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Old 03-16-2015, 02:37 AM   #1
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Default Playoffs! Round 1: 4. CopyPat vs. 13. Defiant \\ CopyPat wins 6-0



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The Basics | Read the full rules here.

Check-ins are required by Wednesday, March 18, at 11:59 p.m. PT.

Verses are due Sunday, March 22, at 11:59 p.m. PT. Extensions of up to 24 hours are available upon request.

Votes are due Wednesday, March 25, at 11:59 p.m. PT. Each competitor must vote on three battles, with a penalty of one vote for every missed vote.

Verses may not exceed 48 lines or 650 words unless agreed upon by the opponent.

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Good luck, @CopyPat and @Defiant.
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Old 03-25-2015, 12:10 AM   #2
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I'm down with pornography, I'm downloading constantly
Find a chick I like and then I browse her discography
My browser is lava heat from suitable bitches
I’m Bowser just conquering a beautiful princess
And I do it relentless because I’m truly addicted
Remember back when porno sites just used to be pictures
But now it’s stupidly big clips I find when I’m clickin
And I don’t touch a vid unless it’s high definition
Because I’m on a mission in search of perfection
Takes a really great movie now to urge an erection
I fiend for tall chicks who skinny, petite, but not in the titties
With feet that gotta be pretty, cause I’ve seen it all and I'm picky!
I’m seeding lots and I’m getting an enormous collection
Should see the broads that I’ve got all in my torrent selections
For porn it’s like heaven, yet I’m never quite satisfied
Always craving more, so I’m whetting my appetite
I'm getting aroused tonight; I’ll find a way to get it
Got a hankering for nudity and Pirate Bay’s the ticket
I’ll find a babe I’m diggin, just concentrate a bit
And sift through all the garbage till I’ve got her greatest hits
My compilation’s sickness but it’s never complete
Until I cop the latest bitches all in 1080P
The perfect movie doesn't exist, and until I discover it
I’ll just keep looking, cause the fun’s in the hungriness
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Old 03-25-2015, 02:13 AM   #3
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I remember working, 9 to 5 and saturdays too
Daydreaming at my desk to thoughts that would amaze you
It wasnt a phase 2, i hated my life at home
I had my choice of women, why didnt I leave my wife alone
She'd constantly moan, but not the type that every man desires to hear
but i ache for this life back so do i require a tear?
A trip of a lifetime is where I was sure id reside
but its ironic, after everything youre the one I adore by my side
Sure I have lied, but existence as a recluse I distain
Why did we go? Why didnt we refuse to go on that plane?
why did we take that flight? Why do only the strong survive?
Why did we leave everyone else? Why didnt we drive?
My disobedience has cost us, the others were unfortunately right
Being stubborn means its just me and you alone, every night
Its funny now my hunger now for u is extreme
A look ive never given you, the force of attraction likes drugs to a phene
Now im stuck on this island with a stack of bones and this seat 2
I mean who else can I talk to,....my hunger means ive eaten you
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Old 03-25-2015, 11:40 AM   #4
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Defiant - Haha. A good deceit that has some clever hints looking back - the moans for instance. A plane crashes and the husband resorts to cannablism. Thats what I got. Syntactically, your wording was strange and sentence structure was weird, but I guess you were fitting it into the rhymes. Cool, keep it up.

Copy - slick rhymes and a story anybody could relate to. Funny and well written. I don't know what else to say. No great exceptional lines but the bwoser and lava heat parts stood out relatively.

V - copy. far more better grasp on writing although defiant had a pretty dope concept. copy just outclassed him here
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Old 03-25-2015, 11:49 PM   #5
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Longer version in mag

hmmm.....IDK boys, neither verse was inspiring. Both seemed rather tossed together but Defiants more so. Pat had the humor factor while Def went for some what of shock value only left ever important imagery.


V/ Pat

He had the more developed verse and overall stronger technically.
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Old 03-26-2015, 04:09 PM   #6
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Patrick: Technically it'd be her filmography and not her discography, you doofus. Besides that this was awesome. I think we actually talked about collabing on a porn verse before but it never happened for some reason. I had the name picked out and everything. "BangBros". That's fucking brilliant, just like this shit you just dropped. It was cool. Rhyme's were rad as always. I chuckled at the 'picky' line. Cool stuff. Porn is awesome.

Defiant: The last line was the best in this, you fucking cannibal. The other lines were hurt by one or two syllables being out of place and stretching the flow a bit too much for my taste, and if the syllable count was perfect the line was just too plain. I just don't think you did enough to beat Pat this week.

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Old 03-26-2015, 07:52 PM   #7
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v/ pat.

Lmfao @ defiant's ending but the writing was pretty weak tbh. Sounded basic and forced, I've seen much, much better from you...won't hold it against you in the long run, but I will this time. Copy lmao,, sounds legit bro. Way better mechanically and while it didn't blow anyone away it was solid enough for the decisive victory with better coherence, rhymes and writing.
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Old 03-26-2015, 09:01 PM   #8
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Defiant with the effective twist lmao.

I liked that a lot.

Copy simply out wrote defiant here however and made me recall a really great standup routine. I'll link it when I remember who it was. Defiant had a better topic idea I think, but copy had stellar execution and some really entertaining humorous one liners that I simply enjoyed way further.

Sorry for the brevity folks. Great match

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Cannibalism vs Pornography, an interesting confrontation, indeed. Ah, only in this modern age do we witness the two side by side in the literi circle.

Defiant's concept was more creative, but alas the execution did not follow. Also, the rhymes were a bit basic, which CopyPat is definetely going to take advantage of, simply under the premise of his hallmark style. Thus, I give this bout to CopyPat.
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