bad miss from dre. Could go either way. Last edited by Greed; 06-21-2015 at 12:21 AM. |
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vs opener, leg sweep wasn't feeling much from art, amen had a couple ok ones enough to take the w v/dre |
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