Round One: Johnny 6-Feet vs Blue Bayou - JOHNNY 6-FEET WINS!

Razah · 09-11-2020, 02:59 PM

I’m driving with her purse, a gun in my hand feeling like Madea

Lol, that made me laugh.

Not sure how I feel about a rape story. Or, how it ties into the picture. The flow was there, wordplay, well worded, except, for the worsened bar..

Idk, it was written well. I just don't like the idea behind it or how I don't see how it matched the topic.

Johnny;

Evenings swimming in rage, drinking my bank account dry

Sanctuary in my silver screens, their glow a brilliant sheen
Broadcast subliminal whispers to the ears of willing teens

I liked those lines.

Anger / answer not rhyming threw the flow off. It was smoooth until then.

Overall, really solid verse. This tied into the topic very well. Enjoyable read.

vJohnny

09-11-2020, 02:59 PM	#15
Razah rockkFresh Join Date: Apr 2015 Location: Chicago. Posts: 1,088 Battle Record: 8-10 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 11328542	I’m driving with her purse, a gun in my hand feeling like Madea Lol, that made me laugh. Not sure how I feel about a rape story. Or, how it ties into the picture. The flow was there, wordplay, well worded, except, for the worsened bar.. Idk, it was written well. I just don't like the idea behind it or how I don't see how it matched the topic. Johnny; Evenings swimming in rage, drinking my bank account dry Sanctuary in my silver screens, their glow a brilliant sheen Broadcast subliminal whispers to the ears of willing teens I liked those lines. Anger / answer not rhyming threw the flow off. It was smoooth until then. Overall, really solid verse. This tied into the topic very well. Enjoyable read. vJohnny