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quick key.
To you all I’m a veteran, to Kelly I’m Baz With maturity beckoning and a wedding to plan. Never looked back since greeting her eyes Its like destiny had a meeting of mynds. As the years have gone by ive been mellowing out My careers on the rise & im settled no doubt Content with the house and place that we live Windmill Crescents astounding & great for our kids. Its changed me a bit, mostly I’m finding In the way that I think and motives behind it. Im no longer hiding behind a façade Or gloating at hijinks from nights at the bar. The fights I would start, scraps I got beat, I still find it bizarre I haven’t lost teeth! No man can stop me of their own accord With my hands at godspeed - I’ll go through walls. Even though I’m small, got a lions heart in my chest This broken jaw just proves I’m as hard as it gets. The barmiest yet, snorted lines of enormous size 4 and a half gram within seconds, & more then besides Walked Billy Wright with a bloodied stuffy nose and ordered the guys a double rum and coke. now I’m cuddled up at home with jack squat to do doing nothing, just the soaps on constant view horror movie collection that grows by the day aint gotta prove shit, been stood over the grates. Let go of the brakes, freewheeling through life still prone to mistakes, but this here’s the realest I’ll write. Cuz I’m holding the aces, & I’ll only deal when its right… 29.
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Happy birthday. Glad to see that your life is coming together like this. It would make sense that I should start doing the same. Dating is a more fun alternative.
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hahah we old out here. nice verse bruv. i know u wrote this hella quick which makes it even more impressive. smoother than always. on some grown man shit haha. liked the realness factor, pretty funny and honest. good stuff as always old pal. happy belated homie!
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Good stuff my nikka
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true story... keystyled on the bus NO DOUBT, very enjoyable read, upbeat and dope
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Nice...humor was a stand out, had some nice shit in here...sorry can't quote anythin' atm but the middle section was tight imo..the top and bottom be solid.
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The flow to the piece is really interesting..
that short catch of breath you need to take the way the piece unfolds into a opportunistic setting how you linked the words and ideas together was nice happy belated
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