Infiltration 1-1 vs ribbit 1-1 {Infiltration wins}

[Hush]

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Rules

Due Dates:

• Verses are due Thursday, July 16th 2015 11:59 PM PST. and will be open until the following Sunday
• Battles that lack votes may close later.
• One sided battles may get closed early.
• Extensions are 24 hours

Line Limit:

• Minimum of 12, maximum of 18
• If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first

For additional Rules refer to rule thread


First to 5, win by at least two votes

@Infiltration 1-1 vs @ribbit 1-1

[ribbit]

Check

[Saint]

Yea 12

[ribbit]

Bitch please. U aint ready this week. And this not no beef
But you'll still end up giving ya moms grief and end up with false teeth
Ya lines are weak punchlines that knock u off your feet.
This like the cool kids nagging on the geeks or floating upstream
Ya flows be redundant nah you a rat I'm gonna cook in my oven
I'd call you a player but ya mommas already spread herself wide open
And fuck it if I gotta drop more when u ain't even gonna post til tomorrow
Since I can't rashinalize a better place for you to drop....out of the top floor
Its agonizing to say the least but your in my belly cuz I'm a beast
You more of an indoors kinda pussy ya cuz u too bitch to get released
Oh snap less we forget my potency which got u struck all of a sudden.
Pussy please dont show since ull be seeing stars like a comet
@Infiltration

[Saint]

Smh..


I'm vintage raw; with ur battle record kill urself & end it all
At this point...ya loss column NOT seein a 9 couldn't be saved by Benfords Law.
My layered shits too dimensional, ya content is crude n minimal
Wording & punches just land-flat together...that shows their two dimensional.
Ya moneys short rib, while my cash so long its hard to measure
u old baroque ass nigga, im rich enough to own a palace w/ that architecture.
LGBT all on fb... N i support marriage even tho I'm type hetero
My gay awareness says there's more men between ribbons than pride festivals.
Late night all black attire, we ride out and let them things pop..
We live by the motto "suns out, guns out"... Without the gay ass summer tank top.
Ur social lifes on support, someone pull the plug on this faggot..
nerd gets a + for charisma...when rollin stats in games of dungeons and dragons.

[Hush]

Originally Posted by ribbit

Bitch please. U aint ready this week. And this not no beef
But you'll still end up giving ya moms grief and end up with false teeth
this is a ok rhyme but its not really a punchline. do u watch kotd dont flop or url? they would help u better understand what a effective diss sounds like.. this is what is basically called "filler"
Ya lines are weak punchlines that knock u off your feet.
This like the cool kids nagging on the geeks or floating upstream
same as above
Ya flows be redundant nah you a rat I'm gonna cook in my oven
I'd call you a player but ya mommas already spread herself wide open
ok, this sorta dont make sense to me dude, but it almost feels like u tried to punchline so cool
And fuck it if I gotta drop more when u ain't even gonna post til tomorrow
Since I can't rashinalize a better place for you to drop....out of the top floor
dope slant rhyme..this was a punchline too. try to do more of this bro
Its agonizing to say the least but your in my belly cuz I'm a beast
You more of an indoors kinda pussy ya cuz u too bitch to get released
lol ok cool
Oh snap less we forget my potency which got u struck all of a sudden.
Pussy please dont show since ull be seeing stars like a comet
nah,but now I see u know what a punchline is. dont do filler next week bro

@Infiltration

Originally Posted by Infiltration

Smh..


I'm vintage raw; with ur battle record kill urself & end it all
At this point...ya loss column NOT seein a 9 couldn't be saved by Benfords Law.
lol what? I aint goggling that
My layered shits too dimensional, ya content is crude n minimal
Wording & punches just land-flat together...that shows their two dimensional.
k
Ya moneys short rib, while my cash so long its hard to measure
u old baroque ass nigga, im rich enough to own a palace w/ that architecture.
yeah that I know.. ok cool. I like that ur on some different shit
LGBT all on fb... N i support marriage even tho I'm type hetero
My gay awareness says there's more men between ribbons than pride festivals.
ok
Late night all black attire, we ride out and let them things pop..
We live by the motto "suns out, guns out"... Without the gay ass summer tank top.
ok cool. lol funny to see a boroque line, then a line about some science shit i never heard of, then a dope gun line.. but I cant hate I enjoy the variance
Ur social lifes on support, someone pull the plug on this faggot..
nerd gets a + for charisma...when rollin stats in games of dungeons and dragons.
lol funny dope

Inf got this

[Amen.]

moms grief was wack
naggin wack
player had potential but you kept it basic and wack
drop was dumb... and wack
indoor pussy basic, simple and wack
closer wtf? sudden and comet don't even rhyme

vs

benfords law was ok
flat together was ok
didn't like baroque
didn't like the gay awareness play either
suns out guns out swag type bar not a punch
dung and drags was mild

Inf got this easy ribbit garbage

[Useless]

Aite ribbit, I think ur like a 12 yr old kid who's tryna get a grasp on this shit. Really sometimes with some of the shit u write its like u a 9 yr old lol. Real talk.

u had a couple punch lines in ur verse. I was pleasantly surprised. I think ur starting to figure out how to form a punch, u got the flow part down now concentrate on getting ur concepts and shit up bro.

Ur social lifes on support, someone pull the plug on this faggot..
nerd gets a + for charisma...when rollin stats in games of dungeons and dragons.

This was LOTB. Played concept but a dope lulzy flip. Good shit. I liked ur verse too it was pretty consistent, I think u only had one strait up miss. Good shit bro

V. Infiltration

[Bash]

N/A

Vs

2 dimensional, summer tank top, closer

V/Inf. Ribbit should use alil more creative n set his concepts up better.

[Mr. J]

And fuck it if I gotta drop more when u ain't even gonna post til tomorrow
Since I can't rashinalize a better place for you to drop....out of the top floor
Its agonizing to say the least but your in my belly cuz I'm a beast
You more of an indoors kinda pussy ya cuz u too bitch to get released
^^^^
I think this was the stronger point of your verse that stuck out to me
it seems more along the line of punchlines. as for the rest it seemed filler ish to me
that opener is more bragging than really trying to attack your opponent
your job as a battler is to attack the other person in a way that it makes sense
I feel like if you paid attention to some more battles you'd understand how a set up and punch works
maybe peep some of the top tier battlers who have paved the way with some of their lines
focus more on reading lines rather than trying to get a vote in and analyze how the lines come together...y'know?

Infiltration.....I'm not going to quote anything because overall you obliterated your opponent
with that being said you had a pretty smooth verse as opposed to your opponent who seemed unprepared...
@ribbit, I feel like you need to work on your punchlines more & focus on delivering a hard hitting verse
like I said read more on each battle & try to decipher what each line means instead of just voting to vote
make yourself more in tune with the happenings around you & not what's happening with you...y'know

[Pinot Grij]

Yo ribbit - a little advice, homey. Your lines can improve by referencing another concept within the couplet. Most of your verse was not relatable line to line or even within a line. The only time you accomplished that was twice:

Since I can't rashinalize a better place for you to drop....out of the top floor

Right? Like, tying the concept of dropping a verse to dropping someone's body off the top floor is at least a style of wordplay with a little depth to it

Its agonizing to say the least but your in my belly cuz I'm a beast

Again, belly of the beast - you're using some semblance of wordplay here but it's just a start... elaborate on that kind of stuff and you'll see improvement. Otherwise, this verse was dogshit.

Infiltration - this was a clinic. Ribbit - take notes. Baroque... type hetero/pride festival was a cool rhyme sequence...Dungeons & Dragons. This was an easy win.

Vote -- Infiltration

[Ace]

drop and release was aight.. just need to formulate more punches.. inf was overall more consistant.. closer, baroque was type braggadocio and pride.. all solid

v inf